Savannah Love
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Comment from Shirley McLain
Those places would make my skin crawl also. Your writing very defiantly draws attention to the scary side of Savannah. Great job.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Those places would make my skin crawl also. Your writing very defiantly draws attention to the scary side of Savannah. Great job.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Scribbler67
I do like it when a chapter end leaving me impatiently wondering 'What comes next?'
That is just what your latest chapter has done. As always your natural dialogue and atmospheric writing holds the reader all the way through.
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Great stuff, maintaining your usual high standard.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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I do like it when a chapter end leaving me impatiently wondering 'What comes next?'
That is just what your latest chapter has done. As always your natural dialogue and atmospheric writing holds the reader all the way through.
Quote mark missing after '...song writer.
Great stuff, maintaining your usual high standard.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and your eagle eye.
Comment from mtnspirit
Hi barbara,
As I am familiar with Savannah's history I think your doing a great job with the tour scenes. I like the slow build up with this couples relationship. Your story is believable, has a good flow and is well written. I can't wait to read more.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Hi barbara,
As I am familiar with Savannah's history I think your doing a great job with the tour scenes. I like the slow build up with this couples relationship. Your story is believable, has a good flow and is well written. I can't wait to read more.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from megclare
Lots of interesting history here, yet delivered in a natural and interesting way so that it doesn't seem dry or tedious. The two main characters are obviously not at the forefront of these events but there is still a sense of their relationship and of their personalities. I enjoyed this chapter and will look for more.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Lots of interesting history here, yet delivered in a natural and interesting way so that it doesn't seem dry or tedious. The two main characters are obviously not at the forefront of these events but there is still a sense of their relationship and of their personalities. I enjoyed this chapter and will look for more.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rama devi
Sorry I've missed so many chapters but it was easy to jump back in. Good pacing, fine dialog and interesting, well researched information about Savannah (which I have visited). Can't comment on character and plot development at this point, but the writing is fine and fluid. No superfluous words, adverbs or speech tags. tight and clean.
Just few nits and suggestions...
"You are so right, my dear."
Suggest using contraction
"You're so right, my dear."
Constructed in 1851, the Marshall House is the oldest hotel in Savannah and is reportedly one to the most haunted places in this city
one to - shouldn't it be one of?
Constructed in 1851, the Marshall House is the oldest hotel in Savannah and is reportedly one of the most haunted places in this city
"Today(,) guests have reported seeing a young man holding his own severed arm and searching for someone to reattach it.
Good work.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2012
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Sorry I've missed so many chapters but it was easy to jump back in. Good pacing, fine dialog and interesting, well researched information about Savannah (which I have visited). Can't comment on character and plot development at this point, but the writing is fine and fluid. No superfluous words, adverbs or speech tags. tight and clean.
Just few nits and suggestions...
"You are so right, my dear."
Suggest using contraction
"You're so right, my dear."
Constructed in 1851, the Marshall House is the oldest hotel in Savannah and is reportedly one to the most haunted places in this city
one to - shouldn't it be one of?
Constructed in 1851, the Marshall House is the oldest hotel in Savannah and is reportedly one of the most haunted places in this city
"Today(,) guests have reported seeing a young man holding his own severed arm and searching for someone to reattach it.
Good work.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2012
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Sorry for the lateness of my reply. I wanted to have time to make the corrections before I replied. Thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from Enrique28
This is a well written chapter that goes a long way to capture the ghostly atmosphere of the places described, and it certainly succeeds.You present vivid images with narrative,and short, but effective use of dialogue. Good show!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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This is a well written chapter that goes a long way to capture the ghostly atmosphere of the places described, and it certainly succeeds.You present vivid images with narrative,and short, but effective use of dialogue. Good show!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from unimatrix001
This part of the story may be a bit slow, but I feel it is necessary for the overall storyline. Well written. I couldn't find any gremlins.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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This part of the story may be a bit slow, but I feel it is necessary for the overall storyline. Well written. I couldn't find any gremlins.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Healthyheartpoet
Lots of disease and suffering, in this chapter as death took many forms. Yellow fever epidemic causes an agonizing death, no doubt lots of moaning and screaming as the grim reaper made his rounds. Throw in some ghost stories into the mix and it gets even more interesting.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Lots of disease and suffering, in this chapter as death took many forms. Yellow fever epidemic causes an agonizing death, no doubt lots of moaning and screaming as the grim reaper made his rounds. Throw in some ghost stories into the mix and it gets even more interesting.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Kirrily Morris
I want to read more. Thank you for this chapter. It was intriguing, and a little scary. I wish you well with the rest of the book.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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I want to read more. Thank you for this chapter. It was intriguing, and a little scary. I wish you well with the rest of the book.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from fictionwriter
Interesting stuff. I'm sure I'd get the creeps too if I were taking the tour. Is that a real tour they give in Savannah? Great job.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Interesting stuff. I'm sure I'd get the creeps too if I were taking the tour. Is that a real tour they give in Savannah? Great job.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
