Savannah Love
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Comment from Mishelly
Wow, this is getting spooky. I loved reading this with all the history you've poured into it. Your love of Savannah comes across clearly. I also get the feeling Cash is going to become a believer of ghosts very soon. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Wow, this is getting spooky. I loved reading this with all the history you've poured into it. Your love of Savannah comes across clearly. I also get the feeling Cash is going to become a believer of ghosts very soon. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
Your latest chapter is extremely well written.
I'm impressed how your managed to insert history about the ghosts with the tour guide that's showing Cash, Paige and a group of mainly guys around Savannah.
Your descriptive writing and dialogue are excellent.
I see you've done your research.
I'd recommend your teriffic chapter to other reviewers, my talented friend.
Love ya,
Melissa.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Barbara,
Your latest chapter is extremely well written.
I'm impressed how your managed to insert history about the ghosts with the tour guide that's showing Cash, Paige and a group of mainly guys around Savannah.
Your descriptive writing and dialogue are excellent.
I see you've done your research.
I'd recommend your teriffic chapter to other reviewers, my talented friend.
Love ya,
Melissa.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from unimatrix001
The ghost tour is very good. Don't worry about spending too much time on it, let the story travel where it will. I just spent three chapters on a scene that was never meant to be in my book at all, but it's really fits well.
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The ghost tour is very good. Don't worry about spending too much time on it, let the story travel where it will. I just spent three chapters on a scene that was never meant to be in my book at all, but it's really fits well.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
Hi Barbara,
I have to be honest and say that, for myself, two more posts about the ghost tour would be too much. Maybe if they were condensed, telling only the highlights, into one post. Just my opinion, of course.
"See(,) there are tunnels."
"A third ghost walks the house(,) or now restaurant(,) and seems to be a descendent of James Habersham.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Hi Barbara,
I have to be honest and say that, for myself, two more posts about the ghost tour would be too much. Maybe if they were condensed, telling only the highlights, into one post. Just my opinion, of course.
"See(,) there are tunnels."
"A third ghost walks the house(,) or now restaurant(,) and seems to be a descendent of James Habersham.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a very well written story I like the fact it was cash that saw the ghost nice twist at the end thank you for sharing well done
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This is a very well written story I like the fact it was cash that saw the ghost nice twist at the end thank you for sharing well done
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gungalo
I don't think you are spending too much time one it girl. Many of us wish to know about the ghosts and why they are haunting everyone back then. Keep going please.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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I don't think you are spending too much time one it girl. Many of us wish to know about the ghosts and why they are haunting everyone back then. Keep going please.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Comment from vfbryant
I thought this chapter was great. Very interesting and engaging when you mix the history with the interaction between Paige and Cash. Here's my thought (since you asked :). One reason I enjoyed it was because I actually went on one of the ghost tours in Charleston and I hear a lot of similar stories. Others , however, especially people uninterested in names and history, might not have as much appreciation for it. The incident with Cash was a real attention grabber, though! My point is, that I think this chapter and one more like it would be fine, but two more would only work if there were some other incidents mixed in with the history,e.g. maybe one of the teenage girls gets bored and whiny and wants to quit, so there's a minor confrontation between her and her mother and other girl who are enjoying it. If you kept mixing real action and conversation with the history, I think you could go for two more chapters, because the tour itself wouldn't be the focus. It would just be an interesting context for other incidents where we could hear Paige and Cash react and get to know them better. What do you think? See, that's what you get for asking my opinion! :) Valerie
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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I thought this chapter was great. Very interesting and engaging when you mix the history with the interaction between Paige and Cash. Here's my thought (since you asked :). One reason I enjoyed it was because I actually went on one of the ghost tours in Charleston and I hear a lot of similar stories. Others , however, especially people uninterested in names and history, might not have as much appreciation for it. The incident with Cash was a real attention grabber, though! My point is, that I think this chapter and one more like it would be fine, but two more would only work if there were some other incidents mixed in with the history,e.g. maybe one of the teenage girls gets bored and whiny and wants to quit, so there's a minor confrontation between her and her mother and other girl who are enjoying it. If you kept mixing real action and conversation with the history, I think you could go for two more chapters, because the tour itself wouldn't be the focus. It would just be an interesting context for other incidents where we could hear Paige and Cash react and get to know them better. What do you think? See, that's what you get for asking my opinion! :) Valerie
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. Thank you for your insight.
Comment from Taffspride
Your story gave me such goose bumps. I love the attention to detail in your writing.
The chapter reads so smoothly, keeping the readers interest with your good descriptive prose.
I like the thought of more about the ghost tour, but must be honest, other readers may not agree with me. It may become tedious.
Ddiolch for sharing.
Iechyd da
Taffspride
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Your story gave me such goose bumps. I love the attention to detail in your writing.
The chapter reads so smoothly, keeping the readers interest with your good descriptive prose.
I like the thought of more about the ghost tour, but must be honest, other readers may not agree with me. It may become tedious.
Ddiolch for sharing.
Iechyd da
Taffspride
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job wriiting this chapter where paige learns the ghostly history of savannah, i remember the pink house and the moving of the headstones, but i forgot that savannah was the capital for a while and i thought it was the Juliette Low House.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job wriiting this chapter where paige learns the ghostly history of savannah, i remember the pink house and the moving of the headstones, but i forgot that savannah was the capital for a while and i thought it was the Juliette Low House.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
I like the character of the tour guide. You must have had to do a lot of research to have him recite all that history. The ghost tour is a great way to work history into your story without it becoming boring. I didn't find any nits so you've done a lot of work on this. I enjoyed it and I will look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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I like the character of the tour guide. You must have had to do a lot of research to have him recite all that history. The ghost tour is a great way to work history into your story without it becoming boring. I didn't find any nits so you've done a lot of work on this. I enjoyed it and I will look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
