Savannah Love
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Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
Your latest chapter is superbly written, but short.
The picture you provided is wicked cool.
Paige admitted to Cash she didn't cook the lasagna.
I dislike ranch dressing I like italian, vinagerett, catalina or blue cheese salad dressing. I like homemade croutons made with crusty bread.
When Paige and Cash arrived at the historical haunted house she asked a ton of questions of a man dressed like a Confedrate Soldier. Afterwards she tells Cash she has a ghost.
I look forward to reading more in the future.
I'd recommend your latest chapter to other reviewers as a "must" read!
Love,
Melissa.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Barbara,
Your latest chapter is superbly written, but short.
The picture you provided is wicked cool.
Paige admitted to Cash she didn't cook the lasagna.
I dislike ranch dressing I like italian, vinagerett, catalina or blue cheese salad dressing. I like homemade croutons made with crusty bread.
When Paige and Cash arrived at the historical haunted house she asked a ton of questions of a man dressed like a Confedrate Soldier. Afterwards she tells Cash she has a ghost.
I look forward to reading more in the future.
I'd recommend your latest chapter to other reviewers as a "must" read!
Love,
Melissa.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from irishauthorme
Hi Barb, I went back and read from the first chapter in order to do you justice in a review. I really like the realism you have brought into your story by including some accurate Civil War history. You have obviously done your research before writing this story.
Realistic characters, a logical setting, and very lively dialogue. The light-hearted exchanges between Paige and Cash written exactly as they would have been spoken, and the way you expressed their thoughts added interest.
The suspense of the haunted house added the needed tension, and the prospect of hidden tunnels made me want to read the next chapter.
Very good work!
irish
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Hi Barb, I went back and read from the first chapter in order to do you justice in a review. I really like the realism you have brought into your story by including some accurate Civil War history. You have obviously done your research before writing this story.
Realistic characters, a logical setting, and very lively dialogue. The light-hearted exchanges between Paige and Cash written exactly as they would have been spoken, and the way you expressed their thoughts added interest.
The suspense of the haunted house added the needed tension, and the prospect of hidden tunnels made me want to read the next chapter.
Very good work!
irish
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and your encouraging words.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
Page seems more convinced she has a ghost, after talking to the tour guide. Apparently what he described has happened to Page but it is rather scary. A good chapter but I want more soon! Blessings, chey
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Hi Barbara,
Page seems more convinced she has a ghost, after talking to the tour guide. Apparently what he described has happened to Page but it is rather scary. A good chapter but I want more soon! Blessings, chey
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from kashmayank
this is probably the second chapter I am reading it and i liked it ,the length of the story was perfect and that made it enjoyable
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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this is probably the second chapter I am reading it and i liked it ,the length of the story was perfect and that made it enjoyable
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Meta~Mark
Barbara I must admit I am a sucker to southern charm and having visited Savannah several times and the weeping willows and mystique of ghostly proportions I do love this story. The dialogue is spot on.
EXCELLENT !!!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Barbara I must admit I am a sucker to southern charm and having visited Savannah several times and the weeping willows and mystique of ghostly proportions I do love this story. The dialogue is spot on.
EXCELLENT !!!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Barb,
I see your story is slowly getting to the existence of ghost in the house
Now we just have to wait for a ghost to make its first move
By the way I like how you got us ready for some weird happenings from your description when there is a ghost lurking around.
Gert
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Hi Barb,
I see your story is slowly getting to the existence of ghost in the house
Now we just have to wait for a ghost to make its first move
By the way I like how you got us ready for some weird happenings from your description when there is a ghost lurking around.
Gert
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
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You are welcome
Gert
Comment from EMB
Well, I must say, you've created some enjoyable character in Paige and Cash. (I think it's hilarious that "Cash" isn't the one why came from money.)
Some things I found:
The ghost tour begins at 9:00, right?("Nine, right?" Dialogue usually uses words for everything, not numbers.)
About fifteen minutes before nine o'clock, Paige...(Narrators can use "At 8:43 p.m." no problem.)
Do you hear sounds for apparent no reason? ("for no apparent reason")
Keeping a journal for about a month...(I think you mean "keep.")
She grinned. "I'm happy. (You're missing the closing quotation marks.)
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Well, I must say, you've created some enjoyable character in Paige and Cash. (I think it's hilarious that "Cash" isn't the one why came from money.)
Some things I found:
The ghost tour begins at 9:00, right?("Nine, right?" Dialogue usually uses words for everything, not numbers.)
About fifteen minutes before nine o'clock, Paige...(Narrators can use "At 8:43 p.m." no problem.)
Do you hear sounds for apparent no reason? ("for no apparent reason")
Keeping a journal for about a month...(I think you mean "keep.")
She grinned. "I'm happy. (You're missing the closing quotation marks.)
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your eagle eye. I appreciate the catches.
Comment from elgone
this is a good continuation to the story. I felt it ended too soon - a good sign. I like the way Cash found out Paige doesn't know how to cook. No surprise, though.
Paige nodded. "I think I have a ghost. I'm not sure if I'm happy or not." She grinned. "I'm happy.(") - comment. I think I'd eliminate the last part. 'I'm happy' sort of contradicts what she said before. I think you're saying she's happy to have her question answered but not about having a ghost. If that's the case, change the happy at the end to 'content'.
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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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this is a good continuation to the story. I felt it ended too soon - a good sign. I like the way Cash found out Paige doesn't know how to cook. No surprise, though.
Paige nodded. "I think I have a ghost. I'm not sure if I'm happy or not." She grinned. "I'm happy.(") - comment. I think I'd eliminate the last part. 'I'm happy' sort of contradicts what she said before. I think you're saying she's happy to have her question answered but not about having a ghost. If that's the case, change the happy at the end to 'content'.
E
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I see what you're saying. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
I like the dinner conversation - and the way you work in back story about her privileged childhood
I like the checklist of how to verify the presence of a ghost :-)
Excellent dialogue throughout :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I like the dinner conversation - and the way you work in back story about her privileged childhood
I like the checklist of how to verify the presence of a ghost :-)
Excellent dialogue throughout :-) Brooke
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from Gungalo
Ahhh she knows now she has a ghost and will journal for a few days, then go back. It seems so funny to have to ask someone else about your own house.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Ahhh she knows now she has a ghost and will journal for a few days, then go back. It seems so funny to have to ask someone else about your own house.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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It does, but remember she just inherited it and has only lived there for 5 days. Thank you for the kind review.
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Oh that's right. I keep forgetting that. LOL.
