Savannah Love
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Comment from Tonulak
Dear Barbra,
Interesting chapter with Walker getting his comeupins:) I was a little lost myself why at this point all the interest in Page's education and why she is so reticent to talk about it...But nice crisp writing--Ted
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Dear Barbra,
Interesting chapter with Walker getting his comeupins:) I was a little lost myself why at this point all the interest in Page's education and why she is so reticent to talk about it...But nice crisp writing--Ted
Comment Written 25-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Comment from Curly Girly
This read well and I could spot no spag.
Cash was angry that the police came and stopped him from finishing his punching business! He has a hot temper, and I hope that it does not get him into trouble.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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This read well and I could spot no spag.
Cash was angry that the police came and stopped him from finishing his punching business! He has a hot temper, and I hope that it does not get him into trouble.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Comment from Mishelly
I believe Dwayne Walker got exactly what he deserved, and I'm so glad the police took Paige's side, and not his. I really like how the ghost keeps coming to her rescue.
One thing I find a bit strange was how quickly the police arrived. Dwayne had not been at the house for very long, so unless the police were parked outside Paige's house, I don't see how they could have gotten there so quickly. It might make more sense if the police had been coming to the house to ask follow up questions, and they heard the fight break out. Apart from that, I loved this post, and thought the friends coming to Paige's rescue was charming.
P.S - Love the photograph. It's very eerie :-)
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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I believe Dwayne Walker got exactly what he deserved, and I'm so glad the police took Paige's side, and not his. I really like how the ghost keeps coming to her rescue.
One thing I find a bit strange was how quickly the police arrived. Dwayne had not been at the house for very long, so unless the police were parked outside Paige's house, I don't see how they could have gotten there so quickly. It might make more sense if the police had been coming to the house to ask follow up questions, and they heard the fight break out. Apart from that, I loved this post, and thought the friends coming to Paige's rescue was charming.
P.S - Love the photograph. It's very eerie :-)
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Comment from CrystieCookie999
This moves the action along nicely. I like the dialogue. Billy Joe's declaration is humorous when he says, "I can't even talk English right."
I noticed in the lines:
I wasn't finished, yet."
it doesn't really need a comma before yet
"You lunged at me." Paige lifted herself from the floor, with Mary Pat's help.
It doesn't really need a comma after floor
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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This moves the action along nicely. I like the dialogue. Billy Joe's declaration is humorous when he says, "I can't even talk English right."
I noticed in the lines:
I wasn't finished, yet."
it doesn't really need a comma before yet
"You lunged at me." Paige lifted herself from the floor, with Mary Pat's help.
It doesn't really need a comma after floor
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Comment from emrpoems
I enjoyed reading this chapter of your story and will read the others quite soon.Very interesting - the little incident with the crutch. Look forward to reading your story
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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I enjoyed reading this chapter of your story and will read the others quite soon.Very interesting - the little incident with the crutch. Look forward to reading your story
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Comment from lindalcreel
Someone threw that crutch at the doctor and it seems like someone is still trying to protect Paige. This story is so entertaining. I'm sure there are still a lot of secrets to tell from this sleepy little town. Great read. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Someone threw that crutch at the doctor and it seems like someone is still trying to protect Paige. This story is so entertaining. I'm sure there are still a lot of secrets to tell from this sleepy little town. Great read. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Comment from Writingfundimension
A great chapter, barbara. Lots of action and a furthering of the mystery of how/why Bradley has such an interest in this little Northern gal. I like how you introduced Paige's background, as well. Quite a lady! Warmest regards, Bev
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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A great chapter, barbara. Lots of action and a furthering of the mystery of how/why Bradley has such an interest in this little Northern gal. I like how you introduced Paige's background, as well. Quite a lady! Warmest regards, Bev
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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You're welcome, barbara.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
I was wondering why Cash hadn't hit him before. I would have belted him a few times for some of the underhanded things he did before. I guess I be more a Scotsman. Thank you for the great story.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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I was wondering why Cash hadn't hit him before. I would have belted him a few times for some of the underhanded things he did before. I guess I be more a Scotsman. Thank you for the great story.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Comment from Ric Myworld
A mother of grown children who's still a fireball full of vinegar, among other things, I'm sure, and a writer of realistic, consuming prose that draws an old Kentucky boy right into the mix. Great dialog and characterization!
Thanks, for the read!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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A mother of grown children who's still a fireball full of vinegar, among other things, I'm sure, and a writer of realistic, consuming prose that draws an old Kentucky boy right into the mix. Great dialog and characterization!
Thanks, for the read!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Jade Lawson
wow, that scene with Mr Walker was really fun. I loved when Cash said that he had never had so much fun. Good confrontation.
Well, it seems like the spirits are helping Paige.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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wow, that scene with Mr Walker was really fun. I loved when Cash said that he had never had so much fun. Good confrontation.
Well, it seems like the spirits are helping Paige.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I appreciate both.
