Savannah Love
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Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Barbara,
Great continuation for you story. The mystery is unfolding slowly and it keeps me reading. I feel part of the unravelling of the history of the house and family...Clear, concise writing so I can enjoy this one fully.
Well penned my friend.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Dear Barbara,
Great continuation for you story. The mystery is unfolding slowly and it keeps me reading. I feel part of the unravelling of the history of the house and family...Clear, concise writing so I can enjoy this one fully.
Well penned my friend.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. It seems problems are never solved quickly.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
"Nala scooted closer. SCOOTED? How about 'moved'?
As the notes indicate, this chapter is necessary. No SPAG or POV infractions to speak of. Isn't the internet wonderful? Did all my research on it. Well dobe.
Regards:
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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"Nala scooted closer. SCOOTED? How about 'moved'?
As the notes indicate, this chapter is necessary. No SPAG or POV infractions to speak of. Isn't the internet wonderful? Did all my research on it. Well dobe.
Regards:
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I had moved there, but in my mind, she slid across the couch.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Good post, Barbara. Excellent dialogue and exchanges between your characters. I'm intrigued by this mystery you're creating. I love investigating and researching, and have done a lot on my own family, going back to the 1500's..
That said, I just wanted to mention that the Census form usually only lists the living, not the dead. At least, the UK Census is like that, so I wondered about this line in the post:
When the 1900 census listed Ann as deceased, tears entered Paige's eyes.
Would the Census list her as deceased?
Also: reading Alice's dairy. - should be ' diary '
Very enjoyable, as always.
Av
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Good post, Barbara. Excellent dialogue and exchanges between your characters. I'm intrigued by this mystery you're creating. I love investigating and researching, and have done a lot on my own family, going back to the 1500's..
That said, I just wanted to mention that the Census form usually only lists the living, not the dead. At least, the UK Census is like that, so I wondered about this line in the post:
When the 1900 census listed Ann as deceased, tears entered Paige's eyes.
Would the Census list her as deceased?
Also: reading Alice's dairy. - should be ' diary '
Very enjoyable, as always.
Av
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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It seems the early census lists deceased but not later ones. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
The 'Thot plickens' methinks. It has obviously slipped everyone's attention that they are in the presence of someone who is a descendent or married to a descendent of Alice Wilkins ...
Now then, if she is the mother of Cash, then she is a potential heir, and through her, Cash. Geneology is a fascinating pursuit, and it is often amazing what it turns up.
I suspect you have a neat twist lined up for this.
One suggestion for you. This sentence is a bit awkward -
[Paige clicked on a site that had 1840 through 1880 census on it.] I would suggest something like [She ran a search for the 1840 to 1880 census records, and selected the most promising.]
Patrick
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
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Hi Barbara,
The 'Thot plickens' methinks. It has obviously slipped everyone's attention that they are in the presence of someone who is a descendent or married to a descendent of Alice Wilkins ...
Now then, if she is the mother of Cash, then she is a potential heir, and through her, Cash. Geneology is a fascinating pursuit, and it is often amazing what it turns up.
I suspect you have a neat twist lined up for this.
One suggestion for you. This sentence is a bit awkward -
[Paige clicked on a site that had 1840 through 1880 census on it.] I would suggest something like [She ran a search for the 1840 to 1880 census records, and selected the most promising.]
Patrick
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
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Sorry for the tardy reply. I needed time to fix that area. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I really enjoyed this chapter, Barbara,
particularly the part where they're
tracing the family ancestors through the old
records.
Looking forward to finding out what happens next.
Margaret
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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I really enjoyed this chapter, Barbara,
particularly the part where they're
tracing the family ancestors through the old
records.
Looking forward to finding out what happens next.
Margaret
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from lindalcreel
This is a wonderful way to set up the subsequent chapters. every now and then you have to include some background, so the story makes sense. Paige has quit a few friends who will help her learn the truth about that brooch. Bu I wonder if Cash isn't somehow related to her now. I'm sure with all those eyes, they'll turn up something. Still don't know who threw the brick in the window, but I know it is all tied together. Thanks again for sharing another great read.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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This is a wonderful way to set up the subsequent chapters. every now and then you have to include some background, so the story makes sense. Paige has quit a few friends who will help her learn the truth about that brooch. Bu I wonder if Cash isn't somehow related to her now. I'm sure with all those eyes, they'll turn up something. Still don't know who threw the brick in the window, but I know it is all tied together. Thanks again for sharing another great read.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Welcome:)
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Welcome:)
Comment from chasennov
Savannah Love. 'Chapter Thirteen,Part Three.' You are such a good writer, and I often feel that it is not enough to tell you that. That you want critique. But I cannot give critique when that is not evident. So, again, well done.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Savannah Love. 'Chapter Thirteen,Part Three.' You are such a good writer, and I often feel that it is not enough to tell you that. That you want critique. But I cannot give critique when that is not evident. So, again, well done.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and the kind words.
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You are most welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oooh, this was a really good chapter! How fascinating, looking through the history of ancestors, and you explained it so wonderfully. I felt as if I were there looking over Paige's shoulder. Nicely done!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Oooh, this was a really good chapter! How fascinating, looking through the history of ancestors, and you explained it so wonderfully. I felt as if I were there looking over Paige's shoulder. Nicely done!
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Although it wasn't "overly lively" (to quote you!), I particularly enjoyed this one. This piece had such a comfortable, peaceful feel - three women chatting and working together.
Nicely done, my dear Barbara. :)
Love,
Sonali
Faye sat on each side of her .. suggest: .. on either side of her
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Although it wasn't "overly lively" (to quote you!), I particularly enjoyed this one. This piece had such a comfortable, peaceful feel - three women chatting and working together.
Nicely done, my dear Barbara. :)
Love,
Sonali
Faye sat on each side of her .. suggest: .. on either side of her
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from bhogg
Hi Barabara - I thought this a good post. I know that you've got me looking forward to that next post. Well written. I wish ancestor searches were this easy. Bill
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Hi Barabara - I thought this a good post. I know that you've got me looking forward to that next post. Well written. I wish ancestor searches were this easy. Bill
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
