Savannah Love
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Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
Okey-dokey sure sounds like someone has a ghost hanging around. This chapter was good and kept the story moving. I look forward to the next one.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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Okey-dokey sure sounds like someone has a ghost hanging around. This chapter was good and kept the story moving. I look forward to the next one.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by,
Comment from irishauthorme
I have some catching up to do, but I liked this chapter. You used that good dialogue to show us the tension Paige is allowing to build up because she is hesitant to trust anyone, her money is a blessing and a curse. Having spent considerable time in the south, I am impressed by the way that you render the character of the people born and raised there. Carpet Baggers are still a sore subject and the Civil War is the most discussed subject.
Good Chapter, irish
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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I have some catching up to do, but I liked this chapter. You used that good dialogue to show us the tension Paige is allowing to build up because she is hesitant to trust anyone, her money is a blessing and a curse. Having spent considerable time in the south, I am impressed by the way that you render the character of the people born and raised there. Carpet Baggers are still a sore subject and the Civil War is the most discussed subject.
Good Chapter, irish
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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I was born in the Midwest, IL to be exact, but my husband was in the Army and other than living overseas, we were stationed in the South. I found it to be fascinating. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This looks great to me. Believable dialogue, action, characterization, pacing's good. I am trying to decide if "Army" should be capitalized. I am not entirely sure, but I would say no unless you want to qualify it as U.S. Army or something like that.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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This looks great to me. Believable dialogue, action, characterization, pacing's good. I am trying to decide if "Army" should be capitalized. I am not entirely sure, but I would say no unless you want to qualify it as U.S. Army or something like that.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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I will double check on Army. Thank you for the kind review. I always enjoy hearing from you.
Comment from Sloegin
As usual,your verbiage is terrific. I am more than impressed with the way you keep your story moving. Your scenes are all believable, never over done. Congrats on that.
Never have I read any dialogue that sounded stilted. Another accomplishment.
My only critique, "a bit much on the wallpaper."
Beautifully written and a pleasure to read.
sloegin
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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As usual,your verbiage is terrific. I am more than impressed with the way you keep your story moving. Your scenes are all believable, never over done. Congrats on that.
Never have I read any dialogue that sounded stilted. Another accomplishment.
My only critique, "a bit much on the wallpaper."
Beautifully written and a pleasure to read.
sloegin
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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I will take another look at the wallpaper area. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mrs Jones
The wallpaper sample is interesting. Imagine having to live with that. LOL Another well written chapter Mrs. Wilkie. The hat is an eerie mystery.
Good writing
Cheers
Rose
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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The wallpaper sample is interesting. Imagine having to live with that. LOL Another well written chapter Mrs. Wilkie. The hat is an eerie mystery.
Good writing
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Supe
Your writing and your characters are very well done. I don't know quite what is going on here, but as far as writing goes this is a good chapter. I will have to catch up on your work. Nice job.
Cash looked over his shoulder. I think should be a period, not a comma
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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Your writing and your characters are very well done. I don't know quite what is going on here, but as far as writing goes this is a good chapter. I will have to catch up on your work. Nice job.
Cash looked over his shoulder. I think should be a period, not a comma
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
"...and set it (down) on the table.
LOVE the unintended PUN: "
"Every man I've met is just after my money, even Cash."
ADD some emotion: For ex:
"...gingerly, she started down the steps.
Describe the dog, for ex:
"She glanced toward Morgan as he barked and ran off.
"Nala stood by (over) some broken plates.
REVISE: "Morgan! Come here, boy." Paige smiled. (smiled?)
UNANSWERED, for ex:
"I just saw that Confederate hat float through the back door. Morgan chased it to the door." AND then....?
Needs some revision although no serious SPAG is apparent.
Regards:
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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"...and set it (down) on the table.
LOVE the unintended PUN: "
"Every man I've met is just after my money, even Cash."
ADD some emotion: For ex:
"...gingerly, she started down the steps.
Describe the dog, for ex:
"She glanced toward Morgan as he barked and ran off.
"Nala stood by (over) some broken plates.
REVISE: "Morgan! Come here, boy." Paige smiled. (smiled?)
UNANSWERED, for ex:
"I just saw that Confederate hat float through the back door. Morgan chased it to the door." AND then....?
Needs some revision although no serious SPAG is apparent.
Regards:
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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Sorry it took so long for me to answer this review. I got caught up with school stuff. Thank you for the kind review and your eagle eye.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
The hat's appearance is really strange. Had the ghost been wearing it,
I'm wondering. There's definitely a supernatural force in the house.
The dialogue between the women was really good.
All in all, a wonderful write, Barbara
The pup dropped a cap in his master's hand. - didn't he drop it in Paige's hand - thus mistress's hand
Margaret
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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The hat's appearance is really strange. Had the ghost been wearing it,
I'm wondering. There's definitely a supernatural force in the house.
The dialogue between the women was really good.
All in all, a wonderful write, Barbara
The pup dropped a cap in his master's hand. - didn't he drop it in Paige's hand - thus mistress's hand
Margaret
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. Thank you for the catch. I hadn't thought about that.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Ooh, I loved the spooky arrival of that hat! I knew something was about to happen when that little gust of wind blew by. This ghost is really trying to make himself known. Leaves me with so many questions! Good stuff, Barbara.
The pup dropped a cap in his master's hand. - I think this should be 'mistress's' hand.
I wonder where it came from(?)
Hugs,
Av
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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Ooh, I loved the spooky arrival of that hat! I knew something was about to happen when that little gust of wind blew by. This ghost is really trying to make himself known. Leaves me with so many questions! Good stuff, Barbara.
The pup dropped a cap in his master's hand. - I think this should be 'mistress's' hand.
I wonder where it came from(?)
Hugs,
Av
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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Sorry it took so long for me to answer this review. I got caught up with school stuff. Thank you for the kind review and your eagle eye.
Comment from muezza56
i really enjoyed reading this chapter. ive dipped in on this a few times over the months, and ive never been disappointed with the style and quality of this work, even if i have missed some crucial parts of the plot! it makes compelling reading
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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i really enjoyed reading this chapter. ive dipped in on this a few times over the months, and ive never been disappointed with the style and quality of this work, even if i have missed some crucial parts of the plot! it makes compelling reading
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
