Savannah Love
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Comment from jjstar
I'm sorry I missed a chapter I think. It was easy to pick it up here though.
I love that you've brought this issue (racism) or theme out in this chapter. I hope that it's continued because I know that these hateful attitudes still exist. It's hard to believe some still think like this.
Great chapter, Barb.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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I'm sorry I missed a chapter I think. It was easy to pick it up here though.
I love that you've brought this issue (racism) or theme out in this chapter. I hope that it's continued because I know that these hateful attitudes still exist. It's hard to believe some still think like this.
Great chapter, Barb.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I am afraid I may take some heat for it.
Comment from Karen Payton Holt
So, Walker's nasty side has been revealed.
It is always difficult when the victim is put at more risk if they take a stand...
It will be interesting to see how this pans out.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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So, Walker's nasty side has been revealed.
It is always difficult when the victim is put at more risk if they take a stand...
It will be interesting to see how this pans out.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Taffspride
There is more going on than meets the eye here Barbara. I really like the way you hint at things, but don't give too much away at once. You keep the story moving at a good pace, while still cloaking it in mystery. Well done.
It is not only in the south is there racial prejudice, the only difference I can see is that it is still more open than in the more Northern States. Unfortunately I have witnessed it.
Just noticed one little typo
With an bandana I think you meant a bandana.
Once again you have me waiting for more.
Thank you for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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There is more going on than meets the eye here Barbara. I really like the way you hint at things, but don't give too much away at once. You keep the story moving at a good pace, while still cloaking it in mystery. Well done.
It is not only in the south is there racial prejudice, the only difference I can see is that it is still more open than in the more Northern States. Unfortunately I have witnessed it.
Just noticed one little typo
With an bandana I think you meant a bandana.
Once again you have me waiting for more.
Thank you for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you for catching that. I have made the correction. Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome. :)
Ann
Comment from Linda Lee
This is a nice and simplistic chapter, however I gave it a 4 star rating because I felt the busy tags took away from the spoken word.
You have a LOT of staring, glancing, looking, stepping, turning etc. going on around your dialogue. This is perfectly fine in moderation, but overuse, such as this chapter (there isn't any dialogue without it), can really tank your pacing.
I hope this helps!
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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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This is a nice and simplistic chapter, however I gave it a 4 star rating because I felt the busy tags took away from the spoken word.
You have a LOT of staring, glancing, looking, stepping, turning etc. going on around your dialogue. This is perfectly fine in moderation, but overuse, such as this chapter (there isn't any dialogue without it), can really tank your pacing.
I hope this helps!
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Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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I respectfully disagree with you. My praise my dialogue and many of them want to copy it. Thank you for the review.
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That's the beauty of a workshop type of environment--disagreeing is good!
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That is true. I think it's a matter of style preference. I don't like to read a lot of extra words, so I don't use them.
Comment from c_lucas
Some men are legends in their own minds. Racial issues are world wide as you pointed out with your image. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Some men are legends in their own minds. Racial issues are world wide as you pointed out with your image. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Oh, that ends kind of creepy!!! Discrimination I am sure is still rampant in the south. I live about 10 miles from the state university and due to the high number of foreign students, are pretty tolerant here. Great chapter~ Debbie
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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Oh, that ends kind of creepy!!! Discrimination I am sure is still rampant in the south. I live about 10 miles from the state university and due to the high number of foreign students, are pretty tolerant here. Great chapter~ Debbie
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Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the review.
