Savannah Love
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Comment from unimatrix001
We may have a "real" ghost here, not just mental tricks. Can't wait to see how this plays out.
"One of Savannah's favorite stories is about a young lady, Florence Martus. Her statue sits on River Street and welcomes the sailors." - I don't know who said this line and it confused me. It makes the most sense for Evan the tour guide ot have said it, but it is separated from his dialog in the paragragh before it.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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We may have a "real" ghost here, not just mental tricks. Can't wait to see how this plays out.
"One of Savannah's favorite stories is about a young lady, Florence Martus. Her statue sits on River Street and welcomes the sailors." - I don't know who said this line and it confused me. It makes the most sense for Evan the tour guide ot have said it, but it is separated from his dialog in the paragragh before it.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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I will check that out. Thank you for your eagle eye.
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I will check that out. Thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from forestport12
I'm always impressed with your economy of words, even when you needed to explain some important details about the history and kept it interesting. I liked how the dialogue and mystery hooked me toward the end.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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I'm always impressed with your economy of words, even when you needed to explain some important details about the history and kept it interesting. I liked how the dialogue and mystery hooked me toward the end.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
This is really cool. The part at the last gives me chills but surely it must be something staged for the ghost tour or is it. Your story is getting very interesting. If it's a ghost there isn't much the police can do.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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This is really cool. The part at the last gives me chills but surely it must be something staged for the ghost tour or is it. Your story is getting very interesting. If it's a ghost there isn't much the police can do.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mtnspirit
Hi barbara,
What a good story. I saw no spag and your flow is smooth. You did a good job with your characters and the dialogue is great. Wonder what the police would do about a ghost?
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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Hi barbara,
What a good story. I saw no spag and your flow is smooth. You did a good job with your characters and the dialogue is great. Wonder what the police would do about a ghost?
Comment Written 02-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from doris1022
Well written and interesting spooky story of blackbeard. Savannah is a favorite spot of mine I live in Ga. It captures my interest and I could not stop reading it. which is rare with me. I have to make myself read certain things if it doesn't grab me like an icy cold dead hand. LOL AH HA AH HAHA!
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012
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Well written and interesting spooky story of blackbeard. Savannah is a favorite spot of mine I live in Ga. It captures my interest and I could not stop reading it. which is rare with me. I have to make myself read certain things if it doesn't grab me like an icy cold dead hand. LOL AH HA AH HAHA!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words
Comment from valeries26
Awesome chapter. I really like how you added some background to the story. I also really like the reactions of the characters. The one thing I didn't like about the chapter was the lack of description on Blackbeard and the reason why the character at the end acted the way they did.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012
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Awesome chapter. I really like how you added some background to the story. I also really like the reactions of the characters. The one thing I didn't like about the chapter was the lack of description on Blackbeard and the reason why the character at the end acted the way they did.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012
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I honestly believed his head floating in the window and his bearding being on fire was enough. I will recheck that area. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
What a wonderful description of the ghost tour, barbara. I can't wait to hear about how Paige's house is haunted. It's going to be a fun story. :) nancy
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012
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What a wonderful description of the ghost tour, barbara. I can't wait to hear about how Paige's house is haunted. It's going to be a fun story. :) nancy
Comment Written 02-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good write with imagery and needs no edit .Hi Barbara, I enjoyed your chapter What a place to end I guess I will have to be kept in suspense to the next chappter.Thanks for sharing. Mary
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012
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A good write with imagery and needs no edit .Hi Barbara, I enjoyed your chapter What a place to end I guess I will have to be kept in suspense to the next chappter.Thanks for sharing. Mary
Comment Written 02-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
To me, this is a very special chapter, because of the reality in the dialogues between the characters, where you captured the spookiness extremely well.
I´m really enjoying this wonderful story!
God bless you Barbara.
:)
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012
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To me, this is a very special chapter, because of the reality in the dialogues between the characters, where you captured the spookiness extremely well.
I´m really enjoying this wonderful story!
God bless you Barbara.
:)
Comment Written 02-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I am beginning to think my house in haunted, now. LOL
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
I enjoyed this chapter, especially the bit about Blackbeard's corpse swimming around Maynard's ship while the severed head on board screams. I also saw something that reminded me of Defoe's book, "Moll Flanders." At one point, she claimed to be pregnent in order to keep the law from hanging her. She called it, "pleading my belly."
Dave
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012
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Barbara,
I enjoyed this chapter, especially the bit about Blackbeard's corpse swimming around Maynard's ship while the severed head on board screams. I also saw something that reminded me of Defoe's book, "Moll Flanders." At one point, she claimed to be pregnent in order to keep the law from hanging her. She called it, "pleading my belly."
Dave
Comment Written 01-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012
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Oh my. Thank you for the kind review.
