Savannah Love
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very wel lwritten, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where someone breaks into the house, paige wants to leave and they discover the parlor has been tossed.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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this is very wel lwritten, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where someone breaks into the house, paige wants to leave and they discover the parlor has been tossed.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from donaldww
With the supplies being rummaged through, it is starting to sounded like the ghost might have been an animal, like a racoon. But with the artwork missing and drawers scattered, it sounds like the thieves know what they're after.
. . . on the fron[t] door.
Keep up the good work!
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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With the supplies being rummaged through, it is starting to sounded like the ghost might have been an animal, like a racoon. But with the artwork missing and drawers scattered, it sounds like the thieves know what they're after.
. . . on the fron[t] door.
Keep up the good work!
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Sometimes I swear little gremlins come in and leave letters and small words out of my posts. I know when I edit them over and over again, they were there. LOL Thank you for the catch. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
This is getting exciting; seems there is something in the house and Paige may be in the way. Looking forward to finding out what and who.
Below is from above and a way I know to show you where:
Oh yea, don't forget the KKK left a mysterious note on the fron door." [ front ]
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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This is getting exciting; seems there is something in the house and Paige may be in the way. Looking forward to finding out what and who.
Below is from above and a way I know to show you where:
Oh yea, don't forget the KKK left a mysterious note on the fron door." [ front ]
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the catch. I appreciate the help.
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well witten with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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This is very well witten with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer does a good job of holding the attention of the reader and heightening the suspense of the reader. This chapter leaves a lot of questions in the readers mind. Somebodies been in this house but why?
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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The writer does a good job of holding the attention of the reader and heightening the suspense of the reader. This chapter leaves a lot of questions in the readers mind. Somebodies been in this house but why?
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and insight.
Comment from adewpearl
You create an atmosphere of suspense and potential danger well with the mysterious noises and the men searching for their source while armed and ready to protect themselves
as he walked passed - past
Cash slugged the banister post - good example of non-verbal communication showing his emotion
a ghost-infested house - add the hyphen
Oh yea, don't forget - yeah
You end with a good cliffhanger as we wonder what the mysterious person or people are looking for as they rummage
Brooke
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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You create an atmosphere of suspense and potential danger well with the mysterious noises and the men searching for their source while armed and ready to protect themselves
as he walked passed - past
Cash slugged the banister post - good example of non-verbal communication showing his emotion
a ghost-infested house - add the hyphen
Oh yea, don't forget - yeah
You end with a good cliffhanger as we wonder what the mysterious person or people are looking for as they rummage
Brooke
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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I checked my dictionary about passed, are you sure? I thought I had it correct. I will addd the hyphens. Thank you for the kind review and eagle eye.
Comment from elgone
Found a couple of minor problems. Sorry your vacation is over. Have to wait a whole week to find out what's going on. Good story with a lot of suspense and a ghost fooling around. What's not to like?
After a short pause[d],
Mary Pat's check - cheek
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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Found a couple of minor problems. Sorry your vacation is over. Have to wait a whole week to find out what's going on. Good story with a lot of suspense and a ghost fooling around. What's not to like?
After a short pause[d],
Mary Pat's check - cheek
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Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you for your eagle eye. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Taffspride
Oh Barbara what an exciting chapter, it just moved along so well.
Once again your use of dialog to bring your reader right into the story works so well.
Leaving us, as you do with a cliff hanger, is a guarantee that your reader will stay with this story.
I did notice just one little typo.
After a short paused, pause.
Cannot wait for the next chapter.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Oh Barbara what an exciting chapter, it just moved along so well.
Once again your use of dialog to bring your reader right into the story works so well.
Leaving us, as you do with a cliff hanger, is a guarantee that your reader will stay with this story.
I did notice just one little typo.
After a short paused, pause.
Cannot wait for the next chapter.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and continued support.
Comment from Gungalo
Boy someone really doesn't want her to stay. Or something. Are they looking for something or just making a mess? I wonder if Cash has any ideas. He's been pretty right on so far.
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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Boy someone really doesn't want her to stay. Or something. Are they looking for something or just making a mess? I wonder if Cash has any ideas. He's been pretty right on so far.
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Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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I think Cash is completely at a loss right now. So am I. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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Noooo don't be you.
Comment from mizzkris20
Your story is filled with suspense. From the very beginning you grabbed and held my attention. This is a fine addition to your book, Keep writing and I will keep reading
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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Your story is filled with suspense. From the very beginning you grabbed and held my attention. This is a fine addition to your book, Keep writing and I will keep reading
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Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
