Savannah Love
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Comment from visionary1234
Haven't read you for quite a while Barbara - my loss! I'm going to jump in for more - your writing is always masterly - characters natural, speech rhythms good - and your use of dialogue to propel the story forward is always deft! as always, great write ... and I see you're still into kitties (over handsome hunks even???) :) Sharyn
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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Haven't read you for quite a while Barbara - my loss! I'm going to jump in for more - your writing is always masterly - characters natural, speech rhythms good - and your use of dialogue to propel the story forward is always deft! as always, great write ... and I see you're still into kitties (over handsome hunks even???) :) Sharyn
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I just thought the kittens were too cute. LOl
Comment from Sasha
This was a fun and delightful chapter. I enjoyed the banter between Paige and Chase. He is definitely a southern gentleman looking out for her. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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This was a fun and delightful chapter. I enjoyed the banter between Paige and Chase. He is definitely a southern gentleman looking out for her. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and your insight on Southern gentlemen.
Comment from Connie P
I'm jumping in again, Barbara. I really enjoyed this chapter although I don't know what's going on. So glad to see you have a Southern character. I loved it when he remarked about giving a gal a back rub. Only thing I'd check is petit fours, I don't think the e is needed.
Lots of love!
Connie
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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I'm jumping in again, Barbara. I really enjoyed this chapter although I don't know what's going on. So glad to see you have a Southern character. I loved it when he remarked about giving a gal a back rub. Only thing I'd check is petit fours, I don't think the e is needed.
Lots of love!
Connie
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I hope you stay around for awhile.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Chase seems to be over-protective and
getting rather possessive.
Will Paige put up with it, I wonder?
Sorry[,] I woke you up - lose comma
I'm almost finished. The backdoor's finished -Here, might I suggest, rather than use "finished" twice ---
I'm almost done here.
Margaret
Loved the kittens - so cute.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Chase seems to be over-protective and
getting rather possessive.
Will Paige put up with it, I wonder?
Sorry[,] I woke you up - lose comma
I'm almost finished. The backdoor's finished -Here, might I suggest, rather than use "finished" twice ---
I'm almost done here.
Margaret
Loved the kittens - so cute.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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I'm sorry for the late reply. I had to wait until I had time to make the corrections.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Your kitties are adorable, Barbara. And since every cat is a lion in disguise, I think you have the male of the species covered. :D A well written segment. Chase is getting possessive pretty quickly. This is going to be fun. :) nancy
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Your kitties are adorable, Barbara. And since every cat is a lion in disguise, I think you have the male of the species covered. :D A well written segment. Chase is getting possessive pretty quickly. This is going to be fun. :) nancy
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tjames
Your sentences have good flow and the use of grammar is really good. I believe I have to go back to the beginning of the story to understand it, but it did hold my interest enough to do that.
I'll check back when I'm finished.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Your sentences have good flow and the use of grammar is really good. I believe I have to go back to the beginning of the story to understand it, but it did hold my interest enough to do that.
I'll check back when I'm finished.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
Your latest chapter is splendidly written.
Your chemistry between Cash and Paige is wonderful.
Their dialogue is snappy.
Your characterization is excellent.
Cash is jealous of Maurice.
I'd recommend the latest chapter of your entretaning romance/ghost story to other reviewers as a "must" read.
Keep on writing top notch chapters, my friend.
Please have a lovely week,
Love ya,
Melissa.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Barbara,
Your latest chapter is splendidly written.
Your chemistry between Cash and Paige is wonderful.
Their dialogue is snappy.
Your characterization is excellent.
Cash is jealous of Maurice.
I'd recommend the latest chapter of your entretaning romance/ghost story to other reviewers as a "must" read.
Keep on writing top notch chapters, my friend.
Please have a lovely week,
Love ya,
Melissa.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nora arjuna
yes, barb, that photo is cute indeed. my cat massages my tummy every night and sometimes in the morning. i missed a few chapters i guess. looks like she's still settling down and cash still doing his work. another fine chapter. no nits.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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yes, barb, that photo is cute indeed. my cat massages my tummy every night and sometimes in the morning. i missed a few chapters i guess. looks like she's still settling down and cash still doing his work. another fine chapter. no nits.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from unimatrix001
Cash is getting a little too over protective. He's bordering on creepy. Showing up unexpected, doing things that Paige didn't ask for, disapproving of her being around other men. It's getting to be a little bit much, especially for a northern girl who should be accustomed to a lot more freedom.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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Cash is getting a little too over protective. He's bordering on creepy. Showing up unexpected, doing things that Paige didn't ask for, disapproving of her being around other men. It's getting to be a little bit much, especially for a northern girl who should be accustomed to a lot more freedom.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2012
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I think you might be surprised to see exactly what's going on. Thank you for the kind review
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Ooo, our Cash is getting a wee bit territorial with Paige, isn't he?
A few things for you to consider, Barbara. Suggestions only, of course.
"Good morning." She paused. "Sorry, I heard a door slam. When I came downstairs, I didn't expect to see you." She paused. "No more incidents. - you have 'She paused' twice in this section. How about: "Good morning." Her face turned a slight pink. "Sorry, I heard a door slam, and didn't expect to see you when I came downstairs." She paused. "No more incidents....
Sorry()I woke you up. - lose comma
Then you use 'finished' several times in the next section. I've made some suggestions to get rid of a few:
"I'm almost finished. The backdoor's finished. - I'm almost done. The backdoor's finished."
I'll be finished before the ladies arrive." - I'll be gone before the ladies arrive.
"I have one more thing to check, then I'm finished. _ I have one more thing to check before I go."
Good chapter though. I'm enjoying Cash's jealousy. LOL!
Hugs, Av
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Ooo, our Cash is getting a wee bit territorial with Paige, isn't he?
A few things for you to consider, Barbara. Suggestions only, of course.
"Good morning." She paused. "Sorry, I heard a door slam. When I came downstairs, I didn't expect to see you." She paused. "No more incidents. - you have 'She paused' twice in this section. How about: "Good morning." Her face turned a slight pink. "Sorry, I heard a door slam, and didn't expect to see you when I came downstairs." She paused. "No more incidents....
Sorry()I woke you up. - lose comma
Then you use 'finished' several times in the next section. I've made some suggestions to get rid of a few:
"I'm almost finished. The backdoor's finished. - I'm almost done. The backdoor's finished."
I'll be finished before the ladies arrive." - I'll be gone before the ladies arrive.
"I have one more thing to check, then I'm finished. _ I have one more thing to check before I go."
Good chapter though. I'm enjoying Cash's jealousy. LOL!
Hugs, Av
Comment Written 22-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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I'm sorry for the late reply. I had to wait until I had time to make the corrections. I always appreciate your hlep with my posts.
