Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

The American carrion beetle? I thought they were all British. You mean they finally got a good drummer? Funny limerick. Especially the ending - ugh!

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013

Thanks you Ravenblack, that would be Beatles.

reply by ravenblack on 25-Jul-2013

I know. Just funnin'

reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013

Me too.

reply by ravenblack on 25-Jul-2013

Sorry. A little slow on the uptake. It's been a hard day's night.

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Ugh ... and the trash does get a trifle malodorous at this time of year too...

Blue bottle flies?? :)

p.s. It must be nice to be as snug as a bug in a rug ...

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013

Thank you Sonali, for sure!

Comment from Robin Gilmor

Excellent

Love the idea, but not a Limerick form: AABBA

I think that I could be a bug
But it seems to need a shrug
Around my trash that they do swarm
I spray, I swat with manly scorn
da dum da dum da dum da dum

On it's own a fun verse. If you don't rewrite, I'd remove the Limerick and make it a free style. Some reviewers will hurt you. Smiles, Robin :)

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013

Not sure where you are coming from. Three feett = 9 syllables. Two feet = 6 syllables. I have 5 lines aabba.

"The standard form of a limerick is a stanza of five lines, with the first, second and fifth rhyming with one another and having three feet of three syllables each; and the shorter third and fourth lines also rhyming with each other, but having only two feet of three syllables. The defining "foot" of a limerick's meter is usually the anapaest, (ta-ta-TUM), but limericks can also be considered amphibrachic (ta-TUM-ta)."

reply by Robin Gilmor on 25-Jul-2013

OK, I concede there are various meters, but the rhyme and feet must have the same punch. I looked it up after I was criticized and I'm repeating to you that which was shared with me. I like your verse, just not sure of the form. Still love ya, it's your write my dear friend. :)

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
Thought a limerick was supposed to be a funny erotic verse starting of..."There was a young lady from Nantucket..." You got the rhyme and flow right any way.
Preston

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013

Thanks Preston. Maybe another time. I didn't have any Nantucket Lady photographs handy. I do know a girl from Kentucky, who has a hound dog named Lucky....

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

I really like this. It's very clever and funny. Yes, we tend to forget about being all sensitive and soul-searching when something threatens our comfort, safety, or cleanliness!

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013

Thank you Janice. Glad to get a smile.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Hah! Nope, can't say as if I've ever wondered what it was like to be a bug. An arachnid, maybe, like a huge Funnel Web, or Tarantula. No,not a male Black-Widow, though. I love sex with my spouse, but I am also pretty fond of my head, right where it's at! :D

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013

Thank you Dean for that wonderfully macabre review.