Savannah Love
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Comment from AprilShower
Apparently, someone believes if she thinks there's a ghost in the house, she'll be scared away. For a moment there, she was actually was thinking of leaving.
Cash shut put the jewelry inside the box and relocked it.
Suggestion:
Cash put the jewelry back inside the box, shut it, and relocked it.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Apparently, someone believes if she thinks there's a ghost in the house, she'll be scared away. For a moment there, she was actually was thinking of leaving.
Cash shut put the jewelry inside the box and relocked it.
Suggestion:
Cash put the jewelry back inside the box, shut it, and relocked it.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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I have fixed that sentence, another reviewer noticed it. Thank you for your eagle eye and review.
Comment from barkingdog
And it gets even more interesting. Someone's been in the bedroom and left a box.(I'd still take the next plane out. LOL) It's scary--someone wandering around undetected.
I think you have an extra word here:
Cash (shut) put the jewelry inside the box and relocked it.
Cash put the jewelry inside the box and locked it.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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And it gets even more interesting. Someone's been in the bedroom and left a box.(I'd still take the next plane out. LOL) It's scary--someone wandering around undetected.
I think you have an extra word here:
Cash (shut) put the jewelry inside the box and relocked it.
Cash put the jewelry inside the box and locked it.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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I had changed that sentence as I posted and still got it wrong. Thank you for bringing to my attention. I appreciate the eagle eye.
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You're welcome. It happens to me all the time. I leave in part of an edit. No problem. :) e
Comment from Writingfundimension
Lovely, the ghosts are BAAACK. I like the interplay among these four young people. And finding the box and confederate money is so cool. Really enjoyed this chapter. barbara. Warmest regards, Bev
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Lovely, the ghosts are BAAACK. I like the interplay among these four young people. And finding the box and confederate money is so cool. Really enjoyed this chapter. barbara. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, barbara.
Comment from adewpearl
a cameo, a pearl necklace and antique Confederate bills - sounds like a treasure trove to me
beautiful jewelry, but I've never those - never seen those
more mystery as Paige reveals the box wasn't there a couple of days ago - you do know how to create suspense
And the plot thickens... Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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a cameo, a pearl necklace and antique Confederate bills - sounds like a treasure trove to me
beautiful jewelry, but I've never those - never seen those
more mystery as Paige reveals the box wasn't there a couple of days ago - you do know how to create suspense
And the plot thickens... Brooke
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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I changed that sentence as I was posting because I didn't like it and still messed it up. Darn!!!! Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
Very good chapter, excellent tension builder and a nice surprise adding the strage box with the necklace and the Confederate money.
A correction needed I think -
but I've never those or the box. Where - but I've never [seen] those or the box.
Where ...
Patrick
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Hi Barbara,
Very good chapter, excellent tension builder and a nice surprise adding the strage box with the necklace and the Confederate money.
A correction needed I think -
but I've never those or the box. Where - but I've never [seen] those or the box.
Where ...
Patrick
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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I have added seen. Another reviewer caught it too. Thank you for the eagle eye and kind review.
Comment from Taffspride
Oh boy more mysterious goings on. Why would anyone put the box there? Unless it is stolen property and the blame is meant to be put on Paige.
I really do enjoy the way you keep your reader engaged in the plot with dialog to keep the story moving along.
Thanks for sharing
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Oh boy more mysterious goings on. Why would anyone put the box there? Unless it is stolen property and the blame is meant to be put on Paige.
I really do enjoy the way you keep your reader engaged in the plot with dialog to keep the story moving along.
Thanks for sharing
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and continued support.
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Well, you've got a ghost or a real person doing something for sure. I'd be tempted to take that flight but i hate unanswered questions so probably not. Janie's mother is in the hospital again. God loves you and i do too.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Well, you've got a ghost or a real person doing something for sure. I'd be tempted to take that flight but i hate unanswered questions so probably not. Janie's mother is in the hospital again. God loves you and i do too.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and continued support. You all are in my prayers.
Comment from Gungalo
Oh boy more ghostly findings. I wonder how that box got in there and by whom. You'd think they would be more on clue by now but they are not. LOL, at any rate, no one is going to chase her out of her home.
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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Oh boy more ghostly findings. I wonder how that box got in there and by whom. You'd think they would be more on clue by now but they are not. LOL, at any rate, no one is going to chase her out of her home.
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Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Paige is in fighting mode now. Thank you for the kind review.
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Smile. Good for her.
Comment from c_lucas
"I'll take them to Mom's friend tomorrow along with the Confederate bill, and button." (Speaker??)
In old houses, one must get use to things appearing and disappearing. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. The suspense is increasing.
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"I'll take them to Mom's friend tomorrow along with the Confederate bill, and button." (Speaker??)
In old houses, one must get use to things appearing and disappearing. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. The suspense is increasing.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I will check that area. I am pretty sure the comma shouldn't be there either.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from sweetwoodjax
thsi si very wel lwritten, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where cash finds some jewelry and confederate money on a shelf paige nknew was empty. she wants to leave but cash gets her fighting spirit up when he asks if she wants the crooks to win. i enjoyed reading it
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thsi si very wel lwritten, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where cash finds some jewelry and confederate money on a shelf paige nknew was empty. she wants to leave but cash gets her fighting spirit up when he asks if she wants the crooks to win. i enjoyed reading it
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Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
