Savannah Love
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Comment from mshugh
Nice smooth flow, I see you are still finding time to write. That's good. Hope your health is holding up. Story has a nice cadence (I know its military - but it's comforting LOL) to it
Mic hael
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Nice smooth flow, I see you are still finding time to write. That's good. Hope your health is holding up. Story has a nice cadence (I know its military - but it's comforting LOL) to it
Mic hael
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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My health is doing okay. I go to the doc in April for blood work and a bone density test. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from donaldww
Another excellent post. I found a few typos for you to check:
She has an aunt [e]ast of town.
(I don't think East needs a capital here.)
Nothing seem[ed] out of order.
(Should be in past tense.)
There's no secret tunnels
(
There's no secret tunnel.
or
There are no secret tunnels.
)
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Another excellent post. I found a few typos for you to check:
She has an aunt [e]ast of town.
(I don't think East needs a capital here.)
Nothing seem[ed] out of order.
(Should be in past tense.)
There's no secret tunnels
(
There's no secret tunnel.
or
There are no secret tunnels.
)
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I have made the corrections.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, you little minx! You have your readers on edge again, and left us dangling! This is so exiting - you better have another part posted soon, YOU! LOL. I loved it!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Oh, you little minx! You have your readers on edge again, and left us dangling! This is so exiting - you better have another part posted soon, YOU! LOL. I loved it!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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I am hoping to post on Thursday. Thank you for the kind review.
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Interesting piece was too short but I guess I'll have to wait since my interest is now on high alert. When and where does the story take place? As to the piece, the interchange between the characters id well done, the pacing even and the gradual revealing of secrets titillating. Need more details o the house but I just came into the read. Good effort. Keep going.
Regards:
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Interesting piece was too short but I guess I'll have to wait since my interest is now on high alert. When and where does the story take place? As to the piece, the interchange between the characters id well done, the pacing even and the gradual revealing of secrets titillating. Need more details o the house but I just came into the read. Good effort. Keep going.
Regards:
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Savannah, GA in 2013, the house has been well defined in the earlier posts. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Strange things have been happening. A racist element in the community is determined to prevent Paige and Nala from getting together on a friendly basis. Now Nala is being threatened with someone knocking on the door and then disappearing. She's spending the night elsewhere. Cash and Billy Joe check the library and find the photograph of Bradley Bookman is tilted. Strange goings on at Paige's house. Of course the house has to have a secret staircase. Well, doesn't such an old house deserve to have one? Great work. Suspense builds, and great characterization. judi
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Strange things have been happening. A racist element in the community is determined to prevent Paige and Nala from getting together on a friendly basis. Now Nala is being threatened with someone knocking on the door and then disappearing. She's spending the night elsewhere. Cash and Billy Joe check the library and find the photograph of Bradley Bookman is tilted. Strange goings on at Paige's house. Of course the house has to have a secret staircase. Well, doesn't such an old house deserve to have one? Great work. Suspense builds, and great characterization. judi
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and the insight.
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You're so welcome. You really create suspense. judi
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good write and needs no changes to the story. I enjoyed reading and the script was well written with excellent presentation. Thanks for sharing with me. Mary
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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A good write and needs no changes to the story. I enjoyed reading and the script was well written with excellent presentation. Thanks for sharing with me. Mary
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
Another good chapter, Barbara. sounds like things are beginning to happen. It'a a good thing these guys all stick together.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Another good chapter, Barbara. sounds like things are beginning to happen. It'a a good thing these guys all stick together.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from God's Writer
Again another beautiful story from one with such a beautiful mind. I don't usually have time to read stories, but find it a treat to read yours. You kept my interest the whole way through
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Again another beautiful story from one with such a beautiful mind. I don't usually have time to read stories, but find it a treat to read yours. You kept my interest the whole way through
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
Good chapter, it holds the tension well, and ends with a great hook. Where does that staircase go? And who else knows about it?
For a fast post, it didn't seem to have any spag.
Enjoy your break.
Patrick
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Hi Barbara,
Good chapter, it holds the tension well, and ends with a great hook. Where does that staircase go? And who else knows about it?
For a fast post, it didn't seem to have any spag.
Enjoy your break.
Patrick
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
This is an interesting turn of events, as Cash and Billy Joe learn some secrets of the mansion Paige inherited. I'm surprised that Cash, as an architect restoring the old home didn't find the hidden staircase when he first surveyed the site and started repairs.
I wonder if an intruder moved the picture, perhaps looking for other secrets. Is it possible that somebody is trying to scare Paige into leaving so they can look for s treasure hidden during the Civil War.
Maybe the threats aren't aimed at Paige or Nala, but are more interested in the old mansion. Many treasures are still rumored to have been hidden in Savannah to hide the from General Sherman. Racial tensions might provide a good cover for ulterior motives.
This is another well-written and SPAG-free chapter.
Love and Irish Hugs,
Roger
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Hi Barbara:)
This is an interesting turn of events, as Cash and Billy Joe learn some secrets of the mansion Paige inherited. I'm surprised that Cash, as an architect restoring the old home didn't find the hidden staircase when he first surveyed the site and started repairs.
I wonder if an intruder moved the picture, perhaps looking for other secrets. Is it possible that somebody is trying to scare Paige into leaving so they can look for s treasure hidden during the Civil War.
Maybe the threats aren't aimed at Paige or Nala, but are more interested in the old mansion. Many treasures are still rumored to have been hidden in Savannah to hide the from General Sherman. Racial tensions might provide a good cover for ulterior motives.
This is another well-written and SPAG-free chapter.
Love and Irish Hugs,
Roger
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Thank you Roger for the wonderful review. I appreciate your constant support and ideas.
