Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 47 "Chapter 10, part 6"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
68 total reviews
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
That ornery Billy Joe! This is gittin' gooder!
Well, at least he didn't have to tell Cash about makin' hay! Lordy, the guy must not get out much down there in the south.
Another good one.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*<*)
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2014
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That ornery Billy Joe! This is gittin' gooder!
Well, at least he didn't have to tell Cash about makin' hay! Lordy, the guy must not get out much down there in the south.
Another good one.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*<*)
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2014
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You are really on a roll
Comment from Sankey
Good stuff again. pretty strong but I reckon necessary language.
One Spag I think this time.
Should this be (allowing for Southern dialect etc) burnt her p(ur)(-u)dy little ass
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Good stuff again. pretty strong but I reckon necessary language.
One Spag I think this time.
Should this be (allowing for Southern dialect etc) burnt her p(ur)(-u)dy little ass
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from justmarly
He slugged the steering wheel, his anger expanding. How come this Yankee gets
I feel stupid trying to show a smart lady some little mistake. This is good. They are angry. Wow like that. MJ
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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He slugged the steering wheel, his anger expanding. How come this Yankee gets
I feel stupid trying to show a smart lady some little mistake. This is good. They are angry. Wow like that. MJ
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your encouraging words.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
Ah, when pride gets in the way people act foolish and get twice as stubborn as you've shown here. Nice piece. Enjoyable story.
reply by the author on 25-May-2013
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Ah, when pride gets in the way people act foolish and get twice as stubborn as you've shown here. Nice piece. Enjoyable story.
Comment Written 23-May-2013
reply by the author on 25-May-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and continued support.
Comment from notdeadyet
This is an interesting bit of dialogue highlighting the masculine side of things. I haven't read any other chapters, so this is as far as I can go with comments. I think you have done a good job with your characterization. The dialogue seems to ring true. It sounds like real people
reply by the author on 25-May-2013
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This is an interesting bit of dialogue highlighting the masculine side of things. I haven't read any other chapters, so this is as far as I can go with comments. I think you have done a good job with your characterization. The dialogue seems to ring true. It sounds like real people
Comment Written 23-May-2013
reply by the author on 25-May-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jjstar
I'm so sorry I haven't been able to keep up. I was going to go back and pick up where I left off, but I figured I would not have a chance until summer vacation. I love that there is a conflict between Cash and Paige. Like Billy Joe said though, the make up will be awesome! :)
reply by the author on 25-May-2013
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I'm so sorry I haven't been able to keep up. I was going to go back and pick up where I left off, but I figured I would not have a chance until summer vacation. I love that there is a conflict between Cash and Paige. Like Billy Joe said though, the make up will be awesome! :)
Comment Written 23-May-2013
reply by the author on 25-May-2013
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I am glad you caught this review. I understand being busy. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Jane Johnson
two words I wasn't sure was right: (isn't Newsstand two words?)
chockfull (is that really one word?)
Otherwise, I'm quite impressed. I like the way the characters sound with their accents and it was as if I was standing right there. Good imagery. Nicely done! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-May-2013
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two words I wasn't sure was right: (isn't Newsstand two words?)
chockfull (is that really one word?)
Otherwise, I'm quite impressed. I like the way the characters sound with their accents and it was as if I was standing right there. Good imagery. Nicely done! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-May-2013
reply by the author on 25-May-2013
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I will double check those two words. According to my dictionary newsstand is one word and chock-full is hyphenated. I will fix that. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from MuseD
This review is tough for me, coming into the story late like this. I'm new, so bear with me please, Barbara. I'm assuming that the full meaning each of these chapters can't be picked up by a new reader who hasn't read the rest, right? How would that even be possible. You know what I mean? Picking up Chapter Ten and then hollering, "What's going on?"
Still I can piece together things! I can! We're in Georgia. I thought for a bit that it was set awhile ago - you know the north vs. south hints and all. Then the car tipped me off. So I'm not sure when in time we are, but there are cars! Anymore there are as many yankees in the south as rebels, so I'm thinking maybe a few years ago?
Wait, they're swearing...that's used to be a southern no-no, so I'm back to now!
See, I'm catching up. ;)
I must continue to piece these together before I can give you any useful feedback. I noticed no errors.
reply by the author on 25-May-2013
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This review is tough for me, coming into the story late like this. I'm new, so bear with me please, Barbara. I'm assuming that the full meaning each of these chapters can't be picked up by a new reader who hasn't read the rest, right? How would that even be possible. You know what I mean? Picking up Chapter Ten and then hollering, "What's going on?"
Still I can piece together things! I can! We're in Georgia. I thought for a bit that it was set awhile ago - you know the north vs. south hints and all. Then the car tipped me off. So I'm not sure when in time we are, but there are cars! Anymore there are as many yankees in the south as rebels, so I'm thinking maybe a few years ago?
Wait, they're swearing...that's used to be a southern no-no, so I'm back to now!
See, I'm catching up. ;)
I must continue to piece these together before I can give you any useful feedback. I noticed no errors.
Comment Written 22-May-2013
reply by the author on 25-May-2013
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Then the car tipped me off. So I'm not sure when in time we are, but there are cars! The first paragraph Cash hits his steering wheel and fumbles with his keys, then starts his truck. You didn't need to wait until you got to the guys talking about the car. Very true there are as many Yankees in the South and Southerners today, but many born and bred Southerners are still fighting the war. If you know nothing about the story then you it is usual on this site to review according to mistakes. Since you found none, then I don't understand the reason for the four.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
Billy Joe gives some sage advice here, Cash is putting in too much pressure, but then he's probably more aware of what is likely to happen to Paige without help.
Still, perhaps the break and the argument will give them both time to cool off and think.
Patrick
reply by the author on 22-May-2013
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Hi Barbara,
Billy Joe gives some sage advice here, Cash is putting in too much pressure, but then he's probably more aware of what is likely to happen to Paige without help.
Still, perhaps the break and the argument will give them both time to cool off and think.
Patrick
Comment Written 22-May-2013
reply by the author on 22-May-2013
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I think they need to cool off. Hopefully it helps. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Mishelly
I really loved the dialogue in this scene. Billy Joe was very funny but still gave great advice.
My favorite line was - Out of twelve years of marriage, I got some real good hay-makin out of that yelling.
The innuendo was subtle but funny. I look forward to finding out if Billy Joe's advice to Cash works.
reply by the author on 22-May-2013
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I really loved the dialogue in this scene. Billy Joe was very funny but still gave great advice.
My favorite line was - Out of twelve years of marriage, I got some real good hay-makin out of that yelling.
The innuendo was subtle but funny. I look forward to finding out if Billy Joe's advice to Cash works.
Comment Written 21-May-2013
reply by the author on 22-May-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and continued support.
