Savannah Love
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Comment from rheabug
Very nice chapter to your book. I enjoyed it mostly because the sweet little dog character. I love animals and their constant love. Have a great day, Linda
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Very nice chapter to your book. I enjoyed it mostly because the sweet little dog character. I love animals and their constant love. Have a great day, Linda
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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I love animals too. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara Wilkey ...
Again, I have enjoyed reading more of your book and in this chapter, there are just a few changes to suggest ...
* You have - What we going to do about Walker? This should be - What are we going to do ...
* You hae - we need to wait-see what happens. This should be - we need to wait and see what happens ...
* You have - We'd better take a look-see ... again, this should be - take a look and see ....
I look forward to your next chapter.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Hullo Barbara Wilkey ...
Again, I have enjoyed reading more of your book and in this chapter, there are just a few changes to suggest ...
* You have - What we going to do about Walker? This should be - What are we going to do ...
* You hae - we need to wait-see what happens. This should be - we need to wait and see what happens ...
* You have - We'd better take a look-see ... again, this should be - take a look and see ....
I look forward to your next chapter.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. Those errors in dialogue are intentional.
Comment from mumsyone
Hi Barbara,
Only one question. Cash has just left the room and, as is, it sounds like they're talking about him rather than the doctor:
"Everything's in place." She patted Paige's arm. "Do you really need to work with this man?"
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Hi Barbara,
Only one question. Cash has just left the room and, as is, it sounds like they're talking about him rather than the doctor:
"Everything's in place." She patted Paige's arm. "Do you really need to work with this man?"
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I will take a look at that area. Another reviewer commented on the same thing.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ha! Air conditioner my Aunt Fanny! Paige's ghost is determined to look after her, it seems though, so it's not terribly frightening yet.
What a great chapter, so full of plot action (and I'm thinking of the preceding parts too).
The thing about this book is the natural, very authentic pace and occurrences. I feel like I'm right there in the room with them. Nicely done, Barbara, in my opinion.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Ha! Air conditioner my Aunt Fanny! Paige's ghost is determined to look after her, it seems though, so it's not terribly frightening yet.
What a great chapter, so full of plot action (and I'm thinking of the preceding parts too).
The thing about this book is the natural, very authentic pace and occurrences. I feel like I'm right there in the room with them. Nicely done, Barbara, in my opinion.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your insight.
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Yes, well it was another six, but the system won't let me!
Comment from unimatrix001
Paiges work should have an HR department to help her deal with Walker if needed.
Why would Dr. Walker's stalk me? - remove the 's though the idea od "possessive stalking" is amusing.. lol
I'll help, little guy - remove comma
"While you're researching family history, I'll take care of the dishes.["] - missed end quotes
Civil War [soldiers]. - misspelling in notes
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Paiges work should have an HR department to help her deal with Walker if needed.
Why would Dr. Walker's stalk me? - remove the 's though the idea od "possessive stalking" is amusing.. lol
I'll help, little guy - remove comma
"While you're researching family history, I'll take care of the dishes.["] - missed end quotes
Civil War [soldiers]. - misspelling in notes
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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I have a question about the comma after help, since he's talking to the dog, little guy, shouldn't there be a comma? Thank you for the eagle eye.
Comment from AprilShower
(The part below is not clear. What man is she talking about? Who is Nala talking about below? It is not clear. It seemed like she was talking about Cash. She is talking about Walker, right? This really needs to be made clearer.)
She patted Paige's arm. "Do you really need to work with this man?"
"I signed a contract. I'll see if I can get out of it. When I was hired, I hadn't met him."
Also, we need a reminder on the blue binder, not everyone is going to remember what it contains.
April
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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(The part below is not clear. What man is she talking about? Who is Nala talking about below? It is not clear. It seemed like she was talking about Cash. She is talking about Walker, right? This really needs to be made clearer.)
She patted Paige's arm. "Do you really need to work with this man?"
"I signed a contract. I'll see if I can get out of it. When I was hired, I hadn't met him."
Also, we need a reminder on the blue binder, not everyone is going to remember what it contains.
April
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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The man Nala and Paige are talking about is Walker. I think if I had posted the entire chapter as one, they would remember the blue binder, but I will recheck those areas. Thank you.
Comment from elgone
The story continues to be interesting, and the ghost element is building. Was it Walker or the ghost who brought Paige in the house after she hurt her ankle? Obviously, the ghost has been active in the house since his son was born.
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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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The story continues to be interesting, and the ghost element is building. Was it Walker or the ghost who brought Paige in the house after she hurt her ankle? Obviously, the ghost has been active in the house since his son was born.
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Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and kinds words.
Comment from NaughtieScribe
I hope Walker doesn't get so stupid that the police or Cash need to intervene. But I really get a bad feeling about him. I also hope he doesn't cause Nala any problems either.
Of course I found nothing to edit or tweak. Again another great chapter, leaving me anxious for the next.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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I hope Walker doesn't get so stupid that the police or Cash need to intervene. But I really get a bad feeling about him. I also hope he doesn't cause Nala any problems either.
Of course I found nothing to edit or tweak. Again another great chapter, leaving me anxious for the next.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mshugh
You've m,oved the story on well, but I was loooking for a more powerful ending hook.
May I ask a question - when you say Chapter X part 3 or 4 - does that mean you are breaking up the chapters into three or four pieces? Is that why the ending chapter hook is missing?
Michael
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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You've m,oved the story on well, but I was loooking for a more powerful ending hook.
May I ask a question - when you say Chapter X part 3 or 4 - does that mean you are breaking up the chapters into three or four pieces? Is that why the ending chapter hook is missing?
Michael
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Yes, I am. Unfortunately I am writing this novel as I post, and working full time I don't have time to write and edit, so I post short. My next post will me around 1200 words. It's a longer one. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Barb again a virtual excaptional rating for you.
busy chapter with so much going on
I got the chills when I read this part--
A sudden chill entered the room.
Billy Joe rubbed the back of his neck
The Mysterious Ghost?
Gert
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Barb again a virtual excaptional rating for you.
busy chapter with so much going on
I got the chills when I read this part--
A sudden chill entered the room.
Billy Joe rubbed the back of his neck
The Mysterious Ghost?
Gert
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and the insight.
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Smiles Barb
Gert
