Savannah Love
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Comment from Cumbrianlass
Nice, easy going post, Barbara. You set the scene well. Great dialogue especially. I like Cash's mom. She's lovely.
I do enjoy the whole 'southern' flavour of this story. We spend quite a lot of time in the Carolina's, so I can relate to much of what you say.
Just a couple of nits:
There's some in the congregation that don't take to(o) kindly to() his former profession."
"They need to lighten up. What could be more Christian than a reformed alcoholic boxer?" - Love it!
Bravo.
Av
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Nice, easy going post, Barbara. You set the scene well. Great dialogue especially. I like Cash's mom. She's lovely.
I do enjoy the whole 'southern' flavour of this story. We spend quite a lot of time in the Carolina's, so I can relate to much of what you say.
Just a couple of nits:
There's some in the congregation that don't take to(o) kindly to() his former profession."
"They need to lighten up. What could be more Christian than a reformed alcoholic boxer?" - Love it!
Bravo.
Av
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh Barbara - I love the introduction of this new character - this is another very wonderful chapter. One quick edit - you mixed up the two "to's" in this sentence - "There's some in the congregation that don't take to(o) kindly to..." And now that we have that out of the way, one more comment - I think that picture of fried chicken with that fluffy-looking biscuit, creamy mashed 'taters' with gravy and delicious green beans was very mean of you on this Sunday when I didn't bother to cook. (LOL) Great, heartwarming read, my friend!
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Oh Barbara - I love the introduction of this new character - this is another very wonderful chapter. One quick edit - you mixed up the two "to's" in this sentence - "There's some in the congregation that don't take to(o) kindly to..." And now that we have that out of the way, one more comment - I think that picture of fried chicken with that fluffy-looking biscuit, creamy mashed 'taters' with gravy and delicious green beans was very mean of you on this Sunday when I didn't bother to cook. (LOL) Great, heartwarming read, my friend!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jjstar
This was such a fun chapter. Nothing like Sunday dinner after church, a little fishing and some romance. Nice. Reminds me of one of my favorite Craig Morgan songs.:) Well done!
Just a couple of thoughts:
Seemed like the winks might have been a little much. First Cash winked at her, then the pastor, then the mother..lol. That's a lot of winkin' going on.
She wanted to catch him after church, but she said you two ===maybe take out the second she?
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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This was such a fun chapter. Nothing like Sunday dinner after church, a little fishing and some romance. Nice. Reminds me of one of my favorite Craig Morgan songs.:) Well done!
Just a couple of thoughts:
Seemed like the winks might have been a little much. First Cash winked at her, then the pastor, then the mother..lol. That's a lot of winkin' going on.
She wanted to catch him after church, but she said you two ===maybe take out the second she?
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I will check out those areas.
Comment from Mishelly
Cash is obviously close to his mother, and I think this shows why he is such a good, decent man. The dialogue in this post was very enjoyable to read, and I'm looking forward to reading about the fishing trip :-)
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Cash is obviously close to his mother, and I think this shows why he is such a good, decent man. The dialogue in this post was very enjoyable to read, and I'm looking forward to reading about the fishing trip :-)
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from fictionwriter
I love that Cash is working this girl into the ways of life of southerners. I love the whole relationship between cas and the priest. WEll done.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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I love that Cash is working this girl into the ways of life of southerners. I love the whole relationship between cas and the priest. WEll done.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Deorre Leonard
Cash taking Paige to meet his family and go to church is a huge deal. The fried chicken and peach cobbler what a great country dinner. I liked this chapter it has a good flow. Thanks for sharing. Deorre
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Cash taking Paige to meet his family and go to church is a huge deal. The fried chicken and peach cobbler what a great country dinner. I liked this chapter it has a good flow. Thanks for sharing. Deorre
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Barbara, this has so much imagery I was sure I was there, and could smell the chicken.
I found this rounded the normality of your characters which I liked a lot. Making them feel as if I was part of the crew just enjoying a normal Sunday outing to church and family gathering.
I thought you penned this well. It flowed well, kept me engaged and delivered a strong post for the continuing story. Making me want to read more.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Hi Barbara, this has so much imagery I was sure I was there, and could smell the chicken.
I found this rounded the normality of your characters which I liked a lot. Making them feel as if I was part of the crew just enjoying a normal Sunday outing to church and family gathering.
I thought you penned this well. It flowed well, kept me engaged and delivered a strong post for the continuing story. Making me want to read more.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Writingfundimension
There were just so many good details in this chapter, barbara. I could see every scene as it unfolded. I think this is one of the best chapters yet. Great work ... Warmest regards, Bev
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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There were just so many good details in this chapter, barbara. I could see every scene as it unfolded. I think this is one of the best chapters yet. Great work ... Warmest regards, Bev
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're most welcome, barbara.
Comment from NaughtieScribe
I don't know how you keep coming up with these endearing characters. But I find with almost every installment there is someone else that engages me (not all in a positive way, but all in a good read way).
Now when a man takes you home to meet his momma, or church it's serious. Paige did both in one day. And he's giving up watching the game to take her fishing. Now can the ring and the baby carriage be far off? That was rhetorical. lol
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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I don't know how you keep coming up with these endearing characters. But I find with almost every installment there is someone else that engages me (not all in a positive way, but all in a good read way).
Now when a man takes you home to meet his momma, or church it's serious. Paige did both in one day. And he's giving up watching the game to take her fishing. Now can the ring and the baby carriage be far off? That was rhetorical. lol
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from mtnspirit
Hi barbara,
I must say I enjoyed this chapter throughly. How in tne world did you ever come up with a reformed alcoholic boxer/pastor? And I couldn't believe Paige bought her clothes at a second hand shop. I believe she fits in quite nicely.
I found your story to be interesting and I certainly enjoy your characters and I never find any nits in your writing. Good job and thank you for sharing a delightful read.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Hi barbara,
I must say I enjoyed this chapter throughly. How in tne world did you ever come up with a reformed alcoholic boxer/pastor? And I couldn't believe Paige bought her clothes at a second hand shop. I believe she fits in quite nicely.
I found your story to be interesting and I certainly enjoy your characters and I never find any nits in your writing. Good job and thank you for sharing a delightful read.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
