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Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ....
I am still very interested in your story about Ghosts.
Many years ago, this might not have been the case but then I learnt about a Ghost who appeared, walking down the staircase in the home of friends of mine. This Ghost appeared always before there was a death in the family.
The only change that you may consider refers to the two-story house. It is usual to say - two-storey .....
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Hullo Barbara ....
I am still very interested in your story about Ghosts.
Many years ago, this might not have been the case but then I learnt about a Ghost who appeared, walking down the staircase in the home of friends of mine. This Ghost appeared always before there was a death in the family.
The only change that you may consider refers to the two-story house. It is usual to say - two-storey .....
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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I think two-storey is the UK spelling. I just checked my dictionary and it's two-story. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from AprilShower
Barbara. This is too short. I wanted read more. It seems there has been a lot of suffering and history in Savannah. Will all this information from the tour tie into the story later? I cannot not even guess how it does, but it is interesting. I like the part about the old hospital. Did they enter it or look into it? There could have been more description here. Did they enter the tunnels?
April
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Barbara. This is too short. I wanted read more. It seems there has been a lot of suffering and history in Savannah. Will all this information from the tour tie into the story later? I cannot not even guess how it does, but it is interesting. I like the part about the old hospital. Did they enter it or look into it? There could have been more description here. Did they enter the tunnels?
April
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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If I have done my job all of thiw will tie into the story as it progresses. The hospital is closed. The tunnels are closed too, but Paige does make it into one later. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
Chapter four Part four is wonderfully written. I love how you give us the history through your tour guide with Paige answering about the famous Johnny Mercer House. I remember seeing the movie Midnight in the Garden of Good and Evil.
Your dialogue is great.
Your detailed writing is excellent.
I look forward to reading your next chapter.
I'd recommend chapter four part four to other reviewers as a "must" read, my friend.
Love ya,
Melissa.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Barbara,
Chapter four Part four is wonderfully written. I love how you give us the history through your tour guide with Paige answering about the famous Johnny Mercer House. I remember seeing the movie Midnight in the Garden of Good and Evil.
Your dialogue is great.
Your detailed writing is excellent.
I look forward to reading your next chapter.
I'd recommend chapter four part four to other reviewers as a "must" read, my friend.
Love ya,
Melissa.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. How are YOU doing?
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Barbara,
I'm doing fine except for an occasional diaherrah from taking too many antibiotics in the hospital. I have therapy comming to help me sit up again and to retrain me how to use a sliding board to get from my bed into my electric wheelchair. How are your doing? Has the cancer gone totally away? Be careful of Lymphadema in the arms.
Love ya...Melissa.
Comment from Gungalo
Ahhh Paige is finding this tour to be a bit of a strain is she? Well I imagine having Cash their helps a lot. Nice to have a strong man around especially when there's a strong wind for haunting.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Ahhh Paige is finding this tour to be a bit of a strain is she? Well I imagine having Cash their helps a lot. Nice to have a strong man around especially when there's a strong wind for haunting.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your kind review. Paige will find many benefits of having Cash around. LOL
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Oh I'm sure!!! LOL.
Comment from Nanashirley
There is a great build up of suspense in this chapter. I like the way you have fed us information I the tour. I will wait for more.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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There is a great build up of suspense in this chapter. I like the way you have fed us information I the tour. I will wait for more.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Barbara, the story continues at an interesting and engaging pace. The growing interaction between Paige and Cash provides a degree of suspense as does the ghost tour and tales. I enjoyed reading this and look forward to more. Curtis
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Barbara, the story continues at an interesting and engaging pace. The growing interaction between Paige and Cash provides a degree of suspense as does the ghost tour and tales. I enjoyed reading this and look forward to more. Curtis
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from EMB
Hmm. It seem the tour is filled with "information dumping," making this read more like historical fiction, despite the subtle reactions a character has to the information that's been dumped. I suppose there's a reason we need so much information, but I can't see romance readers appreciating such an in-depth chapter on history. This reads like a documentary, provided through characters. Nothing really happens here. I believe I read a similar chapter, so this type of chapter isn't a one-time occurrence.
Something else I'm wondering about:
I can feel the atrocities that happened to humans here. ("Humans"? Is Paige an alien or something? I'm not clued in to what your characters really are. Did she mean to say "people" or "human beings" like the rest of us usually say?)
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Hmm. It seem the tour is filled with "information dumping," making this read more like historical fiction, despite the subtle reactions a character has to the information that's been dumped. I suppose there's a reason we need so much information, but I can't see romance readers appreciating such an in-depth chapter on history. This reads like a documentary, provided through characters. Nothing really happens here. I believe I read a similar chapter, so this type of chapter isn't a one-time occurrence.
Something else I'm wondering about:
I can feel the atrocities that happened to humans here. ("Humans"? Is Paige an alien or something? I'm not clued in to what your characters really are. Did she mean to say "people" or "human beings" like the rest of us usually say?)
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Well, my romance fans are enjoying this or they are faking it in their reviews. I will take another look at the use of the word 'humans.' There is a reason, I am spending so much time on this ghost tour. It will start to come together in a few more posts. Thank you for your review.
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I figured as much, but I had to ask in the interest of helping a fellow FS family member. :)
My remarks on romance readers were based on my studies of genres and the expectations of each. The things I said about what romance readers are looking for was not my opinion; it's what the industry says they're looking for. (You can easily check these findings by searching the Net, using words like "What romance readers want" or "How to write for the romance market."
Regards,
Ed
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I own numerous books on writing romance novels and belong to RWA. I have done my research. Thank you for your input.
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Certainly.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
I'm beginning to think Savannah, Georgia, is a place to avoid at all costs! Far tp many unrestful souls wandering about it. I found (unusually for your writing!) a couple of small corrections for you.
Savannah Georgia and is reportedly one to the most haunted placed in this - I think it should be - Savannah, Georgia, and is reportedly one to the most haunted places in this
Patrick
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Hi Barbara,
I'm beginning to think Savannah, Georgia, is a place to avoid at all costs! Far tp many unrestful souls wandering about it. I found (unusually for your writing!) a couple of small corrections for you.
Savannah Georgia and is reportedly one to the most haunted placed in this - I think it should be - Savannah, Georgia, and is reportedly one to the most haunted places in this
Patrick
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thank you for catching that. I have fixed it. No matter how many times I edit I still miss things.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
You have written another most interesting chapter. It is intriguing and compelling and I know I read every word. The talk of ghosts is creepy and you did a great job of making them that way. Well done.....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Hi Barbara,
You have written another most interesting chapter. It is intriguing and compelling and I know I read every word. The talk of ghosts is creepy and you did a great job of making them that way. Well done.....blessings, chey
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from elgone
Another interesting addition to the story. Paige has some sensitivity to the spirits in the haunted places of the city. This is why she can sense the ghost in her house.
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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Another interesting addition to the story. Paige has some sensitivity to the spirits in the haunted places of the city. This is why she can sense the ghost in her house.
"Today guest(s) have
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Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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I hope you're right. Cash is still a skeptic. Thank you for the kind review.
