Savannah Love
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Comment from Norbanus
This is a nicley told account from a POV often neglected in modern accounts of The War Between the States. Excellent dialogue.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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This is a nicley told account from a POV often neglected in modern accounts of The War Between the States. Excellent dialogue.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
By the way, I work up in the middle of the night and forgot to mention something to you and it bothered me. The CID officers aren't regular officers, they are Warrant Officers, anywhere from one - five. The MP's have regular officers.
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I didn't know that. When I was in the army in 1950, the division CID commander was a regular bird colonel. Things change, I guess.
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Yes, they have. After the fatal vision case at fort Bragg is when things really changed and CID was taken out of the regular command and they are they're on their own, so they have authority to investigate all.
Comment from Adri7enne
Good chapter, barb. Nice, conventional people. I haven't met people who court and go to church in such a long time this reads like historical fiction. LOL! Brings back good memories, though. I remember going to church with my first boy friend. I enjoyed reading about it. Well done. Couldn't spot any spags.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Good chapter, barb. Nice, conventional people. I haven't met people who court and go to church in such a long time this reads like historical fiction. LOL! Brings back good memories, though. I remember going to church with my first boy friend. I enjoyed reading about it. Well done. Couldn't spot any spags.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
Now that I can give you six stars, I will. I really enjoyed this chapter. We'll see what happens when Cash and Paige walk into the church with its old-fashioned congregation. I love it that Paige is almost always a step ahead of Cash. Great comedy and quite a change from your previous grim book.
Dave
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Barbara,
Now that I can give you six stars, I will. I really enjoyed this chapter. We'll see what happens when Cash and Paige walk into the church with its old-fashioned congregation. I love it that Paige is almost always a step ahead of Cash. Great comedy and quite a change from your previous grim book.
Dave
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I was hoping the humor was coming through.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
I enjoyed this chapter, Barbara. Lighthearted and fun banter between the two of them. Got a chuckle out of Cash's comment about the war. I've spent quite a bit of time in the south, and they certainly haven't forgotten it!
I like the way their relationship is developing.
Hugs, Av
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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I enjoyed this chapter, Barbara. Lighthearted and fun banter between the two of them. Got a chuckle out of Cash's comment about the war. I've spent quite a bit of time in the south, and they certainly haven't forgotten it!
I like the way their relationship is developing.
Hugs, Av
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I had a reviewer question me about it. Yes, some Southerns are still fighting the war.
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Romance Fiction! The author writes well and keeps the reader interested with just enough detail.
The read is thought provoking and made me think about what would happen next. I always enjoy this author's work.
Thank you, harmony13
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Excellent Romance Fiction! The author writes well and keeps the reader interested with just enough detail.
The read is thought provoking and made me think about what would happen next. I always enjoy this author's work.
Thank you, harmony13
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate the encouraging words.
Comment from Deorre Leonard
Cash and Paige are getting closer.... Will they end up being a couple? I like the flow of this. As always another great chapter. Deorre:)
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Cash and Paige are getting closer.... Will they end up being a couple? I like the flow of this. As always another great chapter. Deorre:)
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ted T
Hi Barbara :)
Good dialogue exchanges, a bit stilted or stiff. Some of the speeches seem tacked on and come off flat. Several lines read like unnecessary chatter. However the book is set in the south and many of those folks never stop yacking.
Good to see you're not [turning toward] -- [turning away] and opening narrative lines with ING words, however, you should keep an eye on starting narrative lines with [as}.
BTW: How does a character try to hide a giggle? Let Paige have her giggle rather than try to hide it.
Not bad at all.
Ted
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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Hi Barbara :)
Good dialogue exchanges, a bit stilted or stiff. Some of the speeches seem tacked on and come off flat. Several lines read like unnecessary chatter. However the book is set in the south and many of those folks never stop yacking.
Good to see you're not [turning toward] -- [turning away] and opening narrative lines with ING words, however, you should keep an eye on starting narrative lines with [as}.
BTW: How does a character try to hide a giggle? Let Paige have her giggle rather than try to hide it.
Not bad at all.
Ted
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome :)
Comment from mtnspirit
Hi barbara,
It is nice to see Paige and Cash's relationship continuing to develope. Your story is well written, interesting and the flow is smooth. I enjoyed it very much and look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Hi barbara,
It is nice to see Paige and Cash's relationship continuing to develope. Your story is well written, interesting and the flow is smooth. I enjoyed it very much and look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from irishauthorme
Even though this was a short chapter, you filled it with great dialogue and showed us how the relationship between Paige and cash is not strained or forced in any way. I liked the way that you showed them as not only attracted to each other, but as good friends. Paige straightening Cash' tie before they walked into church was an excellent touch, as was his concern with the bright coral-colored dress that revealed too much.
Continuing good effort, irish
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Even though this was a short chapter, you filled it with great dialogue and showed us how the relationship between Paige and cash is not strained or forced in any way. I liked the way that you showed them as not only attracted to each other, but as good friends. Paige straightening Cash' tie before they walked into church was an excellent touch, as was his concern with the bright coral-colored dress that revealed too much.
Continuing good effort, irish
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ....
I enjoyed the little bit of dialogue between Cash and Paige on their way to Church with each one, apparently, trying to do what the other one wanted.
There are two small changes needed ...
* You have - They're already here. He went around ... this should be - They're already here." He went around ...
* You have - As they stood at the solid oak door, Paige stop and straightened ...this should be - Paige stopped
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* You have - with hand on the small of Paige's back ... which should be - with his hand on ....
Now, I look forward to the next chapter.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Hullo Barbara ....
I enjoyed the little bit of dialogue between Cash and Paige on their way to Church with each one, apparently, trying to do what the other one wanted.
There are two small changes needed ...
* You have - They're already here. He went around ... this should be - They're already here." He went around ...
* You have - As they stood at the solid oak door, Paige stop and straightened ...this should be - Paige stopped
and ..
* You have - with hand on the small of Paige's back ... which should be - with his hand on ....
Now, I look forward to the next chapter.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the catches. I have made the changes.
