~The World So Blue~
There's so much suffering below...154 total reviews
Comment from pipersfancy
Wow, Dean... your melancholy flows through unhindered on this piece. Or maybe, it just reflects and amplifies my own sense of melancholy, and everyone else's. I feel the same way after watching/hearing the news. I used to watch the nightly news, but have not done so in many years. I stopped right after 9/11. But, it's not like you can avoid hearing things, hide from reality... the sadness often permeates our existence... maybe we all share/feel some sort of unspoken Universal sadness, the collective conscious of a world in pain.
That said... I truly think that what we try to do here... the acts of creation we, and countless others in our world, strive for... I think that "creation" is LOVE in its purest form... I think our world's future depends upon it, and that what "we" do... writing poetry, painting, playing music, sculpting out of clay, creating and raising new life... these are the things that will bring balance back to our world. It must be so - because these are the most hopeful things I can think of to do.
So, I must give your work my first "6" of the week - not often a poem can elicit such strong thoughts from me.
PF
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Wow, Dean... your melancholy flows through unhindered on this piece. Or maybe, it just reflects and amplifies my own sense of melancholy, and everyone else's. I feel the same way after watching/hearing the news. I used to watch the nightly news, but have not done so in many years. I stopped right after 9/11. But, it's not like you can avoid hearing things, hide from reality... the sadness often permeates our existence... maybe we all share/feel some sort of unspoken Universal sadness, the collective conscious of a world in pain.
That said... I truly think that what we try to do here... the acts of creation we, and countless others in our world, strive for... I think that "creation" is LOVE in its purest form... I think our world's future depends upon it, and that what "we" do... writing poetry, painting, playing music, sculpting out of clay, creating and raising new life... these are the things that will bring balance back to our world. It must be so - because these are the most hopeful things I can think of to do.
So, I must give your work my first "6" of the week - not often a poem can elicit such strong thoughts from me.
PF
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Maybe a little bit of both, PF...
Thanks for the fantastic review and most generous rating...
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer uses the aabb rhyme scheme effectively. The rhyming is solid. The flow is smooth. The syllable count is consistent as this piece grabs my attention from the beginning and holds it to the end. Good job.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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The writer uses the aabb rhyme scheme effectively. The rhyming is solid. The flow is smooth. The syllable count is consistent as this piece grabs my attention from the beginning and holds it to the end. Good job.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Thanks, brother. I sure appreciate that!
Comment from justatuna
I love the simplicity in this. I always enjoy a simple poem that really is complex. You always have a way of making me want more. Such a smooth read. Perfect rhyming. You message is true. Just something magical in your words. Exceptional write.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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I love the simplicity in this. I always enjoy a simple poem that really is complex. You always have a way of making me want more. Such a smooth read. Perfect rhyming. You message is true. Just something magical in your words. Exceptional write.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Thanks for the exceptional review, my friend. I greatly appreciate it!
Comment from gaangel62
Dean, such a beautiful, melancholy write....your poem filled me with such emotional pain.....men, women and children need help all over the world and you described the world so clearly.....thanks for sharing your heart...Hugs...Angie
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Dean, such a beautiful, melancholy write....your poem filled me with such emotional pain.....men, women and children need help all over the world and you described the world so clearly.....thanks for sharing your heart...Hugs...Angie
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and most generous review, Angie. It's very much appreciated...
Comment from GWHARGIS
You definitely hit a chord with this. I was asking my son the other day about the impending war in Syria. He's a medic in the Army. I asked hi if his guys were scared they were gong to be sent in to Syria, so soon after getting home from Afghanistan. He said" We can't think like that. This is what we do. It's just another destination to keep the peace." They don't believe it's war. It's keeping the peace. Kind of sad, really.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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You definitely hit a chord with this. I was asking my son the other day about the impending war in Syria. He's a medic in the Army. I asked hi if his guys were scared they were gong to be sent in to Syria, so soon after getting home from Afghanistan. He said" We can't think like that. This is what we do. It's just another destination to keep the peace." They don't believe it's war. It's keeping the peace. Kind of sad, really.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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He's right, Gretchen. As an ex US Marine, I can understand where he's coming from. He has a job to do, and he'll go do his duty, no matter where he's called to perform it. That's the honor, duty, integrity and job of a true soldier, and I have to commend him for saying so...
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A very good summing up of the life that's lived today. Of course, we are bombarded with a lot more of the news because of today's technology. We see what's going on everywhere in the world. Bad things have always happened, there has always been wars, there has always been hunger, it's simply that it is so graphically displayed today. And again with advanced technology horrible damage can be inflicted in an unpresendated way. It seems the human race has lost the plot. A good read. Thank you. Dorothy
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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A very good summing up of the life that's lived today. Of course, we are bombarded with a lot more of the news because of today's technology. We see what's going on everywhere in the world. Bad things have always happened, there has always been wars, there has always been hunger, it's simply that it is so graphically displayed today. And again with advanced technology horrible damage can be inflicted in an unpresendated way. It seems the human race has lost the plot. A good read. Thank you. Dorothy
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Thanks very much, Dorothy. I truly appreciate it!
Comment from tbacha58
Homeless lie dying--cold in the street,
babies with not enough food to eat,
children with mom, however, no dad...
Where is the happiness we once had?
Your poem is amazing , that picture turned my head upside down, your words vanished into my heart, life has become a hell of a life.
Lovely Dean, loved this morning poem. Bless u Terry
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Homeless lie dying--cold in the street,
babies with not enough food to eat,
children with mom, however, no dad...
Where is the happiness we once had?
Your poem is amazing , that picture turned my head upside down, your words vanished into my heart, life has become a hell of a life.
Lovely Dean, loved this morning poem. Bless u Terry
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Thank you, Terry!
Comment from adewpearl
solid rhyming couplets
man kind - mankind
You convey your emotions about the state of the world and humankind with honest intensity and good illustrative examples though I believe some of the things on your list have improved since we were young, like programs to feed hungry children
Your poem is beautifully presented Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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solid rhyming couplets
man kind - mankind
You convey your emotions about the state of the world and humankind with honest intensity and good illustrative examples though I believe some of the things on your list have improved since we were young, like programs to feed hungry children
Your poem is beautifully presented Brooke :-)
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Thanks, adewpearl...
Comment from J. Dark
This is just spectacular, Dean. Your presentation is absolutely stirring, your rhyme and poetic content are fabulous. The concept of this piece strikes a chord and is incredibly important. I can honestly say, hand on heart, I thoroughly enjoyed the experience of the entire piece.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :0)
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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This is just spectacular, Dean. Your presentation is absolutely stirring, your rhyme and poetic content are fabulous. The concept of this piece strikes a chord and is incredibly important. I can honestly say, hand on heart, I thoroughly enjoyed the experience of the entire piece.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :0)
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much. Coming from you, Julie, that means a great deal to me. Thanks for the awesome review, my friend!
Comment from joneau2
A truly incredible and beautiful poem. The picture is fantastic, and the music is wonderful. You are beyond a shadow of a doubt my favorite author well beyond just FanStory. My wife is now your fan as well. Thank you for creating this masterpiece. John
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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A truly incredible and beautiful poem. The picture is fantastic, and the music is wonderful. You are beyond a shadow of a doubt my favorite author well beyond just FanStory. My wife is now your fan as well. Thank you for creating this masterpiece. John
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your wonderful rating and for the exceptional review, joneau2. I really appreciate it!
