Savannah Love
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Comment from Auroraboreal800
I loved the witty humor with; "Do ghosts even have butts?"
I have my personal point of view and experience about ghosts... The story is getting better and better in each new chapter. You had all my attention all the way.
GREAT JOB Barbara!!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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I loved the witty humor with; "Do ghosts even have butts?"
I have my personal point of view and experience about ghosts... The story is getting better and better in each new chapter. You had all my attention all the way.
GREAT JOB Barbara!!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mtrybak
That was wonderful from start to finish. You are very gifted and there is much I can learn from you. Your flow and pacing are done so well that I am left wanting more when it's done. The story is also intriguing and this would end up as a best seller. Congratulations on writing as well as some of my favorite authors. I can't wait for the next entry!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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That was wonderful from start to finish. You are very gifted and there is much I can learn from you. Your flow and pacing are done so well that I am left wanting more when it's done. The story is also intriguing and this would end up as a best seller. Congratulations on writing as well as some of my favorite authors. I can't wait for the next entry!
Comment Written 20-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind reveiew and encouraging words.
Comment from prayingpoet
Well, the men certainly were more calm about the possible ghost then the women were. Looks like we will have to wit for the next chapter to see what happens!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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Well, the men certainly were more calm about the possible ghost then the women were. Looks like we will have to wit for the next chapter to see what happens!
Comment Written 20-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Misrael
Even though I am one of those who doesn't believe in ghosts I did find this to be very interesting to say the least.I look forward to reading more. Good read, good job and keep on writing.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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Even though I am one of those who doesn't believe in ghosts I did find this to be very interesting to say the least.I look forward to reading more. Good read, good job and keep on writing.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Angels27
A lovely read Barbara. The character Paige is such a cool cat. The dialogues are very crisp, cool, and a humorous vein running throughout. Enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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A lovely read Barbara. The character Paige is such a cool cat. The dialogues are very crisp, cool, and a humorous vein running throughout. Enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from harmony13
Great Fiction! This read flowed and connected well. The author did a good job in keeping the reader interested
until the end. I loved the artwork - it enhanced the read.
Thank you for well written fiction.....harmony13
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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Great Fiction! This read flowed and connected well. The author did a good job in keeping the reader interested
until the end. I loved the artwork - it enhanced the read.
Thank you for well written fiction.....harmony13
Comment Written 20-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Norbanus
This is a nice move forward in the story, barbara. Here's a typo in narration that you might want to check:
'. . . rolled across the kitchen(kitchen's) wooden floor.'
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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This is a nice move forward in the story, barbara. Here's a typo in narration that you might want to check:
'. . . rolled across the kitchen(kitchen's) wooden floor.'
Comment Written 20-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from bhogg
Hi Barbara - I've been scarce for awhile. After reading your post, I realize my loss. I'll definitely circle back and read some posts. Of course, I'm Southern, so totally believe in ghosts. One has sat on the end of my bed. Always warm regards, Bill
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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Hi Barbara - I've been scarce for awhile. After reading your post, I realize my loss. I'll definitely circle back and read some posts. Of course, I'm Southern, so totally believe in ghosts. One has sat on the end of my bed. Always warm regards, Bill
Comment Written 19-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. Please make time to stay with us. I miss your posts.
Comment from LScribeHarris
LOL - "do ghosts even have butts?" I have something very similar in one of my ghost stories, when the main character tried to decide whether ghosts got to have a gender. Nice work on this short chapter. A few nitpicks:
Paige stood and reached above her head --> this seems a little awkward. When you reach, you're usually reaching for something. Maybe "stretched her arms above her head" or something similar would be clearer.
The men began searching the house. <-- this was a rather abrupt transition. It might be a bit gentler to describe them leaving the room. Readers would understand that they're going to search the house.
The action is a little too blunt, without much to key us into what the main character is thinking. A few bits of internal reaction--particularly when the ghost started acting up--would have helped make this five-stars for me. Overall, nice work on this chapter. :)
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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2012
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LOL - "do ghosts even have butts?" I have something very similar in one of my ghost stories, when the main character tried to decide whether ghosts got to have a gender. Nice work on this short chapter. A few nitpicks:
Paige stood and reached above her head --> this seems a little awkward. When you reach, you're usually reaching for something. Maybe "stretched her arms above her head" or something similar would be clearer.
The men began searching the house. <-- this was a rather abrupt transition. It might be a bit gentler to describe them leaving the room. Readers would understand that they're going to search the house.
The action is a little too blunt, without much to key us into what the main character is thinking. A few bits of internal reaction--particularly when the ghost started acting up--would have helped make this five-stars for me. Overall, nice work on this chapter. :)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2012
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Sorry for the late reply. I needed time to make the corrections.
Thank you for the catches.
Comment from Sasha
I enjoyed this chapter very much. I would be a basket case if cupboard doors were opening and shutting and vases were rolling across the floor. I admire Paige's calm response to what may very well be a real ghost. Nice work with this chapter. Very well written and definitely interesting.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2012
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I enjoyed this chapter very much. I would be a basket case if cupboard doors were opening and shutting and vases were rolling across the floor. I admire Paige's calm response to what may very well be a real ghost. Nice work with this chapter. Very well written and definitely interesting.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
