Savannah Love
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Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh Barbara, this was such a charming chapter! I am getting so attached to your characters! (LOL!) Poor, sweet Paige. One thing I noticed (and it might be just me) but Paige said, "I've only been here a week." Now it might just be because there's so much distance (timewise) between your postings, but it doesn't seem long enough to me. So much has happened already, and Paige has developed such CLOSENESS with her new friends, even double that would seem short to me. But as I say, it could be just me - I take awhile to get close to people. LOL. Anyway, it's just a thought.
Now as to the rest of it, you are really making me VERY fond of these folk, and that puppy! That speaks volumes as far as I'm concerned about your ability to build characters and a plot. I'm LOVING every word. There are few stories I follow so eagerly - yours is definately a favorite of mine!
I love the ending of this chapter too - way to keep us hanging onto the edge of our seats!!!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Oh Barbara, this was such a charming chapter! I am getting so attached to your characters! (LOL!) Poor, sweet Paige. One thing I noticed (and it might be just me) but Paige said, "I've only been here a week." Now it might just be because there's so much distance (timewise) between your postings, but it doesn't seem long enough to me. So much has happened already, and Paige has developed such CLOSENESS with her new friends, even double that would seem short to me. But as I say, it could be just me - I take awhile to get close to people. LOL. Anyway, it's just a thought.
Now as to the rest of it, you are really making me VERY fond of these folk, and that puppy! That speaks volumes as far as I'm concerned about your ability to build characters and a plot. I'm LOVING every word. There are few stories I follow so eagerly - yours is definately a favorite of mine!
I love the ending of this chapter too - way to keep us hanging onto the edge of our seats!!!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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It has actually only been a week time wise, but I am wondering if I should make it longer. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from donaldww
Cool. I just learned that a polecat is a skunk!
That was a nasty note. I'm trying to get my head around what the author has against Paige. After all, Paige inherited the house she's in, so must have some good southern blood in her too. Nor has she gone against 'White Society', at least not as far as I understand.
This is a cool plot point that I find very interesting. I'm looking forward to the continuation.
Congratulations for your parents 60th anniversary!
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Cool. I just learned that a polecat is a skunk!
That was a nasty note. I'm trying to get my head around what the author has against Paige. After all, Paige inherited the house she's in, so must have some good southern blood in her too. Nor has she gone against 'White Society', at least not as far as I understand.
This is a cool plot point that I find very interesting. I'm looking forward to the continuation.
Congratulations for your parents 60th anniversary!
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Paige's aunt married at Southern boy. They had not children, he died and left the house to his wife and she left the house to her favorite niece, who was raised in Boston. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
typo - You two are just a like - alike
excellent dialogue, as usual
you work in back story well
interesting reason for her to refuse pain meds - it is definitely a reasonable concern based on her friend's experience
fascinating discussion of the history of the plantation
just read your author's notes - 60 years, now that is a love story :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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typo - You two are just a like - alike
excellent dialogue, as usual
you work in back story well
interesting reason for her to refuse pain meds - it is definitely a reasonable concern based on her friend's experience
fascinating discussion of the history of the plantation
just read your author's notes - 60 years, now that is a love story :-) Brooke
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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I fixed the typo. Thank you for the kind review. My parents are always together. You won't see one without the other and always have been. Mom didn't go to work until we were in HS. Mom and Dad worked at different places but they would drive to work together and home together.
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That is so sweet :-) I went to college with a girl whose parents were like that. When her dad came to visit for Father's Weekend our freshman year, it was the first time her parents had ever been apart over night. :-)
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a nice chapter, well written. It says a lot about the emotional state when one is physically down. It also talks about the love or connection that can exist between humans and other animals. Good suspense at the end. cheers
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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This is a nice chapter, well written. It says a lot about the emotional state when one is physically down. It also talks about the love or connection that can exist between humans and other animals. Good suspense at the end. cheers
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from unimatrix001
Excellent research on early American plantations. The accuracy of the details shows good work.
"I'l[l] call in the morning." - minor spelling error
I've only been here a week. - I haven't been keeping that close a track on time, but it seems like at least a month
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Excellent research on early American plantations. The accuracy of the details shows good work.
"I'l[l] call in the morning." - minor spelling error
I've only been here a week. - I haven't been keeping that close a track on time, but it seems like at least a month
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. Thank you for catching the missing l. It's one of the areas that I ended up changing. Yes, FS will keep one extremely busy.
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Thank you for the kind review. Thank you for catching the missing l. It's one of the areas that I ended up changing. Yes, FS will keep one extremely busy.
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I'm sorry my comment about time was in reference to your story. Paige says "I've only been here a week." but with all that she has done, it has to have been longer than a week of story time. I'm thinking the story has progressed for at least a month.
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Nope, it's only been a week. She showed up on a Monday and this is another another Monday. she's been a busy lady. sorry I misunderstood.
Comment from elgone
The story is progressing well as a conflict that involves feelings that didn't go away after the Civil War. I hope you have a good trip and vacation. I'll look forward to reading more of this when you get back.
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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The story is progressing well as a conflict that involves feelings that didn't go away after the Civil War. I hope you have a good trip and vacation. I'll look forward to reading more of this when you get back.
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Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and well wishes. I appreciate it.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this si very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where cash takes the puppy for a vet appointment, paige isn't sleeping well, they had a catfish dinner that made me hungry and paige got an unwelcome note left on her door. now did something happen to billy joe?
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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this si very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where cash takes the puppy for a vet appointment, paige isn't sleeping well, they had a catfish dinner that made me hungry and paige got an unwelcome note left on her door. now did something happen to billy joe?
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Barbara,
The story moves along, but the highlight is the note taped to Paige's door warning her to show loyalty to White Society or get the hell out. The suspense level just rose several notches. This brings a new dimension to the story. She is being confronted by some 'not so brave' southern bigots. It is a cowardly way to try to enforce their will.
It is an interesting read.
Curtis
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Barbara,
The story moves along, but the highlight is the note taped to Paige's door warning her to show loyalty to White Society or get the hell out. The suspense level just rose several notches. This brings a new dimension to the story. She is being confronted by some 'not so brave' southern bigots. It is a cowardly way to try to enforce their will.
It is an interesting read.
Curtis
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review
Comment from JennyB32
Yummy! Those hushpuppies in that picture are making my mouth water! This is a great write. I noticed that it might be some time until the next piece is added. Well, I am looking forward to reading it especially after that nice little teaser at the end about Billy Joe having not been there yet. The only little grammar issue I noticed is below:
-"I knew they grew the first ones, but why would the last two?" - Perhaps you could take "would" out or add "they have grown" after "would"
Thanks for sharing and great job!
Jenny :-]
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Yummy! Those hushpuppies in that picture are making my mouth water! This is a great write. I noticed that it might be some time until the next piece is added. Well, I am looking forward to reading it especially after that nice little teaser at the end about Billy Joe having not been there yet. The only little grammar issue I noticed is below:
-"I knew they grew the first ones, but why would the last two?" - Perhaps you could take "would" out or add "they have grown" after "would"
Thanks for sharing and great job!
Jenny :-]
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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I usually leave little words out, now I'm using extra words, Oh my!! Thank you for catching that. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from AprilShower
That picture made me hungry for a fish dinner. I enjoyed the story. That was a pretty mean note left at on her door. I hope there's not many people like this in the south. I noticed a few things below you might want to take a look at.
Will miss your chapter next weekend. Hope your parents have wonderful Anniversary.
"You said the vet said thinks he's a purebred Labrador."
Suggestion:
"You said the vet thinks he's a purebred Labrador."
"I knew they grew the first ones, but why would the last two?"
Suggestion:
"I knew they grew the first ones, but why the last two?"
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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That picture made me hungry for a fish dinner. I enjoyed the story. That was a pretty mean note left at on her door. I hope there's not many people like this in the south. I noticed a few things below you might want to take a look at.
Will miss your chapter next weekend. Hope your parents have wonderful Anniversary.
"You said the vet said thinks he's a purebred Labrador."
Suggestion:
"You said the vet thinks he's a purebred Labrador."
"I knew they grew the first ones, but why would the last two?"
Suggestion:
"I knew they grew the first ones, but why the last two?"
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for the eagle eye.
