Savannah Love
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Comment from fictionwriter
Really? They think Paige is a moonshiner? I'd think her appearance would totally deny that. Funny turn of event on this little fishing trip. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Really? They think Paige is a moonshiner? I'd think her appearance would totally deny that. Funny turn of event on this little fishing trip. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
Here's some entertainment Cash never intended. I sorta get the impression that Paige is pissed.
I thoroughly enjoyed this read and have two suggestions:
"After another fifty feet and {finding} no evidence of Paige, he called,..." No nits, but I'd take the word "finding" out.
"...Cash saw two men wearing navy blue windbreaker [windbreakers] with yellow letters on the back..."
Dave
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Barbara,
Here's some entertainment Cash never intended. I sorta get the impression that Paige is pissed.
I thoroughly enjoyed this read and have two suggestions:
"After another fifty feet and {finding} no evidence of Paige, he called,..." No nits, but I'd take the word "finding" out.
"...Cash saw two men wearing navy blue windbreaker [windbreakers] with yellow letters on the back..."
Dave
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the catches and I made the corrections. I always appreciate reading your reviews.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
Talk about comedy mixed with suspense and drama
Looks like you have them all packed into this active and intersting chapter.
Reaaly good.
Gert
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Hello Barb
Talk about comedy mixed with suspense and drama
Looks like you have them all packed into this active and intersting chapter.
Reaaly good.
Gert
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I want this novel to have a little humor in it.
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You are welcome
Well this chpter had humor
Gert
Comment from Gungalo
LOL only Paige can possibly get into trouble in the middle of nowhere. She is too much fun for real. Off to go to the bathroom and she ends up under the gun. Heeeheh.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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LOL only Paige can possibly get into trouble in the middle of nowhere. She is too much fun for real. Off to go to the bathroom and she ends up under the gun. Heeeheh.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Sigh thanks you!!!
Comment from Norbanus
Moonshiners still operating in that part of the country, eh I thought that was a business of the past when ten dollars a gallon was a lot of money.
Heck of a god segment, barbarba.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Moonshiners still operating in that part of the country, eh I thought that was a business of the past when ten dollars a gallon was a lot of money.
Heck of a god segment, barbarba.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. Actually there are still moonshiners out there.
Comment from mtnspirit
Hi barbara,
This chapter is a bit of a surprise. When Paige didn't answer Cash the first thing I thought was that maybe she was chasing ghost or perhaps been caught in a hunting trap, but never revenuer's. I believe their starting to have their first fight.
Good chapter barbara. It is well written and has a smooth flow. Dialogue is great and the characters believable. Thank you for sharing. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Hi barbara,
This chapter is a bit of a surprise. When Paige didn't answer Cash the first thing I thought was that maybe she was chasing ghost or perhaps been caught in a hunting trap, but never revenuer's. I believe their starting to have their first fight.
Good chapter barbara. It is well written and has a smooth flow. Dialogue is great and the characters believable. Thank you for sharing. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rondeno
A very routine day turns into something rather dramatic. You have a great ability with narrative, and your dialogue is always on the money!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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A very routine day turns into something rather dramatic. You have a great ability with narrative, and your dialogue is always on the money!
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Sasha
How funny. Only Paige could go to the bathroom and find ATF agents waiting for her. I got a real kick out of this one. I wonder what Paige will have to say if she is able to get the ATF to believe she has no knowledge of any still. Great job with this. I didn't see any errors. I look forward to reading the next post.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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How funny. Only Paige could go to the bathroom and find ATF agents waiting for her. I got a real kick out of this one. I wonder what Paige will have to say if she is able to get the ATF to believe she has no knowledge of any still. Great job with this. I didn't see any errors. I look forward to reading the next post.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Amandastory
I enjoyed reading this chapter. You can feel Cash's frustration with Paige, "pain in the butt, crazy Yankee", as they have had very different upbringings. I thought Paige might trip and fall, but your story had an unexpected twist. Look forward to finding out what happens to them.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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I enjoyed reading this chapter. You can feel Cash's frustration with Paige, "pain in the butt, crazy Yankee", as they have had very different upbringings. I thought Paige might trip and fall, but your story had an unexpected twist. Look forward to finding out what happens to them.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from October21
Hiya there! I thought that it was a clever and excellent idea to use the italics for thought. Great use of body language to make it easy to visualise the scene:)
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Hiya there! I thought that it was a clever and excellent idea to use the italics for thought. Great use of body language to make it easy to visualise the scene:)
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind reveiw.
