Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "Chapter 11, part 1"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
64 total reviews
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Okay, one more chapter and then I must get to those dishes. At least the gals are safe. And, we know for sure there is supposedly a treasure somewhere.
Now, we just need Cash and Paige to really make up and life is better.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*<*)
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2014
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Okay, one more chapter and then I must get to those dishes. At least the gals are safe. And, we know for sure there is supposedly a treasure somewhere.
Now, we just need Cash and Paige to really make up and life is better.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*<*)
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2014
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God Bless
Comment from Sankey
oh me now this is getting really serious. Good work and the writing is very involving. Very good plot and drama right throughout here. No Spags
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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oh me now this is getting really serious. Good work and the writing is very involving. Very good plot and drama right throughout here. No Spags
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from justmarly
I'm glad they found them. If this doesn't blow over Paige is going to go back home. I hope not. But I think she feels for Cash. Good work! MJ
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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I'm glad they found them. If this doesn't blow over Paige is going to go back home. I hope not. But I think she feels for Cash. Good work! MJ
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and sticking with me.
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You are more than welcome. I would stick with you even more if I lived close. WE could write together. Mj
Comment from Titan Black
Was it Cash and Billy Joe, who pulled it off!? This
an exciting book. A real page turner. And you are
a great writer, doing a helluva job, at telling the
story. And I like it. I just hope the rest of the book
is as exciting as this paragraph. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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Was it Cash and Billy Joe, who pulled it off!? This
an exciting book. A real page turner. And you are
a great writer, doing a helluva job, at telling the
story. And I like it. I just hope the rest of the book
is as exciting as this paragraph. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from write hand blue
Although I've missed the story so far. The suspense can be felt. And a good visual gives the impression of a well written story. I could see no mistakes:-) Mel.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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Although I've missed the story so far. The suspense can be felt. And a good visual gives the impression of a well written story. I could see no mistakes:-) Mel.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from DRG24
Wow!!! A really good job with this that demonstrates your prowess at a novel writer. Nice moment at the end with the start of a who dunnit!!!!!
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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Wow!!! A really good job with this that demonstrates your prowess at a novel writer. Nice moment at the end with the start of a who dunnit!!!!!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
This was great, Barbara. I loved it, especially the involvement of the puppy because I think it lends realism. We dog owners know that's what could happen so easily! Nicely done.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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This was great, Barbara. I loved it, especially the involvement of the puppy because I think it lends realism. We dog owners know that's what could happen so easily! Nicely done.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013
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I am beginning to think Morgan is taking over this book. He is the star!!!! Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from amahra
Great chapter. If this was a TV series, Morgan would have his own show. He was quite the little hero here in this story. I think when they find the treasure, Morgan should get a diamond collar. Smile. I loved the realistic writing and especially the dialogue.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Great chapter. If this was a TV series, Morgan would have his own show. He was quite the little hero here in this story. I think when they find the treasure, Morgan should get a diamond collar. Smile. I loved the realistic writing and especially the dialogue.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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I think the name of the show might be "Morgan, The Wonder Puppy!" Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
You are definitely keeping it moving and full of suspense. I am enjoying the story and look forward to the next segment.
P.S. How are you feeling?
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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You are definitely keeping it moving and full of suspense. I am enjoying the story and look forward to the next segment.
P.S. How are you feeling?
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and continued support.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
The pacing in this is EXCELLENT.
Some punctuation fixes:
Cash put his hands out feeling for a wall.
Put a comma after "out"
He swung his arms over his head searching for a chain
Put a comma after "head"
Again, he heard growling
Does not need comma after "Again"
Morgan growled trying to chew
Put a comma after "growled"
It needs ice and the doc should look at it."
This needs a comma after "ice"
Cash moved her head to his shoulder, "It's all right," and kissed her forehead
I think just add "saying" or maybe "murmuring" after the word "shoulder," and put a comma as needed.
a-look-see
I think I would write "a look-see"
tied-up in that dungeon
I would take the hyphen out between tied and up
Those bruises on her face haveta hurt.
I think, if you are going for an informal tone here, maybe say:
Those bruises on her face have gotta hurt.
mardi gras
Capitalize this as Mardi Gras as it is a specific festival
The man's skin was white, but tanned
Doesn't need comma
but I knew where all the jewels were at
I think this would sound better as if she finished what he was saying like this:
but that I knew where all the jewels were at
This sounds like a story I want to catch up on. Nice job!
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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The pacing in this is EXCELLENT.
Some punctuation fixes:
Cash put his hands out feeling for a wall.
Put a comma after "out"
He swung his arms over his head searching for a chain
Put a comma after "head"
Again, he heard growling
Does not need comma after "Again"
Morgan growled trying to chew
Put a comma after "growled"
It needs ice and the doc should look at it."
This needs a comma after "ice"
Cash moved her head to his shoulder, "It's all right," and kissed her forehead
I think just add "saying" or maybe "murmuring" after the word "shoulder," and put a comma as needed.
a-look-see
I think I would write "a look-see"
tied-up in that dungeon
I would take the hyphen out between tied and up
Those bruises on her face haveta hurt.
I think, if you are going for an informal tone here, maybe say:
Those bruises on her face have gotta hurt.
mardi gras
Capitalize this as Mardi Gras as it is a specific festival
The man's skin was white, but tanned
Doesn't need comma
but I knew where all the jewels were at
I think this would sound better as if she finished what he was saying like this:
but that I knew where all the jewels were at
This sounds like a story I want to catch up on. Nice job!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Sorry for the wait to reply. I needed time to make the corrections. I appreciate your eagle eye.
