Savannah Love
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Comment from rtobaygo
Per usual, excellent characterization, dialogue, and flow. Did have one question regarding the following; Cash stepped into Paige's bedroom. "Looking for some blankets." At first I thought it was a declarative sentence, but something had me read as a question.
Kudos!
Take care,
Ray
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Per usual, excellent characterization, dialogue, and flow. Did have one question regarding the following; Cash stepped into Paige's bedroom. "Looking for some blankets." At first I thought it was a declarative sentence, but something had me read as a question.
Kudos!
Take care,
Ray
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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It isn't a question because he's the one looking, but I see if I can get it to read better. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Really well done as always, though I need to go back to the very beginning and read it. I started in the middle but it is still attention getting and very interesting. Enjoyed reading it, Rox
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Really well done as always, though I need to go back to the very beginning and read it. I started in the middle but it is still attention getting and very interesting. Enjoyed reading it, Rox
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sloegin
The plot thickens. A well presented chapter and your dialogue rings true. Great ending, make me want more, and that's the way a chapter should end.
But . . . There's always a "but" You used the term, "Released a deep breath" three times in this chapter. There must be a way to get your message across with out using the same term three times.
Sloegin
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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The plot thickens. A well presented chapter and your dialogue rings true. Great ending, make me want more, and that's the way a chapter should end.
But . . . There's always a "but" You used the term, "Released a deep breath" three times in this chapter. There must be a way to get your message across with out using the same term three times.
Sloegin
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I will figure out something other than released a deep breath.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
The suspense in this story is great - one of your best (in
my humble opinion). Just the thought of anyone
getting into the house is fearful enough, but how are
they/he doing it without being seen, I'm wondering.
You've obviously done our research on this, Barbara.
Well done, my friend.
I had a pendant just like that - gave it to my daughter.
Margaret
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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The suspense in this story is great - one of your best (in
my humble opinion). Just the thought of anyone
getting into the house is fearful enough, but how are
they/he doing it without being seen, I'm wondering.
You've obviously done our research on this, Barbara.
Well done, my friend.
I had a pendant just like that - gave it to my daughter.
Margaret
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
It's certainly evident someone has access to her house. That would be scary as you showed, but being chased out; you penned it -no pun intended.
Looking forward to the next part.
Blessings,
Carolyn
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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It's certainly evident someone has access to her house. That would be scary as you showed, but being chased out; you penned it -no pun intended.
Looking forward to the next part.
Blessings,
Carolyn
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, this was quite the chapter, my friend. Who could possibly be gaining access to the house with all of them there and without getting caught? I don't have a clue where you are going with this, but man, the suspense is great!
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Oh, this was quite the chapter, my friend. Who could possibly be gaining access to the house with all of them there and without getting caught? I don't have a clue where you are going with this, but man, the suspense is great!
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
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Always a pleasure, Barb!
Comment from Perp Ihebom
Nice and punchy ending. I love the firm resolve not to let an imaginary ghost scare one into taking panic measures. It remains to see whether it is a real ghost at work or not. kudos
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Nice and punchy ending. I love the firm resolve not to let an imaginary ghost scare one into taking panic measures. It remains to see whether it is a real ghost at work or not. kudos
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Bryana
Hi Barbara, I love it! You look for a blanket and find a box with jewelry. Now I'm curious how valuable the necklaces are and who they belong to.
I know is fiction but the way you write I feel as if you were telling us about people you know well.
I'll be looking for the next chapter.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Hi Barbara, I love it! You look for a blanket and find a box with jewelry. Now I'm curious how valuable the necklaces are and who they belong to.
I know is fiction but the way you write I feel as if you were telling us about people you know well.
I'll be looking for the next chapter.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sunnilicious
The novel is coming along well. Good dialogue. The story appears informative and well researched. Yet, the story seems like a real life situation. Beautiful cameo in a photograph too. Excellent work. Great!
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The novel is coming along well. Good dialogue. The story appears informative and well researched. Yet, the story seems like a real life situation. Beautiful cameo in a photograph too. Excellent work. Great!
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mrs Jones
I can't imagine what's scarier, a ghost or a real person. I guess we will have to wait to find out. Another well written, well edited chapter. A pleasure to read.
Cheers
Rose
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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I can't imagine what's scarier, a ghost or a real person. I guess we will have to wait to find out. Another well written, well edited chapter. A pleasure to read.
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
