Savannah Love
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Comment from Auroraboreal800
This is a very exiting chapter, very well written, as always. I think it's good how Paige made clear that Cash wasn't abusing her. I really enjoyed this reading.
God bless you Barbara.
:)
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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This is a very exiting chapter, very well written, as always. I think it's good how Paige made clear that Cash wasn't abusing her. I really enjoyed this reading.
God bless you Barbara.
:)
Comment Written 16-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from Apryle Willis
Very very Very well written piece. It was like reading a favorite book. I haven't seen any of the other chapters promoted but when I get extra time I will read through them. Thank you, Apryle
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Very very Very well written piece. It was like reading a favorite book. I haven't seen any of the other chapters promoted but when I get extra time I will read through them. Thank you, Apryle
Comment Written 16-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I usually promote in one of the top three places on the first page. I usually post on Sunday's.
Comment from Adri7enne
How about that? I happened upon the chapter where the old abusive husband is back on scene. I hope Cash wipes the floor with him. LOL! I know, I know, I shouldn't be promoting violence, but I always feel those guys should be taught to pick on someone their own size.
Good chapter, Barb.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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How about that? I happened upon the chapter where the old abusive husband is back on scene. I hope Cash wipes the floor with him. LOL! I know, I know, I shouldn't be promoting violence, but I always feel those guys should be taught to pick on someone their own size.
Good chapter, Barb.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. He's only a past finace.
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer does a good job of keeping the reader interested throughout the whole chapter. The transition is smooth as the events run together nicely. This chapter has good balance and a steady pace as I see nothing that I would add to or take from this chapter. Good job.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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The writer does a good job of keeping the reader interested throughout the whole chapter. The transition is smooth as the events run together nicely. This chapter has good balance and a steady pace as I see nothing that I would add to or take from this chapter. Good job.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your support
Comment from nora arjuna
Hi Barb, I liked the new springing events here - Cash being suspected and the fianc©'s sudden appearance. I noted this common phrase in your writing:
[After she released the breath], she said, "Now that this is settled,
Maybe now and then you can re-phrase it this way without repeating 'After...':
She released her breath and said...
Otherwise, all well-written, brief making it a fast read.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Hi Barb, I liked the new springing events here - Cash being suspected and the fianc©'s sudden appearance. I noted this common phrase in your writing:
[After she released the breath], she said, "Now that this is settled,
Maybe now and then you can re-phrase it this way without repeating 'After...':
She released her breath and said...
Otherwise, all well-written, brief making it a fast read.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. Will look at that area.
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Barbra,
i enjoyed this chapter which was rich in everyday details. When you begin the next section, I don't think you need mention the doctors office, I'd do something more subtle like; "Page wited anxiously on the examination table...", its the showing not telling thing. Also, when Cash is helping her into the house via the stairs, I think the correct punctuation should be"little Miss Do-Everything-yourself", which gives this the feeling of a title:) Nice cliffhanger with appearance of the mystery man. Great job--Ted
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Dear Barbra,
i enjoyed this chapter which was rich in everyday details. When you begin the next section, I don't think you need mention the doctors office, I'd do something more subtle like; "Page wited anxiously on the examination table...", its the showing not telling thing. Also, when Cash is helping her into the house via the stairs, I think the correct punctuation should be"little Miss Do-Everything-yourself", which gives this the feeling of a title:) Nice cliffhanger with appearance of the mystery man. Great job--Ted
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Sorry for the late reply, but I wanted time to make the corrections without making additional mistakes. Thank you for your kindness and the eagle eye.
Comment from Norbanus
Another very good segment. It kept the story flowing and the characters engaged. Like the other chapters, this one moved the yarn along. I didn't see any opportunities for improvement.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Another very good segment. It kept the story flowing and the characters engaged. Like the other chapters, this one moved the yarn along. I didn't see any opportunities for improvement.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Barbara,
This is another riveting chapter with suspense and tension all the way through. It is interesting that the doctor wants there to be problems between Cash and Paige. Fortunately, when the police arrive, the matter is cleared up quickly; however, Cash is a bit testy about the police checking his alibi. Their arrival back at the house with Paige's new cast and crutches is greeted by yet another surprise...the red Viper in her drive. They are then confronted by a man who challenges Cash about having his arm around the waist of his fiance. Very interesting...
Curtis
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Barbara,
This is another riveting chapter with suspense and tension all the way through. It is interesting that the doctor wants there to be problems between Cash and Paige. Fortunately, when the police arrive, the matter is cleared up quickly; however, Cash is a bit testy about the police checking his alibi. Their arrival back at the house with Paige's new cast and crutches is greeted by yet another surprise...the red Viper in her drive. They are then confronted by a man who challenges Cash about having his arm around the waist of his fiance. Very interesting...
Curtis
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
This moves the story along however BELOW NEEDS " AT THE END
solid alibies for the time of the break-in and the battering of the victims.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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This moves the story along however BELOW NEEDS " AT THE END
solid alibies for the time of the break-in and the battering of the victims.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Thank you for catching that. I have added the quotation mark. I appreciate your help.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Barbara this is a well penned post for your story. Loved the dialogue and the building interaction with other characters. Your ending sure put me into a tail spin. Great hook and well delivered.
Excellent writing my friend. No issues my end.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Hi Barbara this is a well penned post for your story. Loved the dialogue and the building interaction with other characters. Your ending sure put me into a tail spin. Great hook and well delivered.
Excellent writing my friend. No issues my end.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and the support. Hugs.
