My Erroneous Journey
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Comment from lorijean
Wow James you had me gripped from beginning to end, this story is so revealing and exciting, I cannot wait to read more, and yes you were an idiot but don't knock it that's just your full on determination to make it right....Lori xx
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Wow James you had me gripped from beginning to end, this story is so revealing and exciting, I cannot wait to read more, and yes you were an idiot but don't knock it that's just your full on determination to make it right....Lori xx
Comment Written 07-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Hi Lori J,
thanks for the wonderful comments and outstanding review... I guess I live on a two-sided blade... But life's always been that way for me... What can you do?
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment from emjaihammond
I can't tell you how much I appreciate your story. I imagine there are many such stories in the halls of fanstory, but it takes a lot of courage to face them and write them allowing others to see a little deeper inside. You have done so with interest and skill. I applaud you.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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I can't tell you how much I appreciate your story. I imagine there are many such stories in the halls of fanstory, but it takes a lot of courage to face them and write them allowing others to see a little deeper inside. You have done so with interest and skill. I applaud you.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Hi Emjai,
I thank you for your wonderful comments... I could read the sincerity in your words.
I truly appreciate your review.
I know you know pain, hope yours is giving you a break... And I do mean that in a good way!
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment from gaangel62
Great write James, sounds like a stubborn man who takes great pride in his work. I pray that you have had no lasting effects from this incident and that your wife is dealing with the depression..Thanks for sharing some of your life with F/S.....Hugs....Angelina
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Great write James, sounds like a stubborn man who takes great pride in his work. I pray that you have had no lasting effects from this incident and that your wife is dealing with the depression..Thanks for sharing some of your life with F/S.....Hugs....Angelina
Comment Written 07-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Hi Angelina,
well I'm a Capricorn born with a determined stubborn streak, that's all I will say on the subject!
As for the lasting affects, well I'm over the worst,but not over the affects... I can't believe this lapse from my brain could have done what it has... But, hey, that's life! Well mine anyway!
Since this incident Jade has been a tower of strength... Go figure? But like I said, I like to think I had something to do with that... LOL
Thanks for the wonderful review sweet lady, very appreciated.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh my heavens! You live one blessed life, James, because what you describe is deadly!!! We actually had it happen at one of the public pools here in Ontario. I don't remember the outcome for all, but it was fatal, I believe, for the attendant. I think several members of the public were hospitalized, even though the pool had been evacuated quickly.
Listen, one thing: since this is a contest, you might want to see about submitting more than one part - I doubt you can. Were you planning on combining the parts before the contest?
Best of luck with this story - it's riveting, my friend!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Oh my heavens! You live one blessed life, James, because what you describe is deadly!!! We actually had it happen at one of the public pools here in Ontario. I don't remember the outcome for all, but it was fatal, I believe, for the attendant. I think several members of the public were hospitalized, even though the pool had been evacuated quickly.
Listen, one thing: since this is a contest, you might want to see about submitting more than one part - I doubt you can. Were you planning on combining the parts before the contest?
Best of luck with this story - it's riveting, my friend!
Comment Written 07-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Hi Dawn,
I have part two nearly ready to go. I thought it was an easier to read this way... I hope I haven't stuffed up? Well it's not like that would be something different for me!... LOL
I'm just hoping I can join the two together after the fact, can I? I asked Tom before I submitted it and he said the parts were fine... So I just hope I can add the next section to the original... Any suggestions?
I know I was one lucky person to be walking around after doing such a silly thing... Yeah, I wanted to say stupid, but I'm trying to be kinder to myself these days... LOL
Thank you for your wonderful review my friend, you are always appreciated, and even if you don't know it, you were one of the writer's that helped me through when life wasn't doing so well... Thank you friend!
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
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Oh, I am SO glad you already checked with Tom! That's great! Yes, bring on part 2 - I will be waiting eagerly!!!
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi James
This is a great story of an experience you endured though a second of the mind not being on the job at hand. You described the incident so well that I was losing my breath reading it. Regards to telling your beloved wife, who suffers anxiety with depression. I would be economical with the truth, to be kind to her. I look forward with abated breath to your next episode.
Well done, and good luck in the contest. Mary
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Hi James
This is a great story of an experience you endured though a second of the mind not being on the job at hand. You described the incident so well that I was losing my breath reading it. Regards to telling your beloved wife, who suffers anxiety with depression. I would be economical with the truth, to be kind to her. I look forward with abated breath to your next episode.
Well done, and good luck in the contest. Mary
Comment Written 07-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Hi Mary,
well I think you already know me, and what I would or would not tell Jade.
Thank you for your wonderful review and stars, you know how much I appreciate you and your support... You do don't you?... Yeah, of course you do!
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment from Rondeno
It's a dramatic story, and you tell it very well. i can't wait to know how this all pans out ... which has to mean that you're an able writer.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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It's a dramatic story, and you tell it very well. i can't wait to know how this all pans out ... which has to mean that you're an able writer.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Hi Rondeno,
thank you for your review and comments... Short but they mean a lot.
Most appreciated.
Kindest thoughts,
James
Comment from tbacha58
But I'm a fighter; I had to be, just to be able to have survived this long. Now my employment is down to doing some home security, lawn and pool maintenance. Yes that's right, I look after a few houses, mow lawns and clean swimming pools while the retired owners go traveling for half of the year. It's cushy, it's out in the sun and I can keep my own hours, and that suits me just fine
My dearest friend, I had to copy that whole paragraph, unbelievable , you will make it, I feel it, I am sure , life is ahead of you , 52 is so young, I am so so happy and excited for your decision of writing your life story, I read it, and I had some tears as a mother, But I am looking forward for the next very soon please. I am so happy, from the depth of my heart I offer you the six roses i call them, good luck my son, God Bless you always. Much love Terry xoxo I will also get some of my friends I met here 3 months ago, to read your story. xoxo
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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But I'm a fighter; I had to be, just to be able to have survived this long. Now my employment is down to doing some home security, lawn and pool maintenance. Yes that's right, I look after a few houses, mow lawns and clean swimming pools while the retired owners go traveling for half of the year. It's cushy, it's out in the sun and I can keep my own hours, and that suits me just fine
My dearest friend, I had to copy that whole paragraph, unbelievable , you will make it, I feel it, I am sure , life is ahead of you , 52 is so young, I am so so happy and excited for your decision of writing your life story, I read it, and I had some tears as a mother, But I am looking forward for the next very soon please. I am so happy, from the depth of my heart I offer you the six roses i call them, good luck my son, God Bless you always. Much love Terry xoxo I will also get some of my friends I met here 3 months ago, to read your story. xoxo
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Hi Terry,
you make my heart feel very comforted as I read you beautiful review of my story.
And your right, I'm a fighter and I will always persevere, it's in my genes, giving up just isn't in my vocabulary.
Thank you so much for the beautiful six roses, how did you know I love them so much?
I loved your P/M and I will be getting back to you very soon, just have to get this story done and dusted... You do warm my soul and I appreciate your friendship very much!
Bless you dear lady.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment from lancellot
Well that was a very interesting tale. I can certainly relate to the first part. What we do to our bodies in our youth boggles the mind. And yes, even in our old age we sometimes still do dumb things. Well told and with perfect progression and transition. I say tell her and let it ride.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Well that was a very interesting tale. I can certainly relate to the first part. What we do to our bodies in our youth boggles the mind. And yes, even in our old age we sometimes still do dumb things. Well told and with perfect progression and transition. I say tell her and let it ride.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Hi Lancellot,
thank you for your kind words my friend.
Much appreciation for the review and stars... Hope you drop in for the conclusion.
Kindest thoughts,
James
Comment from mfowler
I was expecting a story about a desire to fulfill a life long ambition to express yourself, but instead I found myself engaged with a fascinating story about your mishap. You write with clarity and purpose, adding just enough important detail to ensur ethe narrative flows. Now I'm going to have to read the next instalment to find out why you came to FS.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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I was expecting a story about a desire to fulfill a life long ambition to express yourself, but instead I found myself engaged with a fascinating story about your mishap. You write with clarity and purpose, adding just enough important detail to ensur ethe narrative flows. Now I'm going to have to read the next instalment to find out why you came to FS.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Hi Mfowler,
I really wished it had been a tale of triumph... But who knows what the future holds?
I thank you so much for the kind words and I'm wrapped that my story engaged you.
The conclusion to the story should be coming out tomorrow.
Truly appreciate your review and feedback.
Kindest thoughts,
James
Comment from Spiritual Echo
James, your execution of this post is masterful--no shit! (see, the second exclamation mark of the year that I've used. I suppose that means I want some serious attention paid to the sentence.) Damn near perfect and quite frankly the two very small nits I'll mention would likely be overlooked by everyone--including me.
You missed a word in the sentence below and earlier in the essay you meant to say HASTE, but missed the E and typed HAST.
Except for those extremely small typos, this is an example of excellence.
But now the whole filter-room was engulfed by the white fumes, my eyes were stinging and watering. I couldn't get anywhere near the container, but I managed to undo one bolt before having to exit again. I thought I needed to DO something pretty fast as there didn't seem to be a safe distance, as the fumes widened.
You told me this story before, but this is a very dramatic true-life tale that is bound to get you a lot of feedback and compassion. It is so worth posting.
The introduction to this story--the initial paragraphs--is fantastic. This is the find of story that begs readers to return to find out what's next. You've established an intimacy, a self-deprecating manner that seems to promise the reader you'll be truthful about your flaws, your choices and how they turned out. People will tell you it takes courage to be this honest. My belief is that it is healing.
Thanks for the acknowledgement. As I've said, and mean sincerely, you have a story to tell.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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James, your execution of this post is masterful--no shit! (see, the second exclamation mark of the year that I've used. I suppose that means I want some serious attention paid to the sentence.) Damn near perfect and quite frankly the two very small nits I'll mention would likely be overlooked by everyone--including me.
You missed a word in the sentence below and earlier in the essay you meant to say HASTE, but missed the E and typed HAST.
Except for those extremely small typos, this is an example of excellence.
But now the whole filter-room was engulfed by the white fumes, my eyes were stinging and watering. I couldn't get anywhere near the container, but I managed to undo one bolt before having to exit again. I thought I needed to DO something pretty fast as there didn't seem to be a safe distance, as the fumes widened.
You told me this story before, but this is a very dramatic true-life tale that is bound to get you a lot of feedback and compassion. It is so worth posting.
The introduction to this story--the initial paragraphs--is fantastic. This is the find of story that begs readers to return to find out what's next. You've established an intimacy, a self-deprecating manner that seems to promise the reader you'll be truthful about your flaws, your choices and how they turned out. People will tell you it takes courage to be this honest. My belief is that it is healing.
Thanks for the acknowledgement. As I've said, and mean sincerely, you have a story to tell.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Hi Ingrid,
hey, I know I have done something right when these stars appeared-no shit! Thanks for picking up the mistakes, that was very appreciated.
Your encouragement has been invaluable and your subtle shoves to pursue this story have created a better writer... I hope the next part delivers.
Not only have you been a great friend and mentor, but you also helped me through this unfortunate time without really knowing... You know how I feel about you, so all I can say is you reserved a place in my heart a while back and you will always be appreciated... Thank you.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
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I wasn't the only one...you should have received recognized status by now and you made it onto the front page after only a few hours after posting. Hell, I'd be strutting if I were you.
