Savannah Love
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Comment from rtobaygo
I like the realism of using a dog to detect the presence of an unseen visitor. There are several 'reality paranormal' television programs. Of those I briefly watched, Man's best friend is never present. As always, your dialogue is impeccable and with only a few tags.
Enjoyed the read!
Take care,
Ray
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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I like the realism of using a dog to detect the presence of an unseen visitor. There are several 'reality paranormal' television programs. Of those I briefly watched, Man's best friend is never present. As always, your dialogue is impeccable and with only a few tags.
Enjoyed the read!
Take care,
Ray
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
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Comment from ReaThomas
Well written chapter, Barbara. I know you are well into this novel now. I like how believable the characters are and how I can imagine these situations really playing out. I remember reading recently that you are looking publication for your last novel. Have you found any success with this, yet?
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Well written chapter, Barbara. I know you are well into this novel now. I like how believable the characters are and how I can imagine these situations really playing out. I remember reading recently that you are looking publication for your last novel. Have you found any success with this, yet?
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, a publisher picked up my previous novel. Not sure when it will be out.
Comment from emjaihammond
This was an interesting and inventive way to go over some of the high points in your mystery for your readers to recount some of what has happened. Good idea I think as the summer pulls some of us away from reading as often as we want to. I enjoyed the recap and the ending has me on the edge of my seat. Good read.
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This was an interesting and inventive way to go over some of the high points in your mystery for your readers to recount some of what has happened. Good idea I think as the summer pulls some of us away from reading as often as we want to. I enjoyed the recap and the ending has me on the edge of my seat. Good read.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
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Comment from JM daSilva
You have managed to make me very curious about the mystery of the hat and the ghosts, and there is a treasure somewhere, maybe. Good job keeping me intrigued, and the writing was great. I just have one question, is this broke into on purpose?
"We know James Davis Junior left his handprint on Paige's Jaguar after the house was broke(N) into."
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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You have managed to make me very curious about the mystery of the hat and the ghosts, and there is a treasure somewhere, maybe. Good job keeping me intrigued, and the writing was great. I just have one question, is this broke into on purpose?
"We know James Davis Junior left his handprint on Paige's Jaguar after the house was broke(N) into."
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate you stopping by. I will fix that.
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Welcome. Pleasure.
Comment from nora arjuna
Hi Barb, so mysteries of ghost still unravelled. The ghosts must be having fun with them. :)
Check some suggestions:
"All in [agreement]?" Billy Joe scanned the friends. After they [agreed], he continued, "What else?" - same word too close. Suggest - After they nodded
Billy Joe began to write. "We'll use some of it, but we don't know all of it." - Earlier you have 'Mary Pat watched her husband write it down', so 'began to write' is not suitable here. Suggest - Billy Joe continued to write.
"She's right. I think we might've just hit on something." [Cash nodded.] - suggest put this at the beginning.
"So the wind [blowed] the ghost's hat off and you two brought it in." - shouldn't it be 'blew'?
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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Hi Barb, so mysteries of ghost still unravelled. The ghosts must be having fun with them. :)
Check some suggestions:
"All in [agreement]?" Billy Joe scanned the friends. After they [agreed], he continued, "What else?" - same word too close. Suggest - After they nodded
Billy Joe began to write. "We'll use some of it, but we don't know all of it." - Earlier you have 'Mary Pat watched her husband write it down', so 'began to write' is not suitable here. Suggest - Billy Joe continued to write.
"She's right. I think we might've just hit on something." [Cash nodded.] - suggest put this at the beginning.
"So the wind [blowed] the ghost's hat off and you two brought it in." - shouldn't it be 'blew'?
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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Sorry it has taken me so long to answer this review. I wanted to make sure I had time to make the corrections. Thank you for the help.
Comment from Mishelly
This was a great way to sum up everything that had happened so far in your story, and to also highlight all the suspects. Sometimes it is hard to keep track of everything that has happened in a story. Especially when there are so many pieces to the puzzle. But you have juggled every twist and turn with ease :-)
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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This was a great way to sum up everything that had happened so far in your story, and to also highlight all the suspects. Sometimes it is hard to keep track of everything that has happened in a story. Especially when there are so many pieces to the puzzle. But you have juggled every twist and turn with ease :-)
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
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Comment from JeffreyStone
You are right. It is difficult to jump in and get a feel for the setting and backstory of this 1/4 chapter. However, I am impressed with your handling of the dialogue which carries the action in this piece. I wish you success for the school year.
Best Regards,
Jeffrey
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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You are right. It is difficult to jump in and get a feel for the setting and backstory of this 1/4 chapter. However, I am impressed with your handling of the dialogue which carries the action in this piece. I wish you success for the school year.
Best Regards,
Jeffrey
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
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Comment from justmarly
Hope this is where I should began. Its good and I'd like to see more.
Morgan jumped up, barked, and snarled at Cash's feet. He is seeing something. I'll be anixous to know. You are doing a great job.
Discussing facts.
Savannah Love
Chapter 13, part 1 by barbara.wilkey
Category:
Romance Fiction
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August 25, 2013 Views: 159
Chapters:
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ABOUT
BARBARA.WILKEY
Mrs. Wilkey raised four sons. Her fourth son just graduated from High School. He will be living at home, attending the local college, and working for at least one year. Hopefully, earning enough money to attend UT.
She is also a grand - more...
She is an accomplished novelist and is currently at the #4 spot on this years rankings.
She is also an active reviewer and is holding the #20 spot on the top ranked reviewer list.
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Background
Paige was raised in Boston and inherited an antebellum house. Cash was hired to restore the house to authenticity. South vs. North as these two attempt to find love.
CHAPTER THIRTEEN
Billy Joe set up the easel by the dining room table and used a black marker to write, 'things we know.'
"We know Dwayne Walker taped a threatening note to my door." Paige pointed at the front door.
"We know a note was taped to it, but we don't know it was Walker." Cash's fingers tapped the antique walnut table. "We do know he was rude to Nala."
"All in agreement?" Billy Joe scanned the friends. After they agreed, he continued, "What else?"
"We know James Davis Junior left his handprint on Paige's Jaguar after the house was broke into." Mary Pat watched her husband write it down.
"We know Daniel and Bonnie Walker feel they should've inherited the house." Paige hesitated. "Bonnie and James are distant cousins. I bet Daniel knows them. Probably Daniel and James are the two who broke in and tied up Mary Pat and me. They want the treasure."
Billy Joe began to write. "We'll use some of it, but we don't know all of it."
"I'd bet they know each other. They're about the same age. Savannah's not that large." Mary Pat motioned for him to write more.
"She's right. I think we might've just hit on something." Cash nodded.
"What else do we know?" Billy Joe tapped the paper with the marker.
"We keep finding jewelry and Civil War artifacts," said Mary Pat.
"Bradley Bookman's ghost haunts the house."
Cash glared at Paige. "We don't know that."
Paige pointed at the back door. "I'm betting Bradley Bookman carried his hat through that door."
Cash rolled his eyes. "You're telling me a ghost came in and retrieved his hat?"
"Somebody tell me what's goin' on," said Billy Joe. "I was gettin' the easel when all this happened."
After the three told Billy Joe about the events surrounding the hat, he scratched his head. "So the wind blowed the ghost's hat off and you two brought it in." Billy nodded to the women. "And then he came in and took it back, walking through the door."
"That sums it up pretty good." Paige smiled.
"How do we know there are ghosts? If there are, how do we know they wear clothes?" She's got a point. Nice read JM
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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Hope this is where I should began. Its good and I'd like to see more.
Morgan jumped up, barked, and snarled at Cash's feet. He is seeing something. I'll be anixous to know. You are doing a great job.
Discussing facts.
Savannah Love
Chapter 13, part 1 by barbara.wilkey
Category:
Romance Fiction
Posted:
August 25, 2013 Views: 159
Chapters:
...51 52 53 54 55 56 57 58 59
ABOUT
BARBARA.WILKEY
Mrs. Wilkey raised four sons. Her fourth son just graduated from High School. He will be living at home, attending the local college, and working for at least one year. Hopefully, earning enough money to attend UT.
She is also a grand - more...
She is an accomplished novelist and is currently at the #4 spot on this years rankings.
She is also an active reviewer and is holding the #20 spot on the top ranked reviewer list.
Portfolio | Become A Fan
Background
Paige was raised in Boston and inherited an antebellum house. Cash was hired to restore the house to authenticity. South vs. North as these two attempt to find love.
CHAPTER THIRTEEN
Billy Joe set up the easel by the dining room table and used a black marker to write, 'things we know.'
"We know Dwayne Walker taped a threatening note to my door." Paige pointed at the front door.
"We know a note was taped to it, but we don't know it was Walker." Cash's fingers tapped the antique walnut table. "We do know he was rude to Nala."
"All in agreement?" Billy Joe scanned the friends. After they agreed, he continued, "What else?"
"We know James Davis Junior left his handprint on Paige's Jaguar after the house was broke into." Mary Pat watched her husband write it down.
"We know Daniel and Bonnie Walker feel they should've inherited the house." Paige hesitated. "Bonnie and James are distant cousins. I bet Daniel knows them. Probably Daniel and James are the two who broke in and tied up Mary Pat and me. They want the treasure."
Billy Joe began to write. "We'll use some of it, but we don't know all of it."
"I'd bet they know each other. They're about the same age. Savannah's not that large." Mary Pat motioned for him to write more.
"She's right. I think we might've just hit on something." Cash nodded.
"What else do we know?" Billy Joe tapped the paper with the marker.
"We keep finding jewelry and Civil War artifacts," said Mary Pat.
"Bradley Bookman's ghost haunts the house."
Cash glared at Paige. "We don't know that."
Paige pointed at the back door. "I'm betting Bradley Bookman carried his hat through that door."
Cash rolled his eyes. "You're telling me a ghost came in and retrieved his hat?"
"Somebody tell me what's goin' on," said Billy Joe. "I was gettin' the easel when all this happened."
After the three told Billy Joe about the events surrounding the hat, he scratched his head. "So the wind blowed the ghost's hat off and you two brought it in." Billy nodded to the women. "And then he came in and took it back, walking through the door."
"That sums it up pretty good." Paige smiled.
"How do we know there are ghosts? If there are, how do we know they wear clothes?" She's got a point. Nice read JM
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate you stopping by.
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You are welcome. JM
Comment from irishauthorme
Great chapter! You really gave us a jolt when you had 'something' pull Cash' arm.
After all his 'poo-pooing, you hit him hard. He will have a hard time laughing this one off, but he will probably find a rational explanation. Meanwhile, pass the towel.
Liked this one! irish
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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Great chapter! You really gave us a jolt when you had 'something' pull Cash' arm.
After all his 'poo-pooing, you hit him hard. He will have a hard time laughing this one off, but he will probably find a rational explanation. Meanwhile, pass the towel.
Liked this one! irish
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
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Comment from N.K. Wagner
Hmmm. That'll teach Cash to argue with Paige. An excellent review of the facts pertaining to the mystery surrounding Paige's house and it's former occupants. Well done, Barbara. :) nancy
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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Hmmm. That'll teach Cash to argue with Paige. An excellent review of the facts pertaining to the mystery surrounding Paige's house and it's former occupants. Well done, Barbara. :) nancy
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
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