Savannah Love
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Comment from forestport12
Yes, understand the pressure and angst to feel you have repeat the main character names, etc.. I liked in this one how you showed the one character trying to be logical and evoking Newton's law. Great dynamics between characters and with dialogue.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Yes, understand the pressure and angst to feel you have repeat the main character names, etc.. I liked in this one how you showed the one character trying to be logical and evoking Newton's law. Great dynamics between characters and with dialogue.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Barb.
O good we are getting into the frolics of the ghost or two. Looks like they are showing they are around and love to tease. I just wonder what deep tricky they plan to do?
Gert
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Hi Barb.
O good we are getting into the frolics of the ghost or two. Looks like they are showing they are around and love to tease. I just wonder what deep tricky they plan to do?
Gert
Comment Written 18-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouraging words.
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You are welcome
Gert
Comment from Anthony Crosbie
This is a nice story with interesting dialog and a fun story. The story skipped along at a good pace and I enjoyed the read. Archie
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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This is a nice story with interesting dialog and a fun story. The story skipped along at a good pace and I enjoyed the read. Archie
Comment Written 18-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Barbara,
The story continues to be interesting and entertaining. The plot of the ghost(s) thickens. One thing is for sure, something extraordinary is happening at the house.
There is a little spag you may want to consider:
By the end of the fourth inning, the pizza had been eaten and Paige and Mary Pat sat on the floor playing Twenty-one. (been eaten, and Paige and)
"At least you haven't bitten me, yet. There's always a first time." (At least, you haven't)
"Seventh inning stretch." (Seventh-inning)
Both women stared wide eyed as the cabinet doors repeatedly opened and slammed shut. (wide-eyed)
Paige held up a bottle of bright red polish. (bright-red)
Godspeed,
Curtis
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Barbara,
The story continues to be interesting and entertaining. The plot of the ghost(s) thickens. One thing is for sure, something extraordinary is happening at the house.
There is a little spag you may want to consider:
By the end of the fourth inning, the pizza had been eaten and Paige and Mary Pat sat on the floor playing Twenty-one. (been eaten, and Paige and)
"At least you haven't bitten me, yet. There's always a first time." (At least, you haven't)
"Seventh inning stretch." (Seventh-inning)
Both women stared wide eyed as the cabinet doors repeatedly opened and slammed shut. (wide-eyed)
Paige held up a bottle of bright red polish. (bright-red)
Godspeed,
Curtis
Comment Written 18-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Thank you for your eagle eye, I will make the corrections. I get confused when to - and when not to.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
This is great Barbara, you had my attention all the way through. Cash has certainly going to have to get on board with believing in ghosts...something has to get him going.
I loved the witty humor with; "Do ghosts even have butts?"
Excellent work my friend and a great next chapter for this story.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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This is great Barbara, you had my attention all the way through. Cash has certainly going to have to get on board with believing in ghosts...something has to get him going.
I loved the witty humor with; "Do ghosts even have butts?"
Excellent work my friend and a great next chapter for this story.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 18-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Terror2s
You do a nice job with your dialogue. It is engaging and the characters responses seem realistic. I look forward to reading more. T2
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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You do a nice job with your dialogue. It is engaging and the characters responses seem realistic. I look forward to reading more. T2
Comment Written 18-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh joy! Oh bliss! Lots of action from my friendly ghost!!! (It is a friendly one, I hope - LOL) Oh Barbara, I just LOVED this chapter! (But you knew I would, didn't you?) More, oh more! I moan - I need more of this delicious stuff!!! Not one single thing would I change.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Oh joy! Oh bliss! Lots of action from my friendly ghost!!! (It is a friendly one, I hope - LOL) Oh Barbara, I just LOVED this chapter! (But you knew I would, didn't you?) More, oh more! I moan - I need more of this delicious stuff!!! Not one single thing would I change.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and you encouraging words.
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Oh you are very welcome, believe me! I almost wish at times like this that you hadn't enthused over my poem so much because I am afraid you might think my raving is only reciprical - I promise you, I would not do that, Barbara. You wrote a spectacular bit to this book in that chapter, and I meant it when I said 'more of this, please!" I think it makes your story, I truly do.
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You're sweet,
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as suga' an' twice as nice! (and if you believe that, I have some property you might be interested in...snicker! LOL)
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I have always liked Canada. LOL
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I was thinking more around Florida, you know where it's so scenic? The swamp boats, the wildlife...(LOL)
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I've heard Canada is very scenic, mountains and snow. I happen to love mountains.
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Oh Barbara, that's only one part of the country - now I really WILL sound like I am bosting, but I must write a non-fiction one day about this vast land - i do not exaggerate when I say it is like visiting multiple countries when you travel from province to province! We have mountains, plains, even hoodoos, like right out of a Clint Eastwood movie. I know it well ecuase I've travelled most of it, from the Arctic to both coasts (which are hugely different from each other, too.)
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oops - that was supposed to be boasting -lol - capital letter for 'i' - Because - what can I say, my keyboard is giving trouble now too (again!) hahahaha - holy shoots! now I'm editing my replies! Not TOO driven to perfection!
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WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I think I would love it ther.
Comment from Taffspride
Oh, I got goose bumps reading this chapter. Your descriptions are so very real, and brings the full effect of a haunting to your readers. Even though Cash says there are no such things as ghosts, I think deep down he knows that they do exist.
This is such a well written chapter, I can find nothing wrong with it. No SPAG or anything that should be changed.
Great work. Looking forward to the next episode.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Oh, I got goose bumps reading this chapter. Your descriptions are so very real, and brings the full effect of a haunting to your readers. Even though Cash says there are no such things as ghosts, I think deep down he knows that they do exist.
This is such a well written chapter, I can find nothing wrong with it. No SPAG or anything that should be changed.
Great work. Looking forward to the next episode.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 18-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Keeper Tony
Another enthralling instalment which again is very well written. You certainly appear to be enjoying yourself with this story, and this comes out in your writing. An enjoyable read indeed.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Another enthralling instalment which again is very well written. You certainly appear to be enjoying yourself with this story, and this comes out in your writing. An enjoyable read indeed.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I am enjoying myself with this novel. The only problem is now I am having strange happening in my house. I keep telling myself, it's my 19 year old being a pain in the butt. He's a male.
Comment from elgone
For ghost story lovers the story is getting interesting. I like Paige's attitude about the ghosts. She's intrigued more than afraid. Cash remains skeptical so the ghosts are going to have to work on him.
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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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For ghost story lovers the story is getting interesting. I like Paige's attitude about the ghosts. She's intrigued more than afraid. Cash remains skeptical so the ghosts are going to have to work on him.
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Comment Written 18-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
