Comment from robina1978

Excellent

Thanks for your foot note that taught me a lot again. I think you could call this a Haiku as well. I loved all the alliteration in it. Nice photo.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013

Thank you Ine. I could have, but too much alliteration for that.

reply by robina1978 on 08-Jul-2013

welcome

Comment from Callyope

Excellent

This haiku is definitely prime example of what a haiku is all about... These 17 syllables paint a picture in the mind that far exceeds blades of grass and greenery! More like the obnoxious brother-in-law took root to your couch for an indefinite period of time. Extraordinary haiku!!

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013

Thanks Callyope. All that alliteration disqualifies it as a Haiku. The Japanese will allow one alliteration, maybe, but definitely not 5.

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

Good subject for a haiku. The satori line is excellent. Wonderful alliteration of G words. Well thought out. Nicely written. Also, you matched the syllable count requirements. Good work.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013

Thanks sunnilicious. All that alliteration disqualifies it as a Haiku.

reply by sunnilicious on 08-Jul-2013

Really. That is news to me. But I'm sure alliteration has a better place. Have a good night :)

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

gaunt green glade grown guest ... I'm glad you got carried away - it's my favourite line, my friend!

I LOVE your nature poems ... in case I haven't mentioned this (like two score and ten times) before! :)

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013

Thank you Sonali. I love hearing it!

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
This is excellent 5-7-5 verse meeting all of the line/syllable requirements of the genre'. I like the alliteration and do not think that it's over done. The verse makes sense and I liked reading it.
Preston

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013

Thank you Preston. I appreciate the encouragement.

Comment from Capricorn30

Excellent

A fine, botanical poem, incorporating nice alliteration "gaunt green glade grown guest" to complete a great wildflower writing.
Excellent!
This Hedge Parsley indeed does look quite attractive amongst the tall grasses.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013

Thank you Capricorn. A very fine review, as usual.

reply by Capricorn30 on 07-Jul-2013

You're welcome:)
Have a great evening.

Comment from Robin Gilmor

Excellent

I'll give you a 2 cents review. I think it's great.. the picture is so mellow and cool of green with the white standing tall above. Your verse reflects the feeling and is delightfully presented. Smiles. Robin :)

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013

Thank you Robin.

Comment from gazzagodbod

Excellent

this is kind of apt forme cause i just mown the lawn and the smell is still in me nostrills well written my friend gazzagodbod

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013

Thank you gazza.

Comment from emjaihammond

Excellent

I really envy you people who know so much about the things that grow. I am just happy this year if something green appears in the yard. So hot and dry last year, our grass is a goner. Love the way you think though.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013

Thank you emjaihammond. May you rain fall gently and your garden grow well.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

I just thought about all the greens in the garden as I looked outside today. The alliteration is acceptable because the greens are green but different.
If that makes any sense......
I liked it a lot
Thanks
God bless

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013

Thank you kiwi jenny.