Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "Chapter 8, part 5"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
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Comment from TonyD
Someone is seriously trying to intimidate Paige. It seems to me that the problem is deeper than having lunch with the maid. Then perhaps I don't really know southern ways.
Regards.
Tony
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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Someone is seriously trying to intimidate Paige. It seems to me that the problem is deeper than having lunch with the maid. Then perhaps I don't really know southern ways.
Regards.
Tony
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Teresa2013
This is a very good, well-written story. However, there is a lot of dialouge in it, compared to the amount of descriptions and other non-spoken sentences that make up a story. But, it doesn't change that fact that this story is very good.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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This is a very good, well-written story. However, there is a lot of dialouge in it, compared to the amount of descriptions and other non-spoken sentences that make up a story. But, it doesn't change that fact that this story is very good.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mishelly
I really liked this post. I felt the dialogue between Paige, Cash and Faye came across naturally. Although I did feel the conversation didn't need to be broken into two parts when they were discussing the Walkers. Maybe the conversation could have ended, and then the next paragraph Cash got up to clear the table, telling Paige to sit until he finished the dishes. Apart from that suggestion, I enjoyed this post thoroughly :-)
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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I really liked this post. I felt the dialogue between Paige, Cash and Faye came across naturally. Although I did feel the conversation didn't need to be broken into two parts when they were discussing the Walkers. Maybe the conversation could have ended, and then the next paragraph Cash got up to clear the table, telling Paige to sit until he finished the dishes. Apart from that suggestion, I enjoyed this post thoroughly :-)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
Though I am sure we (the readers) hope you enjoy your visit we must say you left us with a cliffhanger.
The following sentence from above
"There'll be here in a few minutes....
Should the first word be They'll ?
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Though I am sure we (the readers) hope you enjoy your visit we must say you left us with a cliffhanger.
The following sentence from above
"There'll be here in a few minutes....
Should the first word be They'll ?
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Thank you for catching that. I appreciate the help.
Comment from jjstar
Nice chapter, Barbara. I continue to enjoy the story, and now it looks like things are really heating up. I'm guessing that the person who is stalking her really wants her out of that house. Seems to be the only logical explanation. :)
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Nice chapter, Barbara. I continue to enjoy the story, and now it looks like things are really heating up. I'm guessing that the person who is stalking her really wants her out of that house. Seems to be the only logical explanation. :)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Karen Payton Holt
Great non verbal communication here, especially over dinner with Faye.
All becomes a bit clearer with Walker's background, and the time Billy Joe is taking is a nice cliff hanger moment.
Another smoothly written chapter.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Great non verbal communication here, especially over dinner with Faye.
All becomes a bit clearer with Walker's background, and the time Billy Joe is taking is a nice cliff hanger moment.
Another smoothly written chapter.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Bobby Jo
You have me wanting to know more. You did a great job at description, I could visualize this well. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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You have me wanting to know more. You did a great job at description, I could visualize this well. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Well scripted and it flows well because the characters have some interaction thus fleshing them out. The setting though minimal carries the plot along. Good and timely use of dialogue. The mention of slaves could have been expanded especially if one of the characters was black thus creating tension. What time period is the story? Strange that you mentioned Boston. 'The Cauldron' book one of 4 starts in Boston before the Civil War and deals with racism. Excerpts are coming out now from me.
Regards:
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Well scripted and it flows well because the characters have some interaction thus fleshing them out. The setting though minimal carries the plot along. Good and timely use of dialogue. The mention of slaves could have been expanded especially if one of the characters was black thus creating tension. What time period is the story? Strange that you mentioned Boston. 'The Cauldron' book one of 4 starts in Boston before the Civil War and deals with racism. Excerpts are coming out now from me.
Regards:
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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This is set in today's world, but....things are still happening. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara Wilkey ....
I enjoyed reading this latest chapter in your book and there are just a few changes recommended ....
* You have - lost most their money ... I suggest -
lost most of their money ...
* You have - why would some one do this? which should be -why would someone do this?
* You have - I better look around. I suggest - I had better look around OR I'd better look around ...
* You have - There'll be here in a few minutes .... which should be - They'll be here .....
Now, I look forward to the next chapter.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Hullo Barbara Wilkey ....
I enjoyed reading this latest chapter in your book and there are just a few changes recommended ....
* You have - lost most their money ... I suggest -
lost most of their money ...
* You have - why would some one do this? which should be -why would someone do this?
* You have - I better look around. I suggest - I had better look around OR I'd better look around ...
* You have - There'll be here in a few minutes .... which should be - They'll be here .....
Now, I look forward to the next chapter.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mshugh
Perfecto - no SPAGs that I could see- and you paced this very well. excellent dialogue and good story line. - And I liked the pup - I am now thr proud dad of a new Golden - who thinks he is my child LOL
Well done
Michael
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Perfecto - no SPAGs that I could see- and you paced this very well. excellent dialogue and good story line. - And I liked the pup - I am now thr proud dad of a new Golden - who thinks he is my child LOL
Well done
Michael
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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I am sure he is your child. I had to put my black lab down this Aug. I still have my great pyrenees. He thinks he's a lap dog. I'm pretty sure he weighs more than I do. Thank you for the kind review.
