Savannah Love
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Comment from jadapenn
Hi Barbie, a nice fast paced chapter here with plenty of action for a Sunday to church. I didn't get to find out how Paige feels about Faye. Is that still coming?
don't take to[o] kindly to(o) his former profession
Well written. luv jada
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Hi Barbie, a nice fast paced chapter here with plenty of action for a Sunday to church. I didn't get to find out how Paige feels about Faye. Is that still coming?
don't take to[o] kindly to(o) his former profession
Well written. luv jada
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, Paiges impressions are coming.
Comment from unimatrix001
Great chapter that gives us a long missed look into Cashes personal life.
"And we'd better get seated. The organ's started." - Organs are quite loud. I realize that one cannot hear the organ through the written word, but it sounds ridiculous to me for Cash to say this. The idea is fine, but you may want to think about restructuring this sentence.
This reminds me of those movie scenes where they go in a stall, close the door, and immediately reopen the door in different clothing:
He shut the door as he left.
Paige entered the kitchen and noticed Cash wasn't there.
I think you need a transition here, I don't think Paige changed that fast. She would have fussed over her appearance to look good for both Cash and his mom.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Great chapter that gives us a long missed look into Cashes personal life.
"And we'd better get seated. The organ's started." - Organs are quite loud. I realize that one cannot hear the organ through the written word, but it sounds ridiculous to me for Cash to say this. The idea is fine, but you may want to think about restructuring this sentence.
This reminds me of those movie scenes where they go in a stall, close the door, and immediately reopen the door in different clothing:
He shut the door as he left.
Paige entered the kitchen and noticed Cash wasn't there.
I think you need a transition here, I don't think Paige changed that fast. She would have fussed over her appearance to look good for both Cash and his mom.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I will check that area out. Paige is working hard to fit in.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Another great chapter - most
enjoyable. It has left me feeling
hungry, Barbara
I have a daughter-in-law (she's a Vegan) who has
never cooked in her life and she's 43 - her excuse
is she doesn't know how - I'm tempted to say, you've
got to start somewhere. That's how we all learnt.
to kindly too his former profession."
too kindly to his
Margaret
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Another great chapter - most
enjoyable. It has left me feeling
hungry, Barbara
I have a daughter-in-law (she's a Vegan) who has
never cooked in her life and she's 43 - her excuse
is she doesn't know how - I'm tempted to say, you've
got to start somewhere. That's how we all learnt.
to kindly too his former profession."
too kindly to his
Margaret
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
This is a true slice of the almost South I grew up in. Bronaugh, Missouri sits on the northern edge of the Ozarks and almost exemplifies the customs of the deep south.
My family, which came to Missouri from West Virginia, talked and acted just like Cash's family. The picture of a southern dinner could have come from our farmhouse kitchen. You can;t imagine how hungry that picture mahes me.
Now that you sat the stage for a casual southern Sunday, I could visualize an enjoy the hospitality. some old time religion and the slight fawning over Paige as the beautiful newcomer and probable love interest for Cash.
Now I'm ready for some relaxed fishing.
I noted just one mix up in 'to and too'. Apparently most reviewers already caught this common error, which I suspect was a typo.
Love and Irish Hugs for the great nostalgia,
Roger
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Hi Barbara:)
This is a true slice of the almost South I grew up in. Bronaugh, Missouri sits on the northern edge of the Ozarks and almost exemplifies the customs of the deep south.
My family, which came to Missouri from West Virginia, talked and acted just like Cash's family. The picture of a southern dinner could have come from our farmhouse kitchen. You can;t imagine how hungry that picture mahes me.
Now that you sat the stage for a casual southern Sunday, I could visualize an enjoy the hospitality. some old time religion and the slight fawning over Paige as the beautiful newcomer and probable love interest for Cash.
Now I'm ready for some relaxed fishing.
I noted just one mix up in 'to and too'. Apparently most reviewers already caught this common error, which I suspect was a typo.
Love and Irish Hugs for the great nostalgia,
Roger
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. My dad grew up in Mtn. Grove, MO. My son is now working in Slater.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Now I am hungry!!! Funny she didn't know how to make mashed potatoes. There are a lot of young people today that don't have a clue how to cook. God chapter!!! Debbie
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Now I am hungry!!! Funny she didn't know how to make mashed potatoes. There are a lot of young people today that don't have a clue how to cook. God chapter!!! Debbie
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from fionageorge
Hi Barbara, great chapter. I have just returned from a trip and have not read previous chapters, but could pick up on the story line and characters straight away. Great use of dialogue, and the personalities come through well.
A couple of little spags:
Pastor Ben don't haveta call roll (is this correct? 'haveta')
take to[too] kindly too[to] his former profession
Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Hi Barbara, great chapter. I have just returned from a trip and have not read previous chapters, but could pick up on the story line and characters straight away. Great use of dialogue, and the personalities come through well.
A couple of little spags:
Pastor Ben don't haveta call roll (is this correct? 'haveta')
take to[too] kindly too[to] his former profession
Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. haveta is right for the deep south.
Comment from Tonulak
Hi Barbara,
A nice slice of that slow, Southern Sunday kind of life. Not over embelished, but it served the story with its gentle flow. Nice job--Ted
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Hi Barbara,
A nice slice of that slow, Southern Sunday kind of life. Not over embelished, but it served the story with its gentle flow. Nice job--Ted
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
What's not to like about fried chicken? I think that's
what my husband's mother cooked for me the first time
I ate with them. It certainly is a southern favorite -
one my Chicago-born mom learned to do well.
One small piece of spag for you below
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
don't take to kindly too his >>>
don't take too kindly to his
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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barbara:
What's not to like about fried chicken? I think that's
what my husband's mother cooked for me the first time
I ate with them. It certainly is a southern favorite -
one my Chicago-born mom learned to do well.
One small piece of spag for you below
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
don't take to kindly too his >>>
don't take too kindly to his
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hello Barbara. Nice and light read here. It's gentle because of your formatting and easy to review. The genre isn't exactly up to my own personal choice of reading. As for the image, food is a good cultural attachment as to describe love between north and south. You illuminated this well with the use of "Tatar tots' which up North, the character didn't know what what they used to smash Tatar's because in the North, we're used to Perogies..heh heh. Well, none the less good job and keep writing. I'm sure the characters will continue to unfold nicely thoughout the rest of your novel. Cheers.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Hello Barbara. Nice and light read here. It's gentle because of your formatting and easy to review. The genre isn't exactly up to my own personal choice of reading. As for the image, food is a good cultural attachment as to describe love between north and south. You illuminated this well with the use of "Tatar tots' which up North, the character didn't know what what they used to smash Tatar's because in the North, we're used to Perogies..heh heh. Well, none the less good job and keep writing. I'm sure the characters will continue to unfold nicely thoughout the rest of your novel. Cheers.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
I like the informal way these Southern people talk and act around each other. It comes off very natural.
This doesn't look exactly right. Pastor Ben don't haveta
I think it's a contraction but the urban dictionary has it spelled 'havta'.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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I like the informal way these Southern people talk and act around each other. It comes off very natural.
This doesn't look exactly right. Pastor Ben don't haveta
I think it's a contraction but the urban dictionary has it spelled 'havta'.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
