~Right Down the Drain~
How are your pipes?65 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
Serial Killers have one method that marks them for life. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Errors: (Author's notes.)
two psychiatrists agreed that he was in good mental heath (health)
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Serial Killers have one method that marks them for life. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Errors: (Author's notes.)
two psychiatrists agreed that he was in good mental heath (health)
Comment Written 15-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Oh, thanks for pointing out that typo, Charlie. I'll get on that straight away!
I appreciate the review as well...
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You're welcome, Dean. Charlie
Comment from Ridley Williams
Move in next to me? Hey, sounds like an interesting fellow. Probably has fascinating stories about prison life, and the consequences of bringing dreams to fruition. Be a big hit at our next dinner party, which would probably be appropriate to plan around the 31st! Creepy story here, my friend. I've lived in California most of my life, this brought back some old memories,(shudder!). Well done on this seasonal treat, Bill
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Move in next to me? Hey, sounds like an interesting fellow. Probably has fascinating stories about prison life, and the consequences of bringing dreams to fruition. Be a big hit at our next dinner party, which would probably be appropriate to plan around the 31st! Creepy story here, my friend. I've lived in California most of my life, this brought back some old memories,(shudder!). Well done on this seasonal treat, Bill
Comment Written 15-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thanks a bunch, Bill!
Yeah, I'll bet we could all get some great material from this weirdo, LOL... A horror writers gold mine!
Comment from ElegantButler
A wonderful look at how the evils of the past may be visited upon the innocents of the present. And it seems that sometimes we need not wait for strange aeons.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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A wonderful look at how the evils of the past may be visited upon the innocents of the present. And it seems that sometimes we need not wait for strange aeons.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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You've got that right, Elegant Butler!
I thank you for your wonderful review...
Comment from Twilightspire
Well, this is ghastly...I love it! Riddled throughout with your amazing characterizations and gory details, this story was a bloody pleasure to read. I like the slick POV changes and the expert application if only needed details, never straying from the story. Short and wonderfully written, my friend. A great way to start my day along with a cup of Joe and a smoke.
-T.J.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Well, this is ghastly...I love it! Riddled throughout with your amazing characterizations and gory details, this story was a bloody pleasure to read. I like the slick POV changes and the expert application if only needed details, never straying from the story. Short and wonderfully written, my friend. A great way to start my day along with a cup of Joe and a smoke.
-T.J.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Hah, well, a cuppa and a smoke is most generally how I begin my day, too, my friend!
Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed this one...
Comment from Sueellen11
Wow,, this was a thriller,,, I was having thoughts of the amitive ville horror movie ,,well done,,, well deserving of the all tie best,,, blessings,,sueellen
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Wow,, this was a thriller,,, I was having thoughts of the amitive ville horror movie ,,well done,,, well deserving of the all tie best,,, blessings,,sueellen
Comment Written 15-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thanks, Sue Ellen. I'm very pleased that you feel that way!
Comment from christopherjl
HI there, your writing reminds me of someone in my writers group. It's not usually the kind of writing I like but it's engaging and keeps the reader reading. I like the jump back in time at the end.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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HI there, your writing reminds me of someone in my writers group. It's not usually the kind of writing I like but it's engaging and keeps the reader reading. I like the jump back in time at the end.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thanks so much, christopherjl. I appreciate your takes on it, even though it is not your usual genre of choice...
Comment from S A Bullen
Why do you make me read this? I hate you lol. (Still laughing out loud). Eeewwww! Grizzly and gory. Dean, it is SO well written. Sentence structures are perfect, punctuation, as far as I can see, is perfect, story is excellent (this is asking a lot from me lol). Overall, an EXCELLENT piece of writing. Now I'll go back to hating you. You truly are an amazingly talented writer. Is this where you slip me the ten? Sheryn :-(
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2013
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Why do you make me read this? I hate you lol. (Still laughing out loud). Eeewwww! Grizzly and gory. Dean, it is SO well written. Sentence structures are perfect, punctuation, as far as I can see, is perfect, story is excellent (this is asking a lot from me lol). Overall, an EXCELLENT piece of writing. Now I'll go back to hating you. You truly are an amazingly talented writer. Is this where you slip me the ten? Sheryn :-(
Comment Written 15-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2013
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Hah (**I'm really laughing here!**)...
Yep, this is where the payoff takes place. Only ten this time? Last time, it was---Uh,, never mind, ten's good, LOL...
Thanks so much for the very fine, fun review, Sheryn!
Comment from country ranch writer
do not want to think of this man as my neighbor the horror of it puts goose pimples all over yuk!!I sure do know about the Charlie Manson story and his followers and that was a nightmare case.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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do not want to think of this man as my neighbor the horror of it puts goose pimples all over yuk!!I sure do know about the Charlie Manson story and his followers and that was a nightmare case.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Yeah, that Manson case sure was a mess, wasn't it?
Thank you for the read and your review, country!
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sure was I hope he never gets out
Comment from Gregt46
Oh, if I didn't need the money! I had trouble continuing to read. You've done your job well! No errors that I could find and a very good telling of a story so good it had to be true! Or at least some of it, huh? WGT
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Oh, if I didn't need the money! I had trouble continuing to read. You've done your job well! No errors that I could find and a very good telling of a story so good it had to be true! Or at least some of it, huh? WGT
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Ha ha, well, I hope you didn't have trouble finishing because of the writing. However, if it's the subject matter that caused you so much anguish to continue, then, thank you! I did my job, LOL..
Thanks for the great review, Greg...
Comment from sherrygreywolf
Great work, my friend. Vivid imagery and believable conversations make this an easy read. You might want to add a line somewhere when the couple is talking/thinking about the house about it being the best buy in Meadow Brook (or something along that line) in order to tie the two sections of the story together. Other than that I didn't see any inconsistencies or errors. Oh - and I loved the reference to Manson, though younger readers may miss it.
Again, great job - sherry
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Great work, my friend. Vivid imagery and believable conversations make this an easy read. You might want to add a line somewhere when the couple is talking/thinking about the house about it being the best buy in Meadow Brook (or something along that line) in order to tie the two sections of the story together. Other than that I didn't see any inconsistencies or errors. Oh - and I loved the reference to Manson, though younger readers may miss it.
Again, great job - sherry
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Hey, I appreciate you reading it for me, Sherry! I will look into making more of a concise connection there, as well.
Yes, I will admit, I was a bit apprehensive about using the Charles Manson reference. But I figured, many (if not most) people have heard of him. So far, both of my reviewers have been aware of who old Charlie was, LOL... I'm just kidding, but seriously, everyone that's reviewed it thus far has known...
Thanks, again, I really appreciate it!
