Savannah Love
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Comment from Nanette Mary
wanting the money/jewellery .....
That is fine for something that is written but you are quoting spoken words and so it should be ...
wanting the money and the jewellery ....
you have - drive back Sunday, which should be - drive back on Sunday .....
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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wanting the money/jewellery .....
That is fine for something that is written but you are quoting spoken words and so it should be ...
wanting the money and the jewellery ....
you have - drive back Sunday, which should be - drive back on Sunday .....
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and the suggestions.
Comment from Anthony Crosbie
Hi Barbara. This was a smooth read and I sailed through it. I always enjoy your writing as it's so accomplished. The dialog in this was sharp and natural. Archie
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Hi Barbara. This was a smooth read and I sailed through it. I always enjoy your writing as it's so accomplished. The dialog in this was sharp and natural. Archie
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Good post, Barbara. So, they're setting a trap. Can't wait to see who or 'what' they might catch on camera. :D
Glad you're posting again, dear lady.
"When's this supposedta start workin'? - Suggest separating supposed ta
Hugs,
Av
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Good post, Barbara. So, they're setting a trap. Can't wait to see who or 'what' they might catch on camera. :D
Glad you're posting again, dear lady.
"When's this supposedta start workin'? - Suggest separating supposed ta
Hugs,
Av
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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I have made the correction. Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Sasha
This sounds like a good plan to me. I hope it works. Maybe they will get a video of the ghost too...now that would really blow Cash's mind wouldn't it?
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This sounds like a good plan to me. I hope it works. Maybe they will get a video of the ghost too...now that would really blow Cash's mind wouldn't it?
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. How are you doing? I have missed you.
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I have come back about 85 percent, which is pretty good. Hopefully, I'll be 100 percent in a week or two.
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I am sure you will.
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
This is very interesting and things are picking up, we're assuming the camera's will pick up on something the ghost does to protect the jewelry, etc. Great piece. God loves you and we do too.
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This is very interesting and things are picking up, we're assuming the camera's will pick up on something the ghost does to protect the jewelry, etc. Great piece. God loves you and we do too.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from adewpearl
typo - he could fill them it - fill them in
Setting a trap - this is getting fun. Good dialogue. I like the line about any self-respecting Braves fan believing they would all go to a game :-) Sounds like something any Phillies fan would believe if the location were here :-) Brooke
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typo - he could fill them it - fill them in
Setting a trap - this is getting fun. Good dialogue. I like the line about any self-respecting Braves fan believing they would all go to a game :-) Sounds like something any Phillies fan would believe if the location were here :-) Brooke
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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I agree. Thank you for the kind review and catching the typo. I always appreciate hearing from you.
Comment from Gungalo
Ohhh they are going to set a trap in motion to catch them. I bet they find it is after all someone they have suspected all along.
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Ohhh they are going to set a trap in motion to catch them. I bet they find it is after all someone they have suspected all along.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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I sure hope so. I hope there's nobody else involved. Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
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But who knows, right? LOL
Comment from JM daSilva
I think you chose the right picture because it's detective work, surveillance and stakeout all in one. Ilike where it's going
Some spag suggestions. You decide
Since-clauses in the beginning are followed by commas
"Since nothing's been resolved(,) Cash won't be happy about your leaving."
Stepson lost the hyphen
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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I think you chose the right picture because it's detective work, surveillance and stakeout all in one. Ilike where it's going
Some spag suggestions. You decide
Since-clauses in the beginning are followed by commas
"Since nothing's been resolved(,) Cash won't be happy about your leaving."
Stepson lost the hyphen
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I have made both corrections. Thank you for catching them.
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Great pleasure.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
Good pace to this chapter and I liked the fact you're introducing a little more 'personal' response to create the nonverbal communications. One small correction for you -
Cash stare into his mother's eyes. - missing 'd' on 'stared'
Patrick
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Hi Barbara,
Good pace to this chapter and I liked the fact you're introducing a little more 'personal' response to create the nonverbal communications. One small correction for you -
Cash stare into his mother's eyes. - missing 'd' on 'stared'
Patrick
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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I am wondering where that wayword 'd' went. LOL Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Nikitapoetry
amazing !
i loved your writing.
i felt like i am watching a cartoon movie.
each and every character is interesting.
thanks for sharing :)
keep it up !
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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amazing !
i loved your writing.
i felt like i am watching a cartoon movie.
each and every character is interesting.
thanks for sharing :)
keep it up !
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
