Picture Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "Wandered Past the Willows"Photograph Inspired Poems
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It's a lovely photo, Treischel, and your triolet works well with it. I enjoyed the wording of taking a walk by the pond, the image comes immediately to mind. A pleasure to read! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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It's a lovely photo, Treischel, and your triolet works well with it. I enjoyed the wording of taking a walk by the pond, the image comes immediately to mind. A pleasure to read! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Thank you Sanda. I was a quiet interlude.
Comment from tedanytime
There is no wandering here. The rhymes faithfully follow this fine form!
Peaceful wandering on pebbled path watching minnows past the willows.
Enjoyable morning scenes...want to be there...
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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There is no wandering here. The rhymes faithfully follow this fine form!
Peaceful wandering on pebbled path watching minnows past the willows.
Enjoyable morning scenes...want to be there...
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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Thanks Tedanytime .
Comment from samandlancelot
Treischel,
I enjoyed experiencing your peaceful walk past the willows and by the pond. "minnows in the shallows" is very nice rhyming within the line. Excellent triolet poem!
Patricia
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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Treischel,
I enjoyed experiencing your peaceful walk past the willows and by the pond. "minnows in the shallows" is very nice rhyming within the line. Excellent triolet poem!
Patricia
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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Thank you Patricia
Comment from mroberts
A fine triolet. Flows nicely inducing a zen like trance. The willows lines shimmer like a reflection in the water. The alliteration works well and is not overdone. I like the slight mischief in the shallows/ willows rhyme.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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A fine triolet. Flows nicely inducing a zen like trance. The willows lines shimmer like a reflection in the water. The alliteration works well and is not overdone. I like the slight mischief in the shallows/ willows rhyme.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Thank you mroberts. Excellent review. I am pleased with your words.
Comment from Bayberry
I have a special fondness for triolet poetry, and also for ponds. Love feeding the ducks and watching the fish. The picture is just as beautiful as the poem's words and I enjoyed encountering them both very much.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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I have a special fondness for triolet poetry, and also for ponds. Love feeding the ducks and watching the fish. The picture is just as beautiful as the poem's words and I enjoyed encountering them both very much.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much rhymster. Glad we could share the joy of that lovely spot.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
It's a lovely triolet that flows
smoothly and rhymes well. You picture is beautiful. I would love to have a picnic table there to enjoy on nice days.
Very well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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It's a lovely triolet that flows
smoothly and rhymes well. You picture is beautiful. I would love to have a picnic table there to enjoy on nice days.
Very well done. Nancy
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Thank you Nancy. Wonderful thought.
Comment from Robin Gilmor
A lovely an gracious poem. Your picture adds greatly to the
visual effect. I just love the willows. Your description carries the
reader to the water where the minnows swim. Good use of alliteration. A very enjoyable verse. Robin :)
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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A lovely an gracious poem. Your picture adds greatly to the
visual effect. I just love the willows. Your description carries the
reader to the water where the minnows swim. Good use of alliteration. A very enjoyable verse. Robin :)
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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Thanks Robin. I was so happy when I found that spot.
Comment from adewpearl
You do take lovely photos :-)
solid rhymes in good triolet form including the proximate rhyme of willows/shallows
good alliteration in wandering/weeping willows
and in pebbled path
and in peaceful place
lovely detail of setting - I particularly like the minnows
you incorporate the repeating lines well
a lovely poem in good triolet form :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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You do take lovely photos :-)
solid rhymes in good triolet form including the proximate rhyme of willows/shallows
good alliteration in wandering/weeping willows
and in pebbled path
and in peaceful place
lovely detail of setting - I particularly like the minnows
you incorporate the repeating lines well
a lovely poem in good triolet form :-) Brooke
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much Brooke, for your encouraging review, and compliment on the photo.
Comment from poetbear
Reminds me of Savannah or Thoreau's Walden pond but they don't have willows there.
One of your best for technique and talent.
A must read fr writers and readers alike.
A Poetic gift for all.
Well done!
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Reminds me of Savannah or Thoreau's Walden pond but they don't have willows there.
One of your best for technique and talent.
A must read fr writers and readers alike.
A Poetic gift for all.
Well done!
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Wow! A stunning review. I am flattered.
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Most deserved.
Comment from 9999pool
Beautiful Triolet. We just took a walk with the poem, passed the willows and watched the minnows.
The poem reads like a breeze and we were taken to this wonderful walk as if all our lives we have been doing that in our minds.
Always walking and searching up front of what to see and expect. Life is a wonderful walk by the willows that looks like the meadows!
Good write Tom. Well done! Excellent!
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Beautiful Triolet. We just took a walk with the poem, passed the willows and watched the minnows.
The poem reads like a breeze and we were taken to this wonderful walk as if all our lives we have been doing that in our minds.
Always walking and searching up front of what to see and expect. Life is a wonderful walk by the willows that looks like the meadows!
Good write Tom. Well done! Excellent!
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Wow! Thank you Ritchie. I really appreciate this great review and fabulous suoerglous rating. Hood to see your back, I've been missing you.
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Hi Tom,
Thanks for the welcome. This Triolet is so breezy and light. It make us see the path we are walking in front of us. And somehow we got lost when the lines repeat themselves, I walk round and round and couldn't get out admiring the scenery, smiles.
Sometimes a simple poem can say so much and this one is one of them. Good work, Tom.
Nice to hear form you too!
Cheers, Ritchie.
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You should take a look at my bubble poem, Orbs of Joy, and also the free verse, When,( you might recognize that picture as me).
