Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Chapter 7, Part 6"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
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Comment from Gert sherwood
Great chapter,
Barb now it looks Pagie and Cash have finally found some good clues.
One thing can you help refresh my mind who was
Bradley Bookman?
Gert
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Great chapter,
Barb now it looks Pagie and Cash have finally found some good clues.
One thing can you help refresh my mind who was
Bradley Bookman?
Gert
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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At the beginning Bradley Bookman was the Confederate soldier I was writing about. Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you Barb
Now I recall.
Gert
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
Good read, Barb. Glad Paige's ghost is a southern gentleman. I really am enjoying this book and hope you'll think about publishing some of what you write. I for one would buy. C
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Good read, Barb. Glad Paige's ghost is a southern gentleman. I really am enjoying this book and hope you'll think about publishing some of what you write. I for one would buy. C
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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I think about publishing all the time. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Barbara now this is getting really interesting with the ghost and how she got back into the house after her injury.
Mysterious and yet oddly calming as well. At least that is how I feel reading it. Loved the characters relationship growing and blooming with all the little squabbles and such it just makes the whole work so very real. I enjoyed reading this post and love your story line. Keeps me wanting to read more and more.
Thanks for sharing exceptional post for your story.
Maureen
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Hi Barbara now this is getting really interesting with the ghost and how she got back into the house after her injury.
Mysterious and yet oddly calming as well. At least that is how I feel reading it. Loved the characters relationship growing and blooming with all the little squabbles and such it just makes the whole work so very real. I enjoyed reading this post and love your story line. Keeps me wanting to read more and more.
Thanks for sharing exceptional post for your story.
Maureen
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouraging words.
Comment from jjstar
This was a wonderful chapter. I loved the detail of the heart carved into the tree. I felt like I almost expected it to there. The characters were truly in character, but I thought the references to Yankees was a bit of overkill. The other thing that stood out was the bill lying there. It seemed a little odd that it would just be lying there out in the open, but I guess I'll just have to wait to see what happens. I was thinking that maybe the ghost placed it there as some type of a clue? Anyway, nice chapter.:)
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Fingering a heart carved in the tree, Cash read the names, "Bradley and Alice. Who are they? Think they ever lived in the house?" ===aww...so romantic and such a perfect addition to add to the southern charm.:)
Where's the biscuits and white gravy and the grits?==mmmm..my favorite..
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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This was a wonderful chapter. I loved the detail of the heart carved into the tree. I felt like I almost expected it to there. The characters were truly in character, but I thought the references to Yankees was a bit of overkill. The other thing that stood out was the bill lying there. It seemed a little odd that it would just be lying there out in the open, but I guess I'll just have to wait to see what happens. I was thinking that maybe the ghost placed it there as some type of a clue? Anyway, nice chapter.:)
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Fingering a heart carved in the tree, Cash read the names, "Bradley and Alice. Who are they? Think they ever lived in the house?" ===aww...so romantic and such a perfect addition to add to the southern charm.:)
Where's the biscuits and white gravy and the grits?==mmmm..my favorite..
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. When I first started on FS, I was actually chastised by some because I wasn't a Southerner. The division is still alive and well in some places.
Comment from Gungalo
Oh boy, now it is beginning to get real interesting. Bradley is her ghost and he as returned to help her with something. I wonder what exactly it could be?
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Oh boy, now it is beginning to get real interesting. Bradley is her ghost and he as returned to help her with something. I wonder what exactly it could be?
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Smiling at you.
Comment from Rondeno
You sent me scurrying to Wikipedia, to find out if the Confederate States Government was issuing its own currency as early as September 1861 - and you're right!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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You sent me scurrying to Wikipedia, to find out if the Confederate States Government was issuing its own currency as early as September 1861 - and you're right!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Yes, I did. I research everything. I am afraid of giving wrong facts. I have read some posts that I know are incorrect. Anyway, thank you for the kind review.
Comment from TheWriteTeach
This piece is very well done. As with previous chapters, you pulled me in immediately and held my attention to the very last word. It ended all too soon, I wanted more. I'm afraid if I had the completed book in front of me, I'd read it all in one sitting. I am a sucker for dogs and truly love Morgan in here doing cute puppy things. I could easily see 'a very unhappy puppy' at the top of the stairs trying to negotiate going down steps for the first time. You revealed a warm fuzzy side of Billy Joe with his efforts to teach/help Morgan down the steps. Awesome.
You have a stray ending quotation mark in the sentence where Billy Joe is scolding Paige for not eating a decent breakfast. You have, Billy Joe just shook his head." I think we all get on auto mode when writing dialogue and immediately hit the quotation key after the ending punctuation.
Two more things, but only as thoughts to make a couple sentences read smoother. You wrote - Soon Cash and Billy Joe found where Paige fell and rolled into the tree. Everyone has their own writing style and perhaps I'm throwing mine in here so take this with a large grain of salt - what if you just moved the word 'soon' to a different position? Place it between the words Billy Joe and found to read, Cash and Billy Joe soon found where Paige fell and rolled into the tree. Next, you wrote - Cash spotted an object in the mud and bend (bent) to pick it up. I think the sentence would flow smoother if the words 'an object' were replaced with the word 'something.' Both suggestions are insignificant items and as I said, it could easily be that I'm injecting my own style.
Excellent work. I am looking forward to the next part.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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This piece is very well done. As with previous chapters, you pulled me in immediately and held my attention to the very last word. It ended all too soon, I wanted more. I'm afraid if I had the completed book in front of me, I'd read it all in one sitting. I am a sucker for dogs and truly love Morgan in here doing cute puppy things. I could easily see 'a very unhappy puppy' at the top of the stairs trying to negotiate going down steps for the first time. You revealed a warm fuzzy side of Billy Joe with his efforts to teach/help Morgan down the steps. Awesome.
You have a stray ending quotation mark in the sentence where Billy Joe is scolding Paige for not eating a decent breakfast. You have, Billy Joe just shook his head." I think we all get on auto mode when writing dialogue and immediately hit the quotation key after the ending punctuation.
Two more things, but only as thoughts to make a couple sentences read smoother. You wrote - Soon Cash and Billy Joe found where Paige fell and rolled into the tree. Everyone has their own writing style and perhaps I'm throwing mine in here so take this with a large grain of salt - what if you just moved the word 'soon' to a different position? Place it between the words Billy Joe and found to read, Cash and Billy Joe soon found where Paige fell and rolled into the tree. Next, you wrote - Cash spotted an object in the mud and bend (bent) to pick it up. I think the sentence would flow smoother if the words 'an object' were replaced with the word 'something.' Both suggestions are insignificant items and as I said, it could easily be that I'm injecting my own style.
Excellent work. I am looking forward to the next part.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Thank you for the ideas, I like them both. The typing errors I must have been correcting as you were reading.
Comment from adewpearl
I love the suspense about the identity of who saved her and about the ghost and how her investigation leads to the guy's identity
I also love their sparring, which they do a lot of, this time about breakfast food :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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I love the suspense about the identity of who saved her and about the ghost and how her investigation leads to the guy's identity
I also love their sparring, which they do a lot of, this time about breakfast food :-) Brooke
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. For some reason I see these people bantering often.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job wriitng this chapter where cash and billy joe can't find footprints, but they did find a 5.00 confederate bill, then cash takes paige into the library and she discovered the information about Bradley
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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this is very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job wriitng this chapter where cash and billy joe can't find footprints, but they did find a 5.00 confederate bill, then cash takes paige into the library and she discovered the information about Bradley
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from elgone
And of course that was after Bradley was killed in battle, which Alice didn't know at the time. I sort of remember that from the beginning of the story. The confederate money is more interesting that the characters make it out to be, I think. It's sort of a peculiar thing to find out in open, after a hundred and sixty years. And it relates to the one found on Paige's bed.
in the mud and bend to pick it up - bent
Billy Joe shook his head."
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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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And of course that was after Bradley was killed in battle, which Alice didn't know at the time. I sort of remember that from the beginning of the story. The confederate money is more interesting that the characters make it out to be, I think. It's sort of a peculiar thing to find out in open, after a hundred and sixty years. And it relates to the one found on Paige's bed.
in the mud and bend to pick it up - bent
Billy Joe shook his head."
E
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Thank you for the catches, I appreciate the help.
