Savannah Love
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Comment from donaldww
I enjoyed the start of this chapter. Now Paige will be documenting her days in order to see if there is a ghost in the house. That's a good idea. The tour is just starting.
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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I enjoyed the start of this chapter. Now Paige will be documenting her days in order to see if there is a ghost in the house. That's a good idea. The tour is just starting.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tallahasseesmiles
Oh I enjoyed that, I love Savannah have been on many a carriage ride there and many St. Patricks Day celebrations. Your story was very interesting to me. The mystery of the your place being haunted by a ghost was really good and I feel a real good story. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Oh I enjoyed that, I love Savannah have been on many a carriage ride there and many St. Patricks Day celebrations. Your story was very interesting to me. The mystery of the your place being haunted by a ghost was really good and I feel a real good story. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sasha
This is an excellently descriptive chapter with superb dialogue. I like how Cash and Paige's relationship is moving along quite nicely. I enjoyed this chapter and look forward to reading the next one.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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This is an excellently descriptive chapter with superb dialogue. I like how Cash and Paige's relationship is moving along quite nicely. I enjoyed this chapter and look forward to reading the next one.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Scribbler67
This fired my interest immediately. Now I want to read more. I love ghost stories. Dialogue is believable, very natural, characters have instant appeal. The insights into Paige's history add sweet meat to the bones. Can't fault it.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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This fired my interest immediately. Now I want to read more. I love ghost stories. Dialogue is believable, very natural, characters have instant appeal. The insights into Paige's history add sweet meat to the bones. Can't fault it.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Selestia
The story continues to be interesting. The reader keeps wanting to know if the ghosts are real or not. I like the way Paige honestly tells Cash she doesn't know how to cook. And I like the way their relationship is progressing.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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The story continues to be interesting. The reader keeps wanting to know if the ghosts are real or not. I like the way Paige honestly tells Cash she doesn't know how to cook. And I like the way their relationship is progressing.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sloegin
A really well written chapter. You kept it moving and there was no extra verbiage.
You built suspense with the speech from the Confederate soldier.
I am impressed with the way your dialogue flows with no sign of forcing any of it.
The only change I would recommend is in your last line I'd take out, "Keep your journal for a few days." This idea was recommended by the soldier a couple of lines above.
sloegin
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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A really well written chapter. You kept it moving and there was no extra verbiage.
You built suspense with the speech from the Confederate soldier.
I am impressed with the way your dialogue flows with no sign of forcing any of it.
The only change I would recommend is in your last line I'd take out, "Keep your journal for a few days." This idea was recommended by the soldier a couple of lines above.
sloegin
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I will take another look at that area.
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good write with a well descriptive story. HI I enjoyed reading your story It has imagery and flows. I see no need for improvement. Thanks for sharing with me. Mary
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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A good write with a well descriptive story. HI I enjoyed reading your story It has imagery and flows. I see no need for improvement. Thanks for sharing with me. Mary
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Well, as usual just GREAT! Barbara, I am already out of sixes again! I am so sorry! I have to remember next Sunday! I follow a lot of good writers (it's the best way to improve yourself, plus it's so much more enjoyable.) I can promise I will NOT forget next Sunday - if you can't post by the following Sat, though, do let me know, okay? I should have kept one - I just knew you would be posting! This chapter is so terrific - ghosts are 'heating up'. (LOL)
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Well, as usual just GREAT! Barbara, I am already out of sixes again! I am so sorry! I have to remember next Sunday! I follow a lot of good writers (it's the best way to improve yourself, plus it's so much more enjoyable.) I can promise I will NOT forget next Sunday - if you can't post by the following Sat, though, do let me know, okay? I should have kept one - I just knew you would be posting! This chapter is so terrific - ghosts are 'heating up'. (LOL)
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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I see no reason, as of right now that I won't be posting next Sunday. Of course there could always be a computer breakdown or something. Thank you for the kind review.
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My extreme pleasure! Sorry, I took what you said about a week ago to mean that when you returned to school you wouldn't be able to be here very much.
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I catch up on my reviews on the weekends, so I miss days of reviewing. I have a sweetheart of an angel who actually helps me post or I wouldn't be able to promote my work very much during the school year.
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Oh, that's fortunate! Well I have work I can't post yet becausse the editor messed it up AGAIN. (third night in a row) I've been waiting for a response from support for over 8 hrs. now - I wonder if anyone knows if they are clossed on labor day , or WHAT.
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Who knows!!! What is the editor doing?
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3 nights in a row it has formatted my poem as a short story, (and to add insult to injury, I was double-charged for the certificate I bought for the short-short I WAS able to post!) Sheeesh!
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Holy Cow!!! This is really a mess.
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Yep. But it's helping to gripe, LOL.
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Well, I have been up all night, so I am going to try to get a few hours sleep I guess. Thank you for listening my friend! I hope I don't miss the deadline. :(
Comment from Chris Tee
Wow! She will be haunted by this ghost if she is not careful enough. Barbara this story is becoming really interesting. Well done with another excellent write here ma'am.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Wow! She will be haunted by this ghost if she is not careful enough. Barbara this story is becoming really interesting. Well done with another excellent write here ma'am.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Barbara, I'm curious with the ghost tour. I think Paige is not an ordinary ghost fearing woman to be able to check into the matter. Looking forward for more.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Hi, Barbara, I'm curious with the ghost tour. I think Paige is not an ordinary ghost fearing woman to be able to check into the matter. Looking forward for more.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Paige is a little ditzy. I am not sure that's coming across. Thank you for the kind review.
