Savannah Love
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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Cash to the rescue! Hi-Yo Silver!!
That poor kid, he kept his mom and dad busy. Another really good chapter. The photo is an awesome choice, with it's ghostly image.
Well done.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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Cash to the rescue! Hi-Yo Silver!!
That poor kid, he kept his mom and dad busy. Another really good chapter. The photo is an awesome choice, with it's ghostly image.
Well done.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 09-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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LOL You brighten my day.
Comment from Sankey
Whhhooooooo some more eeriness. You are certainly a good story teller. Is any of this stuff fact I mean as lore of the area or something? Good work and no Spags again
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Whhhooooooo some more eeriness. You are certainly a good story teller. Is any of this stuff fact I mean as lore of the area or something? Good work and no Spags again
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from justmarly
Oh my sakes, the boy fainted. I'd of made a dusk trail behind me and never went back. LOL Nice story. Love, fear, and excitement is carried out here in such a educated way. I want to write this good. I know you did a lot of research. Keep writing. MJ
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013
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Oh my sakes, the boy fainted. I'd of made a dusk trail behind me and never went back. LOL Nice story. Love, fear, and excitement is carried out here in such a educated way. I want to write this good. I know you did a lot of research. Keep writing. MJ
Comment Written 12-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the following my story.
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you are welcome. Mj
Comment from Janie King
Yep, I missed rhis one somehow...sorry about that...ghosts...I believe in demons and angels but shosts? We'll see what I think at the end of the book. (smile). Good chapter...God bless.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2012
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Yep, I missed rhis one somehow...sorry about that...ghosts...I believe in demons and angels but shosts? We'll see what I think at the end of the book. (smile). Good chapter...God bless.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I am enjoying your comments.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
This was fun to read, and the whole story is apropos for this time of year. I particularly enjoy the imagery that comes to mind from your words.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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This was fun to read, and the whole story is apropos for this time of year. I particularly enjoy the imagery that comes to mind from your words.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and your encouraging words.
Comment from rushingwater
This was very intriguing and had me right to the end. Although I crave now for more I believe that is a good thing.Considering I am jumping in at 4 you pulled it off really well. I think I would have fainted to. Twice. I did not see any spags, thank you for the wonderful read.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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This was very intriguing and had me right to the end. Although I crave now for more I believe that is a good thing.Considering I am jumping in at 4 you pulled it off really well. I think I would have fainted to. Twice. I did not see any spags, thank you for the wonderful read.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
Any good reader will always know that those errors were mere delibrate juices added intentionally. I love the flow of read of this piece and your dialogue scheme is clean and sound. Good work.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Any good reader will always know that those errors were mere delibrate juices added intentionally. I love the flow of read of this piece and your dialogue scheme is clean and sound. Good work.
ola thomas
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rama devi
Another nice visit in Savanna. Good pacing and dialog with just enough narrative to hold it cohesively Interesting details and what a clever ghost who pretended to be a wife. LOL WHAT AN INTERESTING HOOK IN THE CLOSING. HEAD OF BB'S GHOST WITH FLAMING BEARD....so he should be 'orange beard' instead of black!
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I am not a fan of placing so many speech tags in front of the dialog, but it flows fine, so no need to change unless you wish to.
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As Evan pretended to pull something, his voice changed,(.) "He heard noises.
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One couple(,) who had rented the room(,) tells the story about getting into an argument.
*In the middle of the night(,) the man heard his wife come beside him and felt her kiss.
*To entertain herself(,) the young girl waved a white towel and welcomed ships into the harbor.
*According to legend(,) Blackbeard's corpse swam around Maynard's ship three times while his head shrieked loudly.
*From that day on(,) many have spotted his ghost swimming as it glowed an eerie light.
Good chapter with interesting historical detail.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2012
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Another nice visit in Savanna. Good pacing and dialog with just enough narrative to hold it cohesively Interesting details and what a clever ghost who pretended to be a wife. LOL WHAT AN INTERESTING HOOK IN THE CLOSING. HEAD OF BB'S GHOST WITH FLAMING BEARD....so he should be 'orange beard' instead of black!
:)
I am not a fan of placing so many speech tags in front of the dialog, but it flows fine, so no need to change unless you wish to.
Suggestions
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As Evan pretended to pull something, his voice changed,(.) "He heard noises.
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One couple(,) who had rented the room(,) tells the story about getting into an argument.
*In the middle of the night(,) the man heard his wife come beside him and felt her kiss.
*To entertain herself(,) the young girl waved a white towel and welcomed ships into the harbor.
*According to legend(,) Blackbeard's corpse swam around Maynard's ship three times while his head shrieked loudly.
*From that day on(,) many have spotted his ghost swimming as it glowed an eerie light.
Good chapter with interesting historical detail.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the catches. I have made the changes.
Comment from santapola
Hi there what a good story, I am going to go back and start this one from the beginning, because it drew me so I wanted to know more x
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Hi there what a good story, I am going to go back and start this one from the beginning, because it drew me so I wanted to know more x
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from visionary1234
What a fun write Barbara! I haven't looked in on you for a while! I see you're as good as ever! Sorry I came into the middle of this one, but it's not hard to pick up the threads. Fun, and well done, as always.
Best wishes
Sharyn
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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What a fun write Barbara! I haven't looked in on you for a while! I see you're as good as ever! Sorry I came into the middle of this one, but it's not hard to pick up the threads. Fun, and well done, as always.
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
