He Really gets into His Work
A mutilating maniac is loose!57 total reviews
Comment from Auroraboreal800
OH MY GOODNESS!! Curiosity is bigger than any other reason. This is really scary. The picture are HORRIBLE! But, I have to say you did a GREAT JOB!
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OH MY GOODNESS!! Curiosity is bigger than any other reason. This is really scary. The picture are HORRIBLE! But, I have to say you did a GREAT JOB!
:)
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Thanks very much, Auroraboreal800. I am most grateful.
Comment from barkingdog
Excellent. Excellent. Perfect. Excellent.
I couldn't stop reading. Your pictures added to the story and in a way broke up the feeling of length which was never a problem.
Wonderful interweaving of characters and tie in with a satanic witch.
Suitable for anytime and a year-round bed time story, if your father's Hannibal Lecter and mother's Lizzie Borden with cujo--such a sweet puppy.
Bravo. A gazillion screaming nightmares for this one.
-"Larry, get on the horn. We'd better call in that back-up."(add quotation marks)
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Excellent. Excellent. Perfect. Excellent.
I couldn't stop reading. Your pictures added to the story and in a way broke up the feeling of length which was never a problem.
Wonderful interweaving of characters and tie in with a satanic witch.
Suitable for anytime and a year-round bed time story, if your father's Hannibal Lecter and mother's Lizzie Borden with cujo--such a sweet puppy.
Bravo. A gazillion screaming nightmares for this one.
-"Larry, get on the horn. We'd better call in that back-up."(add quotation marks)
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Thanks, BD, that means a lot coming from you! I fixed that quotation mark error as well, thanks for catching it for me!
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Two little quote marks. I should have given you a four. LOL.
You're very welcome. You should write more of these beauties and put them in an anthology. Kuch's Horrors. LOL
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I just might do that very thing! I did place all of my pictapoems in one book...finally. I plan on adding more, too (of course, LOL).
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Not everybody wants to read a novel. I loved collections of Poe and de maupassant when I was in high school and college.
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Me too. Well, Poe I did, I never read de manupassant...
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Gory isn't the right word for it, albeit it a cleverly thoughtout plot, Dean.
(")Oh, why yes, of course you are. - add
The detective instinctively reached into his jacket for his service revolver, startled by the sudden action. - suggest you turn this about - the "startled" coming first...
Startled by the sudden action, the detective instinctively reached into his jacket for his service revolver.
asshole-of-a-husband
get to Marjorie at all?(")
got nowhere near her.(")
as quickly as if he's been - he'd been
(")Well, it weren't me who
the son-of(-) a-bitch[]. close space after bitch
That night, they'd placed two anonymous calls to the cops from a pay phone at a small Mom 'n' Pop gas station. Grizzly's(.) [[,from where they'd each placed those calls]] - you've repeated yourself here, Dean - need to lose last part of sentence
The pair of deceitful love-birds were convinced.
They'd pulled off the perfect crime. - this needs connecting...
The pair of deceitful love-birds were convinced they'd pulled off the perfect crime.
What's done was done[,](;) there was no turning back now. - semi-colon
his master's throat until at last; the dog's fangs
his master's throat until, at last, the dog's fangs
atop it's head - its
some kinda' Satanist - space after kinda
We ain't gonna['] live forever - lose
well-manicured
floor beneath him(.) - period
Margaret
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Gory isn't the right word for it, albeit it a cleverly thoughtout plot, Dean.
(")Oh, why yes, of course you are. - add
The detective instinctively reached into his jacket for his service revolver, startled by the sudden action. - suggest you turn this about - the "startled" coming first...
Startled by the sudden action, the detective instinctively reached into his jacket for his service revolver.
asshole-of-a-husband
get to Marjorie at all?(")
got nowhere near her.(")
as quickly as if he's been - he'd been
(")Well, it weren't me who
the son-of(-) a-bitch[]. close space after bitch
That night, they'd placed two anonymous calls to the cops from a pay phone at a small Mom 'n' Pop gas station. Grizzly's(.) [[,from where they'd each placed those calls]] - you've repeated yourself here, Dean - need to lose last part of sentence
The pair of deceitful love-birds were convinced.
They'd pulled off the perfect crime. - this needs connecting...
The pair of deceitful love-birds were convinced they'd pulled off the perfect crime.
What's done was done[,](;) there was no turning back now. - semi-colon
his master's throat until at last; the dog's fangs
his master's throat until, at last, the dog's fangs
atop it's head - its
some kinda' Satanist - space after kinda
We ain't gonna['] live forever - lose
well-manicured
floor beneath him(.) - period
Margaret
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Thanks for the more than generous rating, Margaret. I truly appreciate it, considering all of these errors you found. Wow! I read and re-read, edited and re-edited this probably fifty times prior to posting it, and I still missed all of those! I'm slipping (LOL)...
I also fixed those errors, and incorporated your suggestions concerning restructuring some of the sentences.
Thanks, so much. I really appreciate it.
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I'm the same, I miss all my own errors, and yet pick up on other people's so easily. Glad to be of help.
Margaret
Comment from Max Edon
This was a great story, but I still have a few questions. Was Marjory or the ghost the Midwest Mauler? Were they in cahoots? This was really scary.
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This was a great story, but I still have a few questions. Was Marjory or the ghost the Midwest Mauler? Were they in cahoots? This was really scary.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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They worked totally separate, but both responsible for the murders in the area. Remember, the witch wasn't released until he remains were thawed, then sold to the university. She was supposed to have been cremated. Other than the murders she'd been sent to prison for, Joel Flanagan was her first "new blood" in a while, so to speak.
Thanks so much for this wonderful review. I hope this cleared things up for you a bit, Max.
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You are welcome
Comment from joneau2
An extraordinary story, a thriller to say the least. You are indeed a master spinner of horrific yarns, this one no exception ... and just in time for Halloween. Your fan, John
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An extraordinary story, a thriller to say the least. You are indeed a master spinner of horrific yarns, this one no exception ... and just in time for Halloween. Your fan, John
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Thanks so much, John. There's no better compliment than this, coming from an excellent writer in his own right who writes in the horror genre, as well!
I truly appreciate the most generous rating and review!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Ok I concede. Absolutely scary and that is what I expect from you...nothing less.
But I want you to meet my cats someday. Plan on staying for awhile. They will show you what cats can do.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Ok I concede. Absolutely scary and that is what I expect from you...nothing less.
But I want you to meet my cats someday. Plan on staying for awhile. They will show you what cats can do.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Heh, thanks very much, Barb, i really appreciate that. Believe me, I am well aware of the terror cats can wreak on their unsuspecting owners. I have one myself, a little feral black cat we found wandering in the woods behind our old house. I name him Midnite, and it certainly suits his personality to a tee! he's a little nightmare, a tornado with fur, heh heh!
Thanks again for your wonderful comments, truly appreciated.
Comment from Sueellen11
My friend,,,, Dean great writing you had my hanging on every line,, very clever Marjorie and Simon,,, ,,,,, the dog attack,,, and the notation on dog attacks for 2012 very informative ,,, yes we had another attack just yesterday,,, 4 year old ,attacked by grandfathers bull mastiff,,, boy ok,,, great write blessing sueellen
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My friend,,,, Dean great writing you had my hanging on every line,, very clever Marjorie and Simon,,, ,,,,, the dog attack,,, and the notation on dog attacks for 2012 very informative ,,, yes we had another attack just yesterday,,, 4 year old ,attacked by grandfathers bull mastiff,,, boy ok,,, great write blessing sueellen
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Oh, a Bull Mastiff...huge dogs! Hopefully, that poor little girl will fully recover.
Thanks for your outstanding review, Sueellen11...
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Very well written and very grizly.
I admire your ability to weave violence and mayhem into a quite well written crime and horror thriller.
A very thoughtfully compiled storywith all the elements in just the right places.
I especially note the last few lines-They just drive the bolt home.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Very well written and very grizly.
I admire your ability to weave violence and mayhem into a quite well written crime and horror thriller.
A very thoughtfully compiled storywith all the elements in just the right places.
I especially note the last few lines-They just drive the bolt home.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Thanks so very much, seken58. I really am very grateful for your excellent review...
Comment from alexgeorge
That was a gruesome photo of a decapitated and mauled body. I sincerely hope it is a wax recosntruction.
Wow! What a grissly story of murder, intrigue and gore!
Now, I've always wondered why some people would allow these killer-dogs in their houses. Pets? There's nothing pet-like about them.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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That was a gruesome photo of a decapitated and mauled body. I sincerely hope it is a wax recosntruction.
Wow! What a grissly story of murder, intrigue and gore!
Now, I've always wondered why some people would allow these killer-dogs in their houses. Pets? There's nothing pet-like about them.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Thanks, Alex, I agree. I have a Chihuahua and two miniature Dachshunds, and they're not going to hurt anyone. The Chihuahua thinks she's Cujo, however.
As for the pictures, one is from a movie, and the other ones are Halloween props. None of them are real crime scene photographs.
Thanks for your take on this story. I appreciate it!
Comment from c_lucas
If someone would feed the poor little doggies, they wouldn't have to shop on their own. This is very well written in the spirit of Halloween. Good luck in your contest.
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If someone would feed the poor little doggies, they wouldn't have to shop on their own. This is very well written in the spirit of Halloween. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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I agree, Charlie, LOL
Thanks for this hilarious review, my friend...:)
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Great job, Dean. Charlie
