The Quick ick -- Part 1
A different kind of Christmas carol.31 total reviews
Comment from Donya Quijote
It was suggested that read your works by another reviewer so here I am. Your tale of two jewel thieves is very interesting and overall an enjoyable. It had me kind of lost in the beginning, but once the banter between your two characters began it made sense. I really liked your description of the old Pacer, talk about a strange looking, ugly car. Weren't they recalled? The best part is banter between the two thieves. It was almost flirtatious. Looking forward to the next part...
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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It was suggested that read your works by another reviewer so here I am. Your tale of two jewel thieves is very interesting and overall an enjoyable. It had me kind of lost in the beginning, but once the banter between your two characters began it made sense. I really liked your description of the old Pacer, talk about a strange looking, ugly car. Weren't they recalled? The best part is banter between the two thieves. It was almost flirtatious. Looking forward to the next part...
Comment Written 12-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Thank you, DQ. Sorry if the story got off to a slow start. Thanks for stopping by. Peace, Lee
Comment from Paradox Tremors
I always love these stories of yours. They always seems to give me the much needed smile I need. "Dumber than Tupperware, I'll have to remember that. Well written, my friend.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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I always love these stories of yours. They always seems to give me the much needed smile I need. "Dumber than Tupperware, I'll have to remember that. Well written, my friend.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2012
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Hey, PT, thanks so much for the galaxy and the kind words. Peace,Lee
Comment from Realist101
Hi Lee, I really enjoyed this one! Your wit and smarts really shines through in it. I could find no spags, but you know me. I'm not an A student anymore. This would make a super novella. Seriously. Susan
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Hi Lee, I really enjoyed this one! Your wit and smarts really shines through in it. I could find no spags, but you know me. I'm not an A student anymore. This would make a super novella. Seriously. Susan
Comment Written 12-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Thank you, Susan. Another little romp with loveable low-lifes.
Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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Yes! I think 'loveable' is exactly what makes your characters special Lee! You are able to take the negative side of humanity and give it a happy face. Exactly! :) S.
Comment from forestport12
Interesting story. Unfortunately your writing has such depth of quality, I need to go back and make it go deeper. I can visualize and love the mounting tension and believable dialogue between the so-called Lutheran and MC
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Interesting story. Unfortunately your writing has such depth of quality, I need to go back and make it go deeper. I can visualize and love the mounting tension and believable dialogue between the so-called Lutheran and MC
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Thank you, Stan. You just made me realize I haven't named the main character yet. Thanks for the heads up. Peace, Lee
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh Lee, I must have given you six stars recently because the time's not up yet - I ROARED with laughter at this one!!! My favorite parts - "Confusious couldn't refold it if you gave him a thousand years and an unlimited supply of Red Bull" HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!! (the Red Bull especially!) And of course, the whole of the last paragraph!!!!! (Tupperware-dumb!) Man, you are talented! What a plot! What a write!
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Oh Lee, I must have given you six stars recently because the time's not up yet - I ROARED with laughter at this one!!! My favorite parts - "Confusious couldn't refold it if you gave him a thousand years and an unlimited supply of Red Bull" HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!! (the Red Bull especially!) And of course, the whole of the last paragraph!!!!! (Tupperware-dumb!) Man, you are talented! What a plot! What a write!
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Thanks so much, Dawn. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Yes yes. I'm likin' it. I'm likin' it a lot. You're a natural, Lee. I don't know what a Pacer looks like, so I'm off for a Google. I'll also check online.
She's quite the chickie.
I reach into the glove box and open up one of those origami road maps Confucius couldn't refold it you gave him a thousand years and an unlimited supply of Red Bull. - Brilliant.
I have a date with Daniel tonight. He can't wait.
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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Yes yes. I'm likin' it. I'm likin' it a lot. You're a natural, Lee. I don't know what a Pacer looks like, so I'm off for a Google. I'll also check online.
She's quite the chickie.
I reach into the glove box and open up one of those origami road maps Confucius couldn't refold it you gave him a thousand years and an unlimited supply of Red Bull. - Brilliant.
I have a date with Daniel tonight. He can't wait.
Av
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Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Thanks again, Av. My friend had a Pacer. It really was like riding in a fishbowl. You couldn't pick your nose or anything.
Love the six.
I'm sure you enjoyed the film. Get any sleep?
Peace, Lee
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No, he didn't.
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You devil-woman!
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That's what he said.
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Truthfully - we couldn't get in. Should've bought advance tickets - the line up was out into the lobby - and it was showing on two screens.
Daniel's gonna have to wait a couple of days. But I've promised him it'll be worth it.
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I have no doubt.
Comment from Spitfire
To be honest, I almost lost interest with the rant at the opening. I had no clue where this was going until the paragraph that starts:As a target, it ain't so much... After that, I really got into it and loved the feisty dialogue. Another good opener would be:What I ought to do is steal a really fine car and sleigh-bell-the-hell into the sunset-- that puts the reader right into the situation.
I didn't see where paragraph two added anything. Just my opinion. You'll get enough high ratings to undo my four.
Have to be true to myself, sweetie. :-(
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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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To be honest, I almost lost interest with the rant at the opening. I had no clue where this was going until the paragraph that starts:As a target, it ain't so much... After that, I really got into it and loved the feisty dialogue. Another good opener would be:What I ought to do is steal a really fine car and sleigh-bell-the-hell into the sunset-- that puts the reader right into the situation.
I didn't see where paragraph two added anything. Just my opinion. You'll get enough high ratings to undo my four.
Have to be true to myself, sweetie. :-(
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Thanks, Shari. I guess they all can't be masterpieces. Peace, Lee
Comment from BethShelby
This is a cool story just as it is. I'm not sure where you go from here seeing this busy chick knows so much about you and can still figure out what you're up to while she waits on eleven customers. She even has the license plate memorized ,so I think I'd taking the fishbowl out of this Lutheran town before you get to spend Christmas in the slammer.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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This is a cool story just as it is. I'm not sure where you go from here seeing this busy chick knows so much about you and can still figure out what you're up to while she waits on eleven customers. She even has the license plate memorized ,so I think I'd taking the fishbowl out of this Lutheran town before you get to spend Christmas in the slammer.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Thank you, Beth. Oh, I don't think Tupperware is as smart as you are. I think he's going to do something stupid. Peace, Lee
Comment from MumEsGirl
Interesting and pacy, am really wondering where this one is going to end up. Somehow I don't visualise Los Angeles as your destination.
Looking forward to catching the next installment
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Interesting and pacy, am really wondering where this one is going to end up. Somehow I don't visualise Los Angeles as your destination.
Looking forward to catching the next installment
hugs
kate
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Thank you, kate. I don't think LA is in his immediate future either. Peace, Lee
Comment from Silverlock
Well, mate, as I toss another shrimp on the barbie with my friend Mick, I can't help but feel a little sorry for poor Zapata! LOL
Actually I'm eating breakfast and had to be very careful where I coughed when I choked on my muesli - loved the origami map /Confucius line - very funny!!
Great humour between Zapata (What's his real name?) and the sassy sales assistant.
I think you're on another winner here, Lee, loved it :))
Regards, Barb
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Well, mate, as I toss another shrimp on the barbie with my friend Mick, I can't help but feel a little sorry for poor Zapata! LOL
Actually I'm eating breakfast and had to be very careful where I coughed when I choked on my muesli - loved the origami map /Confucius line - very funny!!
Great humour between Zapata (What's his real name?) and the sassy sales assistant.
I think you're on another winner here, Lee, loved it :))
Regards, Barb
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2012
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Thank you, Barb. I hope I didn't offend you or Mick. I'm just blue with envy up here. Glad you are enjoying. Peace, Lee
