Picture Poems
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Comment from NicciFaye
You were truly inspired. The picture is not only beautiful, but the captivating story you created in this beauty of a poem.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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You were truly inspired. The picture is not only beautiful, but the captivating story you created in this beauty of a poem.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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Thank you Nicci. I'm glad you appreciated the beauty.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent poem with excellent rhyme, good flow and a rhyme scheme that is followed consistently. It has an unusual eye appealing structure called a "shortie". It has nice figurative language and images. I enjoyed this poem.
Preston
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent poem with excellent rhyme, good flow and a rhyme scheme that is followed consistently. It has an unusual eye appealing structure called a "shortie". It has nice figurative language and images. I enjoyed this poem.
Preston
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Thank you Preston.
Comment from Capricorn30
Excellent!
A well-penned floral poem;
Bold visual imagery as flowers not only provide beauty but comfort stressed-out humans;
Good alliteration of "Cosmic"; "consummates" to complete the writing.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Excellent!
A well-penned floral poem;
Bold visual imagery as flowers not only provide beauty but comfort stressed-out humans;
Good alliteration of "Cosmic"; "consummates" to complete the writing.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much Margaret.
Comment from sunnilicious
That is a nice poem. I never heard of they style before outside of Rumi, but Shortie works out well. Clearly written. Good visual imagery created. Nice work!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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That is a nice poem. I never heard of they style before outside of Rumi, but Shortie works out well. Clearly written. Good visual imagery created. Nice work!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much Sunnilicious. I am very happy you gave it so many stars.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A well written "shortie" poem.
you have clearly paid quite a lot of attention to these lovely lilies for it flows throughout the verses.
I enjoyed the last verse as it parallels between the lily and the contemplation of life.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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A well written "shortie" poem.
you have clearly paid quite a lot of attention to these lovely lilies for it flows throughout the verses.
I enjoyed the last verse as it parallels between the lily and the contemplation of life.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you Shirley. I appreciate that.
Comment from rhonny
A very well thought out and nicely written poem that describes the beauty of Nature's garden. Your words and lines flow nicely, but I think (personally) I'd like it better without all the capitals which I think interrupt the flow.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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A very well thought out and nicely written poem that describes the beauty of Nature's garden. Your words and lines flow nicely, but I think (personally) I'd like it better without all the capitals which I think interrupt the flow.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you rhonny, I'll look at that again. I've done it both ways.
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Comment from princessbubblegum
Lovely end rhymes, as comforting as blankets in Autumn itself. I am wondering if, in line 4, you mean the joy itself is created or the joy creates the lily. Not that it essentially matters, just one of those details. I am certain your publisher will know.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Lovely end rhymes, as comforting as blankets in Autumn itself. I am wondering if, in line 4, you mean the joy itself is created or the joy creates the lily. Not that it essentially matters, just one of those details. I am certain your publisher will know.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you princessbubblegum. It means that lilies create joy through their beauty.
