Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 54 "Chapter 11, part 5"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
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Comment from adewpearl
The other's sent me up - drop the apostrophe
for James wedding - James's
I want hear what Alice wrote - want to hear
After they left Cash, asked - After they left, Cash asked
laid half on her and half on Cash - lay half
Good dialogue throughout that conveys well their emotions - I can just feel Paige fishing for some clue of Cash's feelings in that closing question :-)
You continue to build suspense well about this unfolding mystery
Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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The other's sent me up - drop the apostrophe
for James wedding - James's
I want hear what Alice wrote - want to hear
After they left Cash, asked - After they left, Cash asked
laid half on her and half on Cash - lay half
Good dialogue throughout that conveys well their emotions - I can just feel Paige fishing for some clue of Cash's feelings in that closing question :-)
You continue to build suspense well about this unfolding mystery
Brooke
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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I thought I added that to. I guess I forgot to save. Thank you once again for sticking by me as I continue to make the same comma errors over and over again. DARN!! Some people never learn.
Comment from emjaihammond
This story is really coming together I really get involved in the reading and don't want to stop and wait for next time. I caught one little place early on in your writing. "after my bath I want too see... " You need to add the word to. Other than that, I see nothing wrong and a lot of things that are right. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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This story is really coming together I really get involved in the reading and don't want to stop and wait for next time. I caught one little place early on in your writing. "after my bath I want too see... " You need to add the word to. Other than that, I see nothing wrong and a lot of things that are right. Well done.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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I made the correction. Thank you for your eagle eye. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Gungalo
Oh so they found information in the diary pertaining to the broach and it make them all wonder. They are in for the night now and Cash is sleeping with Paige. Oh boy.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Oh so they found information in the diary pertaining to the broach and it make them all wonder. They are in for the night now and Cash is sleeping with Paige. Oh boy.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. Remember Cash is a good ol' Southern boy.
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I do,very much so.
Comment from lindalcreel
This was a really good read. I plan to go back and look at the other chapters, so I can catch up. Well done! The writing is clear and the dialogue is reflective of the South. Keep writing. This was enjoyable.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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This was a really good read. I plan to go back and look at the other chapters, so I can catch up. Well done! The writing is clear and the dialogue is reflective of the South. Keep writing. This was enjoyable.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
Morgan has good reason to be jealous of Cash. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. It looks like the ghost has won another round.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Morgan has good reason to be jealous of Cash. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. It looks like the ghost has won another round.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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I think you're right. Two males are trying to get Paige's love, Morgan and Cash. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome
Comment from BethShelby
I can't remember who Paige is related to this family they are researching. Since she inherited the house she must be an ancestor of some these people unless the house was sold at some point to an outsider. Now it appears Cash's ancestors are also involved. The ghost must be trying to get the rightful families back together. I'm enjoying the story and look forward to the next post.
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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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I can't remember who Paige is related to this family they are researching. Since she inherited the house she must be an ancestor of some these people unless the house was sold at some point to an outsider. Now it appears Cash's ancestors are also involved. The ghost must be trying to get the rightful families back together. I'm enjoying the story and look forward to the next post.
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Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Paige's aunt and uncle gave her the house, she has not direct line to the house, that's the problem. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Taffspride
It gets more and more intriguing each week Barbara. I have been sat out here on the lanai bored, since it is just too hot to do any more garden work. I picked up my nook and lo and behold another episode. It gets more and more interesting with each one.
As always your excellent story telling keeps your readers attention. Leaving us wanting more.
Thanks for another great installment.
Iechyd da
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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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It gets more and more intriguing each week Barbara. I have been sat out here on the lanai bored, since it is just too hot to do any more garden work. I picked up my nook and lo and behold another episode. It gets more and more interesting with each one.
As always your excellent story telling keeps your readers attention. Leaving us wanting more.
Thanks for another great installment.
Iechyd da
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Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I don't know what a 'lanai' is. Please tell me.
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You are welcome Barbara. I am so enjoying this story.
The lanai is an outside area covered by a continuation of the house roof line. Here in Florida we also call the additional bird cage area (screened area ) the lanai.
Hope this does not confuse.
Iechyd da
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No I you didn't. I have a screened in back porch that I sit in my rocking chair and watch the birds and squirrels play. I guess it's called a lanai. I just call it a screened in back porch. LOL
