Savannah Love
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Comment from Littlegirl38732
Oh wow. This one is full of suspense. I find myself on the edge of my seat. I would NOT be letting Cash leave if I was her! Lol. I enjoyed it and thank you so much for sharing it. Best wishes
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Oh wow. This one is full of suspense. I find myself on the edge of my seat. I would NOT be letting Cash leave if I was her! Lol. I enjoyed it and thank you so much for sharing it. Best wishes
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Good chapter. You're building the intrigue very nicely. I agree with Cash - there's something not right in that house.
"If she knew there was a lady in need of help and I didn't offer to help, she'd take me to the woodshed." - Help used twice. You could just say,"If she knew there was a lady in need, and I didn't offer to help, she'd...etc. "
Why'd she do that(?)
Look forward to the next, Barbara.
Av
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Good chapter. You're building the intrigue very nicely. I agree with Cash - there's something not right in that house.
"If she knew there was a lady in need of help and I didn't offer to help, she'd take me to the woodshed." - Help used twice. You could just say,"If she knew there was a lady in need, and I didn't offer to help, she'd...etc. "
Why'd she do that(?)
Look forward to the next, Barbara.
Av
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Again, thank you for catching those. I have made the changes and appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
At least Cash admits that something is wrong with that old house, but what? I enjoyed this read and have only one comment, so technical I hesitate to mention it. Your italicized passages are in a smaller font than the normal ones.
Dave
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Barbara,
At least Cash admits that something is wrong with that old house, but what? I enjoyed this read and have only one comment, so technical I hesitate to mention it. Your italicized passages are in a smaller font than the normal ones.
Dave
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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I know and I don't understand why. I used the same size font. I am not sure how to fix it. Thank you for the kind review.
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Barbara,
The problem probably has to do with some miscommunication between your word processor and Fanstory's. Maybe Tom can help you.
Dave
Comment from Shirley McLain
Excellent reading and I'm ready for the next chapter. I'm whining because I don't have more to read. You did a great job as always.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Excellent reading and I'm ready for the next chapter. I'm whining because I don't have more to read. You did a great job as always.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from donaldww
Cash never seems to be able to get away from that woman. LOL Whenever he tries to, Paige calls him back. When he offers to stay, she tells him to go home. And now he's about to re-check the house, having been told to go home!
Sounds like something is about to happen, if nothing ghost related, then some kind of argument!
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Cash never seems to be able to get away from that woman. LOL Whenever he tries to, Paige calls him back. When he offers to stay, she tells him to go home. And now he's about to re-check the house, having been told to go home!
Sounds like something is about to happen, if nothing ghost related, then some kind of argument!
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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I have a feeling Paige is the type of female, men want to get away from but just can't. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Healthyheartpoet
Cash's intuition is telling him something isn't right about the house. Why shouldn't he have a key for it, isn't he going to renovate it? A house that is Chilly would suggest that it is haunted.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Cash's intuition is telling him something isn't right about the house. Why shouldn't he have a key for it, isn't he going to renovate it? A house that is Chilly would suggest that it is haunted.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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I think you are right, but we'll see. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ....
Yes, your chapters are short .... leaving us all in suspense waiting to know what happens next.
This is well written and interestng and there is nothing to suggest changing.
Now, I look forward to your next chapter
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Hullo Barbara ....
Yes, your chapters are short .... leaving us all in suspense waiting to know what happens next.
This is well written and interestng and there is nothing to suggest changing.
Now, I look forward to your next chapter
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I don't post short chapters to frustrate my reviewers, really. I just work all week and I only get to work on my writing on weekends after my housework, lesson plans and bills are paid.
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You are forgiven! Just keep on writing!!
Love - Nanette Mary.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where both cash and paige both see the shadow. paige thinks it's a ghost, cash thinks it is somebody in the house.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where both cash and paige both see the shadow. paige thinks it's a ghost, cash thinks it is somebody in the house.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gungalo
It is nice to have such a friend as Cash. He makes sure she is safe every time. Wish they'd hurry up and become more than friends. LOL. Then she wouldn't have to worry at all.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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It is nice to have such a friend as Cash. He makes sure she is safe every time. Wish they'd hurry up and become more than friends. LOL. Then she wouldn't have to worry at all.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Hey, when and if they do become closer than friends, I may have to rack your brain for different ideas for their closeness. LOL
Thank you for the kind review.
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Okay girl, I promise to help ya. Heheh.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Barb so what I'm reading in this chapter that Cash believes there are no ghost in the house while Paige believes there are .
Ah you indeed, have a very good mystery brewing.
Gert
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Hi Barb so what I'm reading in this chapter that Cash believes there are no ghost in the house while Paige believes there are .
Ah you indeed, have a very good mystery brewing.
Gert
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and your encouraging words.
