Picture Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Crisscross Stairs"Photograph Inspired Poems
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Comment from Joan E.
I appreciate your using different forms in your Mall series. The Whitney is one of my favorite short forms, since like the cinquain, it provides a little more space than haiku. I enjoyed your adding rhyme, which is not easy, and the 'symmetry' you captured. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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I appreciate your using different forms in your Mall series. The Whitney is one of my favorite short forms, since like the cinquain, it provides a little more space than haiku. I enjoyed your adding rhyme, which is not easy, and the 'symmetry' you captured. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 31-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Thanks Joan. You captured all my nuances.
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Pleased to be on the same frequency- Joan
Comment from robina1978
I understand it now, you are making a whole series about this big shopping Mall near you. Nice as it seems to be very nice. There is nice symmetry in your photo and you wrote a very good Whitney.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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I understand it now, you are making a whole series about this big shopping Mall near you. Nice as it seems to be very nice. There is nice symmetry in your photo and you wrote a very good Whitney.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Thanks Ine,
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most welcome to both of them, Ine
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most welcome to both of them, Ine
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most welcome to both of them, Ine
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I loved this one, the rhyme scheme is just right for these words. The photo, one of your own, is really clever, you got the angle just right to show the simplicity of lines. An all round excellent Whitney. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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I loved this one, the rhyme scheme is just right for these words. The photo, one of your own, is really clever, you got the angle just right to show the simplicity of lines. An all round excellent Whitney. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 31-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Thank you Sandra. Had to use a wide angle lens to get it all.
Comment from sunnilicious
I get scared if my eyes look anywhere but ahead. It must be a phobia. It has nice symmetry in the architecture. Good photograph. Good notes. Good poem.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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I get scared if my eyes look anywhere but ahead. It must be a phobia. It has nice symmetry in the architecture. Good photograph. Good notes. Good poem.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Thanks sunnilicious. Had to use a wide angle lens to get all 4 floors in.
Comment from Sararb
Very good way of describing the escalators. I personally don't enjoy using them, but I do to keep from climbing stairs. Your poems always tell of different experiences that you have had. I enjoy reading them. Sara :)
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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Very good way of describing the escalators. I personally don't enjoy using them, but I do to keep from climbing stairs. Your poems always tell of different experiences that you have had. I enjoy reading them. Sara :)
Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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Thank you Sara. I glad I can keep you interested.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent poem with excellent meter and rhyme scheme followed consistently. Good alliteration. I enjoyed this one.
Preston
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent poem with excellent meter and rhyme scheme followed consistently. Good alliteration. I enjoyed this one.
Preston
Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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Thanks Preston.
Comment from june prescott
This is a nice poem about the specific escalators at Mall of America. I really like the photo showcasing the crisscross pattern. I don't know how quickly these operate (fast?), but most escalators I know move rather slowly and gently. I find it interesting that you are doing a series of poems about the MOA. I'll look for more. ~JP
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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This is a nice poem about the specific escalators at Mall of America. I really like the photo showcasing the crisscross pattern. I don't know how quickly these operate (fast?), but most escalators I know move rather slowly and gently. I find it interesting that you are doing a series of poems about the MOA. I'll look for more. ~JP
Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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Thank you June. I meant fast as compared to walking up steps. A bit of poetic license here.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Heck yeah, I remember those crazy staircases! You get a true cardiovascular work-out when you go to that place, let me tell ya! And, there is absolutely no way that you are going to see everything it has to offer in just a single day, either.
Nice little verse here, Mr. 'T'. I'm enjoying these Mall of America inspired poems!
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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Heck yeah, I remember those crazy staircases! You get a true cardiovascular work-out when you go to that place, let me tell ya! And, there is absolutely no way that you are going to see everything it has to offer in just a single day, either.
Nice little verse here, Mr. 'T'. I'm enjoying these Mall of America inspired poems!
Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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Thank you Dean. Glad to oblige.
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
Nice work Mr T Like the idea of that Mall Series .. Your work is always very interesting and informative Sure would like to visit that mall some day Don't have anything like that here on the big Island Perhaps that in itself is a good thing
TK
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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Nice work Mr T Like the idea of that Mall Series .. Your work is always very interesting and informative Sure would like to visit that mall some day Don't have anything like that here on the big Island Perhaps that in itself is a good thing
TK
Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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Thank you Sir T. With your beautiful year-round weather, you don't need an indoor mall.
