Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Chapter 6, part 4"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
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Comment from nora arjuna
Hi bab. Read this while on the train. Saw a missing close quote in somewhere near the beginning but cant point it out now using phone. Otherwise all is fine n enjoyable.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Hi bab. Read this while on the train. Saw a missing close quote in somewhere near the beginning but cant point it out now using phone. Otherwise all is fine n enjoyable.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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I have fixed the missing quotation mark I am glad you enjoyed.
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I have fixed the missing quotation mark I am glad you enjoyed.
Comment from w0manp0et
Hi Barbara,
This is written well with only minor edits needed.
Cash ran his fingers threw his short hair. ((through))
I like the easy banter between your characters. Description is good, pace appropriate, and dialogue in-character.
The revenuers glanced at each other. "Do you have proof?" the shorter one asked. ((This is a bit confusing. I.D. wouldn't necessarily be proof that Cash isn't a moonshiner, would it? At this juncture I would expect the ATF agent to ask, "Do you have I.D.?"))
Overall, this is professional writing. The chapter held my attention throughout. I look forward to reading more of your writing.
This is one opinion: Take or shake!
Best wishes,
WP
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
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Hi Barbara,
This is written well with only minor edits needed.
Cash ran his fingers threw his short hair. ((through))
I like the easy banter between your characters. Description is good, pace appropriate, and dialogue in-character.
The revenuers glanced at each other. "Do you have proof?" the shorter one asked. ((This is a bit confusing. I.D. wouldn't necessarily be proof that Cash isn't a moonshiner, would it? At this juncture I would expect the ATF agent to ask, "Do you have I.D.?"))
Overall, this is professional writing. The chapter held my attention throughout. I look forward to reading more of your writing.
This is one opinion: Take or shake!
Best wishes,
WP
Comment Written 17-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. Sorry it took so long to answer. I waited until I had time to make the suggested corrections.
Comment from jjstar
Oh, dang it. This was a sixer for sure, but apparently I can't give you one..this was excellent! Enjoyed the drama top to bottom. The men's attitudes vs. a woman's need...been there, done that. Awesome!
Oh, never mind, you're a guy. You won't understand===yep, she's right...hehe
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Oh, dang it. This was a sixer for sure, but apparently I can't give you one..this was excellent! Enjoyed the drama top to bottom. The men's attitudes vs. a woman's need...been there, done that. Awesome!
Oh, never mind, you're a guy. You won't understand===yep, she's right...hehe
Comment Written 17-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from artemis53
Well done, Barbara. I most certainly see that she is not a country girl. This all seems very interesting to me and I look forward to your next piece.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Well done, Barbara. I most certainly see that she is not a country girl. This all seems very interesting to me and I look forward to your next piece.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from NaughtieScribe
Oh mercy help me! This chapter is priceless. Only Paige would go to the woods to wee and get detained as a moonshiner. Just priceless. I'm beginning to feel sorry for Cash. He's gonna live a long life of I Love Lucy incidents. lol. Nothing to adjust or tweak. Well done as expected.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Oh mercy help me! This chapter is priceless. Only Paige would go to the woods to wee and get detained as a moonshiner. Just priceless. I'm beginning to feel sorry for Cash. He's gonna live a long life of I Love Lucy incidents. lol. Nothing to adjust or tweak. Well done as expected.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Stalking Wolf
Only a Yank could be lucky enough to get harassed by revenoors her first time in the woods, I feel so sorry for that good ol' Southern boy, should feed her to the fish, LOL. Enjoyed.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Only a Yank could be lucky enough to get harassed by revenoors her first time in the woods, I feel so sorry for that good ol' Southern boy, should feed her to the fish, LOL. Enjoyed.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. Even Southern boys are suckers for a pretty face.
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is an excellent chapter again, Barbara. It had me on edge wondering what could have happened to Paige, and the answer is another very clever conflict.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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This is an excellent chapter again, Barbara. It had me on edge wondering what could have happened to Paige, and the answer is another very clever conflict.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
This is too funny -- on both of them! Paige will probably
tell Cash he took his sweet time looking for her; he will
remind her he promised not to move. One must be careful
what one asks for, eh?
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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barbara:
This is too funny -- on both of them! Paige will probably
tell Cash he took his sweet time looking for her; he will
remind her he promised not to move. One must be careful
what one asks for, eh?
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Eric Corsten
I'm getting a good feel for the charterers Cash and Paige..Thanks to tour realistic dialog and great detail..
Eric da Gooose
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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I'm getting a good feel for the charterers Cash and Paige..Thanks to tour realistic dialog and great detail..
Eric da Gooose
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mishelly
I really like Cash's masculinity next to Paige's lady-like manner. She gets under his skin, but its obvious he finds her endearing. I found this post quite funny - him not being able to take her anywhere without finding trouble. This was another enjoyable post :-)
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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I really like Cash's masculinity next to Paige's lady-like manner. She gets under his skin, but its obvious he finds her endearing. I found this post quite funny - him not being able to take her anywhere without finding trouble. This was another enjoyable post :-)
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
