Savannah Love
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Comment from Gert sherwood
Barb, I thought this chapter was greatI really like the dwon to Earth dialogue with your humorous thoughts
ex.
There ain't no such things as ghosts."
Mary Pat stood beside her husband. "Just like there's no gays in the South. They're all up north, right?"
Smiles
Gert
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Barb, I thought this chapter was greatI really like the dwon to Earth dialogue with your humorous thoughts
ex.
There ain't no such things as ghosts."
Mary Pat stood beside her husband. "Just like there's no gays in the South. They're all up north, right?"
Smiles
Gert
Comment Written 12-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
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You are welcome Barb
Gert
Comment from donaldww
This was an excellent post. Paige and Cash are starting to sound more familiar with each other as friends, rather than empoyer/employee.
I read this quite slowly and found no SPAG issues.
Cheers,
DW
Excellent!
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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This was an excellent post. Paige and Cash are starting to sound more familiar with each other as friends, rather than empoyer/employee.
I read this quite slowly and found no SPAG issues.
Cheers,
DW
Excellent!
Comment Written 12-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jjstar
Fun chapter. I'm glad you got it up. I always look forward to Sundays because of your posts. I don't know why, but this story always makes me want to curl up with the real book and read all day. It's just a lively, fun story with great dynamics between the characters.
Cash is such a buzzkill though. It might be fun to have a ghost around..hahaha. It's such a guy thing to always find a logical explanation for everything.
His eyes met hers'.==rogue apostrophe? lol
"All I'm only guilty of is not believing in ghosts." ==A tad awkward?
How about if I win, I get to paint your fingernails the color of my choice?" She giggled.
===that's good..hahaha
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Fun chapter. I'm glad you got it up. I always look forward to Sundays because of your posts. I don't know why, but this story always makes me want to curl up with the real book and read all day. It's just a lively, fun story with great dynamics between the characters.
Cash is such a buzzkill though. It might be fun to have a ghost around..hahaha. It's such a guy thing to always find a logical explanation for everything.
His eyes met hers'.==rogue apostrophe? lol
"All I'm only guilty of is not believing in ghosts." ==A tad awkward?
How about if I win, I get to paint your fingernails the color of my choice?" She giggled.
===that's good..hahaha
Comment Written 12-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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If it helps, the ghost makes a little appearance in next Sunday's post. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Barbara,
The story continues at a good pace and maintains a high level of interest. The affection between Paige and Cash continues to grow. The camping trip promises to bring some new wrinkle to the story. Huh, a ghost eating pizza. I wondered why they ordered three pizzas for the four of them. It is a good read, and I look forward to the next post.
Well done,
Curtis
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Barbara,
The story continues at a good pace and maintains a high level of interest. The affection between Paige and Cash continues to grow. The camping trip promises to bring some new wrinkle to the story. Huh, a ghost eating pizza. I wondered why they ordered three pizzas for the four of them. It is a good read, and I look forward to the next post.
Well done,
Curtis
Comment Written 12-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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The ghost is hungry. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara Wilkey ....
.... and, of course, I am sitting here smiling, having taken a second look at your ghost taking a bite of Pizza.
I enjoyed this chapter, as usual, and you certainly have a friendly group of characters.
There are just two small changes to suggest ...
* You have - I'm not the little miss prissy you think I am.
Paige grabbed the pillow back. The inverted commas need to be closed after ... you think I am." and then I suggest - Once again, Paige grabbed the pillow.
Now I look forward to your next chapter.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Hullo Barbara Wilkey ....
.... and, of course, I am sitting here smiling, having taken a second look at your ghost taking a bite of Pizza.
I enjoyed this chapter, as usual, and you certainly have a friendly group of characters.
There are just two small changes to suggest ...
* You have - I'm not the little miss prissy you think I am.
Paige grabbed the pillow back. The inverted commas need to be closed after ... you think I am." and then I suggest - Once again, Paige grabbed the pillow.
Now I look forward to your next chapter.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sasha
Although I have never tried, I can imagine it is quite difficult. Great chapter with fun bantering between characters. Chase and Paige do seem like they were meant for each other. I think camping is a great idea!
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Although I have never tried, I can imagine it is quite difficult. Great chapter with fun bantering between characters. Chase and Paige do seem like they were meant for each other. I think camping is a great idea!
Comment Written 12-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Keeper Tony
This was an entertaining piece of writing captured mainly in dialogue. It can sometimes be hard to retain a readers interest when there is little descriptive content in a passage of prose, yet this works and continues a story which i admit i have yet to catch from the beginning. You have a good sense of voices and making each character individual, and this is something i need to understand and practice more as i endeavour to further my writing. An enjoyable read, and well done in finding the image to match this excerpt of your novel.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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This was an entertaining piece of writing captured mainly in dialogue. It can sometimes be hard to retain a readers interest when there is little descriptive content in a passage of prose, yet this works and continues a story which i admit i have yet to catch from the beginning. You have a good sense of voices and making each character individual, and this is something i need to understand and practice more as i endeavour to further my writing. An enjoyable read, and well done in finding the image to match this excerpt of your novel.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mtnspirit
Hi barbara,
I can't believe you actually found a picture of a ghost eating pizza!
Paige is going to keep on until she finally convinces Cash that there is such a thing as ghost.
Your characters and their dialogue is distinct and believable. Your chapter a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Hi barbara,
I can't believe you actually found a picture of a ghost eating pizza!
Paige is going to keep on until she finally convinces Cash that there is such a thing as ghost.
Your characters and their dialogue is distinct and believable. Your chapter a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
THIS CHAPTER FLOWS WELL, BUT I AM SURE I NEED TO READ EARLIER CHAPTERS TO GET A HANG OF IT. I like the characters in this post and the conversations they held. Quite lively and interesting. kudos
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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THIS CHAPTER FLOWS WELL, BUT I AM SURE I NEED TO READ EARLIER CHAPTERS TO GET A HANG OF IT. I like the characters in this post and the conversations they held. Quite lively and interesting. kudos
Comment Written 12-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from AprilShower
Barbara, you couldn't have entered this into that contest that ends on November 20th. I can't wait to find out if there is really a ghost. I'm enjoying the story. It's a nice story. I noticed only one typing error below:
that leans again(st) the roof."
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Barbara, you couldn't have entered this into that contest that ends on November 20th. I can't wait to find out if there is really a ghost. I'm enjoying the story. It's a nice story. I noticed only one typing error below:
that leans again(st) the roof."
Comment Written 12-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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That you for the kind review.
