Savannah Love
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Comment from NaughtieScribe
I swear each new chapter gets even more charming than the last. I don't see Paige as stupid, just culturally deficient. lol I wonder how well Cash would do up north.
And leave it to Paige to name the dog Morgan. It's just too perfect for her character.
I saw nothing to tweak or adjust. Well done, and Happy Holidays.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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I swear each new chapter gets even more charming than the last. I don't see Paige as stupid, just culturally deficient. lol I wonder how well Cash would do up north.
And leave it to Paige to name the dog Morgan. It's just too perfect for her character.
I saw nothing to tweak or adjust. Well done, and Happy Holidays.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review
Comment from Shirley McLain
It was a nice touch about the puppy. It showed a lot of emotion with Paige. Everyone has a soft spot for a puppy. Great job as always.
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It was a nice touch about the puppy. It showed a lot of emotion with Paige. Everyone has a soft spot for a puppy. Great job as always.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
Nice chapter to post just before Christmas. I rather think the pup will end up saving Paige from something somewhere down the line of this story ...
As usual nicely written, interesting confrontation with the "revenoo ..." there.
Patrick
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Hi Barbara,
Nice chapter to post just before Christmas. I rather think the pup will end up saving Paige from something somewhere down the line of this story ...
As usual nicely written, interesting confrontation with the "revenoo ..." there.
Patrick
Comment Written 24-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review
Comment from Norbanus
Thank you Barbara for sharing the cute little puppy and the cute little revenuers. Paige and Cash could have lot of interaction with Morgan. Excellent use of action tags instead of speech tags in the superb dialogue.
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Thank you Barbara for sharing the cute little puppy and the cute little revenuers. Paige and Cash could have lot of interaction with Morgan. Excellent use of action tags instead of speech tags in the superb dialogue.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and Happy Holidays.
Comment from w0manp0et
Hi Barbara,
This is lovely writing. The action's clear, dialogue witty and amusing, and description is good.
Paige headed ((in?)) the direction Cash had indicated. "I'm fine."
In the next sentence, 'pick-up' should be pickup.
With these exceptions, this chapter is perfect. I'm enjoying this story!
Write on,
WP
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Hi Barbara,
This is lovely writing. The action's clear, dialogue witty and amusing, and description is good.
Paige headed ((in?)) the direction Cash had indicated. "I'm fine."
In the next sentence, 'pick-up' should be pickup.
With these exceptions, this chapter is perfect. I'm enjoying this story!
Write on,
WP
Comment Written 24-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and Happy Holidays.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
Thank you for not naming the puppy "Moonshine" - I just
saw it coming and was already groaning. My dad got caught
by a still when I was a kid. He was able to convince the
revenuers he had been chasing hogs through the woods but
he admitted to us much later in life that it really was
his.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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barbara:
Thank you for not naming the puppy "Moonshine" - I just
saw it coming and was already groaning. My dad got caught
by a still when I was a kid. He was able to convince the
revenuers he had been chasing hogs through the woods but
he admitted to us much later in life that it really was
his.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 23-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and Happy Holidays.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where paige and cash find a puppy and he has a new home with paige. i enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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this is very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where paige and cash find a puppy and he has a new home with paige. i enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and Happy Holidays.
Comment from mtnspirit
Hi barbara,
I'll bet Paige was surprised when the revenuer's approached her. Cash may have some competition since Paige has a new puppy.
I enjoyed the read very much. It is interesting with good dialogue and a smooth flow. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Hi barbara,
I'll bet Paige was surprised when the revenuer's approached her. Cash may have some competition since Paige has a new puppy.
I enjoyed the read very much. It is interesting with good dialogue and a smooth flow. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and Happy Holidays.
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Your welcome and happy holidays to you too!
Comment from Stalking Wolf
Ain't nothing closer to a country boy's heart than a mangy mutt. Liked the revenuers thinking it was funny. Atta boy, Cash, the fish might still be biting. Cool.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Ain't nothing closer to a country boy's heart than a mangy mutt. Liked the revenuers thinking it was funny. Atta boy, Cash, the fish might still be biting. Cool.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and Happy Holidays.
Comment from Ted T
Hi Barbara :)
You're moving along nicely and most dialogue exchanges are okay, but a bit stiff.
More showing and less telling would spark things up a bit.
You seem to be getting back to pet devices like: turned toward, moved toward, glanced toward, etc.
Here's a small nit:
Paige headed [in] the direction Cash had indicated. Missing word.
Take care.
Ted
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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Hi Barbara :)
You're moving along nicely and most dialogue exchanges are okay, but a bit stiff.
More showing and less telling would spark things up a bit.
You seem to be getting back to pet devices like: turned toward, moved toward, glanced toward, etc.
Here's a small nit:
Paige headed [in] the direction Cash had indicated. Missing word.
Take care.
Ted
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and Happy Holidays.
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You're welcome, enjoy the holidays :)
