Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "Chapter 8, part 5"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
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Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Missouri is not to far from where I live in Mountain Home, Ar. 60 yrs, wow that is an awesome accomplishment. The story is very good. I wish my eyes were good enough to be able to read all of the chapters. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Missouri is not to far from where I live in Mountain Home, Ar. 60 yrs, wow that is an awesome accomplishment. The story is very good. I wish my eyes were good enough to be able to read all of the chapters. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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AWE!! You made my day with this lovely review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
A great build up of mystery in this chapter,
which is intriguing -
I hope nothing's happened to Billy Joe and
he's not involved with threatening Paige.
Left me wondering and looking forward
to the next chapter.
someone -- 0ne word
Margaret
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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A great build up of mystery in this chapter,
which is intriguing -
I hope nothing's happened to Billy Joe and
he's not involved with threatening Paige.
Left me wondering and looking forward
to the next chapter.
someone -- 0ne word
Margaret
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I will check on someone. I was told it's two words.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
You're leaving us wondering what happened to Billy Joe? Cruel woman! You're doing a wonderful job with this, Barbara, showing the two different schools of thought in the modern south. :) nancy
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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You're leaving us wondering what happened to Billy Joe? Cruel woman! You're doing a wonderful job with this, Barbara, showing the two different schools of thought in the modern south. :) nancy
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Flamingbush
I like the part about the dog. It adds needed humor to the story. The dialogue flows well, and it's good to hear the history of the plantation. The word pictures are outstanding.
"We don't want Yankees contaminating Southern purebredds. Show loyalty to White Society..." A bit unexpected, but not that much. We know as we're reading we'll encounter something like that. That bit at the end about "What's taking Billy Joe so long?" is a good hook into the next chapter.
You definitely keep this moving, and at a good pace too. It's very well written, very well done.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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I like the part about the dog. It adds needed humor to the story. The dialogue flows well, and it's good to hear the history of the plantation. The word pictures are outstanding.
"We don't want Yankees contaminating Southern purebredds. Show loyalty to White Society..." A bit unexpected, but not that much. We know as we're reading we'll encounter something like that. That bit at the end about "What's taking Billy Joe so long?" is a good hook into the next chapter.
You definitely keep this moving, and at a good pace too. It's very well written, very well done.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Thank, you for the kind review.
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Your very welcome. Blessings.
Comment from Writingfundimension
A terrific building of suspense and mystery in this chapter, barbara. You are woman after my heart with your loving details of the delicious food! And ending with that note is a great idea.
Warmest regards, Bev
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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A terrific building of suspense and mystery in this chapter, barbara. You are woman after my heart with your loving details of the delicious food! And ending with that note is a great idea.
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. Yep, I like food and my big rear end is a testimony to it.
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You're welcome, barbara. I thought I recognized a fellow foodie. I do love to eat and there's not much I won't try especially if it contains any form of a carbohydrate.. LOL.
Comment from BethShelby
You're doing a great job of creating a romantic novel as well as an intriguing mystery. I was a little surprised that Paige said she'd only been there a week. It seems to me a lot has happened since this story started. I thought it had been several months. I am enjoying the story.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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You're doing a great job of creating a romantic novel as well as an intriguing mystery. I was a little surprised that Paige said she'd only been there a week. It seems to me a lot has happened since this story started. I thought it had been several months. I am enjoying the story.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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It has only been a week by the time line, but I think I am going to take that line out. It really makes no difference. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Norbanus
Morgan is such a delightful addition to the story. He brightens every scene. I didn't find a thing to nit-pick, but then I was so wrapped in the story that I might have missed something. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Morgan is such a delightful addition to the story. He brightens every scene. I didn't find a thing to nit-pick, but then I was so wrapped in the story that I might have missed something. Nicely done.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from CR Delport
Another chapter that is well written and very interesting. The editing is good and I could find no obvious errors. The story moves at a steady pace you and you are keeping it interesting.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Another chapter that is well written and very interesting. The editing is good and I could find no obvious errors. The story moves at a steady pace you and you are keeping it interesting.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cliff Ashpaugh
Hi Barbara. The scene began for me when Paige removed and read the note on her door. A scene involves conflict between a pro who wants A and an ant who wants B. I didn't feel any tension or conflict until the note. Made a few minor suggestions: The pup started squirming.--The pup squirmed..... Billy Joe's on--awkward--Billy Joe is on..... About an hour later, Cash returned carrying Morgan and smiled when he saw Nala.--An hour later, Cash returned with Morgan and smiled when he saw Nala..... Paige just went back to sleep.--omit just..... She only sleeps about twenty minutes at a time--omit about..... He tried, but Paige wouldn't let him.--omit He tried..... He set the canine beside Paige.-- He set the dog beside Paige..... She hugged the puppy as he licked her face and wagged his tail.--She hugged the puppy. He licked her face and wagged his tail..... he said with a chuckle--omit..... Cash brought a pillow from the living room, so Paige could keep her ankle elevated.--omit comma.....Be back in about an hour."--omit about..... Discussion around a dinner table is too safe. Makes the scene almost void of tension. Page finds the note and argues with Cash about it. Cash tells her she is on her own if that's the way she feels and stomps off. These are only suggestions. You like these characters. I like them too. But there must be some sort of tension and conflict between them. Keep 'em coming. Cliff
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Hi Barbara. The scene began for me when Paige removed and read the note on her door. A scene involves conflict between a pro who wants A and an ant who wants B. I didn't feel any tension or conflict until the note. Made a few minor suggestions: The pup started squirming.--The pup squirmed..... Billy Joe's on--awkward--Billy Joe is on..... About an hour later, Cash returned carrying Morgan and smiled when he saw Nala.--An hour later, Cash returned with Morgan and smiled when he saw Nala..... Paige just went back to sleep.--omit just..... She only sleeps about twenty minutes at a time--omit about..... He tried, but Paige wouldn't let him.--omit He tried..... He set the canine beside Paige.-- He set the dog beside Paige..... She hugged the puppy as he licked her face and wagged his tail.--She hugged the puppy. He licked her face and wagged his tail..... he said with a chuckle--omit..... Cash brought a pillow from the living room, so Paige could keep her ankle elevated.--omit comma.....Be back in about an hour."--omit about..... Discussion around a dinner table is too safe. Makes the scene almost void of tension. Page finds the note and argues with Cash about it. Cash tells her she is on her own if that's the way she feels and stomps off. These are only suggestions. You like these characters. I like them too. But there must be some sort of tension and conflict between them. Keep 'em coming. Cliff
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Thank you once again for taking time to give an honest review. I appreciate it. I have made many changes and will work on rewriting the note scene.
Comment from marijmd
An enjoyable read - I guess I wanted a little more after Paige made some statements -
Getting hooked on pain killers - why if a friend did would she think she would - it got dropped too fast for me
Then the I will get fat comment - no women likes it when she says that and a man does not reply that she is either beautiful or rolls his eyes as if she could ever be fat. There was just silence after she said it - as if everyone agreed.
just some thoughts!
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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An enjoyable read - I guess I wanted a little more after Paige made some statements -
Getting hooked on pain killers - why if a friend did would she think she would - it got dropped too fast for me
Then the I will get fat comment - no women likes it when she says that and a man does not reply that she is either beautiful or rolls his eyes as if she could ever be fat. There was just silence after she said it - as if everyone agreed.
just some thoughts!
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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I am spoon feeding my fans on what is going on with the painkillers. It's exactly the way I want it and for a good reason that will be revealed later. Paige knows she's hot and there's nothing wrong with her self-confidence, she's not afraid to flaunt it. Welcome to FS.
