Savannah Love
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Comment from unimatrix001
I think the story in unfolding well. Paige and Cash are starting to act like a real couple with a solid foundation. It's a nice contrast to the many stories of unrealistic heated romance.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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I think the story in unfolding well. Paige and Cash are starting to act like a real couple with a solid foundation. It's a nice contrast to the many stories of unrealistic heated romance.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cornelius2000
As a midwestern "Yankee" who found his true love in South Carolina I can relate to the relationship in your story. Things really ARE different in diverse parts of the country.
So I've enjoyed this chapter. I find your story well written and your dialogue believable. Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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As a midwestern "Yankee" who found his true love in South Carolina I can relate to the relationship in your story. Things really ARE different in diverse parts of the country.
So I've enjoyed this chapter. I find your story well written and your dialogue believable. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your insight. I am a midwestern 'Yankee' too, IL. I have lived most of my husband's military career in the South. I have some funny stories that have happened. I loved our time in SC.
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I worked in Springfield and Chicago, Illinois, and there's a short story in my portfolio enttitled "Norwood," which contrasts the cultures of Illinois and Georgia. I'd be interested in your reaction to it. Dave
Comment from MelReyn
This was well written. Paige was very likeable, though I cannot form a mental picture of what she looks like. (My own fault for not starting at the beginning.) I must ask, when is this taking place?
I really enjoyed this. You did a great job of showing and not just telling.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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This was well written. Paige was very likeable, though I cannot form a mental picture of what she looks like. (My own fault for not starting at the beginning.) I must ask, when is this taking place?
I really enjoyed this. You did a great job of showing and not just telling.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. The time period in 2012
Comment from vfbryant
I'm keeping up now with your chapters and enjoying both the story line and the continuing relationship between Paige and Cash. Anxious to see if she keeps a journal and what she puts in it.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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I'm keeping up now with your chapters and enjoying both the story line and the continuing relationship between Paige and Cash. Anxious to see if she keeps a journal and what she puts in it.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Crystal Carey
Good story, I am sure it is following a larger book? I didn't see any grammatical errors, I am wondering why you named the guy Cash though. I am not sure that would be my first choice, but then this isn't my story so I guess I just want to know what your inspiration was.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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Good story, I am sure it is following a larger book? I didn't see any grammatical errors, I am wondering why you named the guy Cash though. I am not sure that would be my first choice, but then this isn't my story so I guess I just want to know what your inspiration was.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Fiction! The read flowed and connected well.
The artwork was perfect and enhanced the read. In a
metaphysics class that I was part of one of the nurses actually said there was a ghost in a house she bought for speculation. I don't believe in ghost but her story was so very real. Thank you for an excellent read....harmony13
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2012
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Excellent Fiction! The read flowed and connected well.
The artwork was perfect and enhanced the read. In a
metaphysics class that I was part of one of the nurses actually said there was a ghost in a house she bought for speculation. I don't believe in ghost but her story was so very real. Thank you for an excellent read....harmony13
Comment Written 05-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and thoughts.
Comment from Adri7enne
Oh, I've only just started and you're making me hungry. Lasagna and warm bread. Yumm!
Oh, yeah. So, she must be pretty sure all that wierd stuff means she does have a ghost. I can understand her not being sure how she feels about it. Good chapter, barb. Well paced.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2012
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Oh, I've only just started and you're making me hungry. Lasagna and warm bread. Yumm!
Oh, yeah. So, she must be pretty sure all that wierd stuff means she does have a ghost. I can understand her not being sure how she feels about it. Good chapter, barb. Well paced.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
A good lead in to the ghost tour here, it brings the anticipation of Paige ad her desire to learn more about her house out well.
I'm still thinking there is another player somewhere in the background with less than honourable intentions and something in the house they are using ...
Patrick
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2012
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Hi Barbara,
A good lead in to the ghost tour here, it brings the anticipation of Paige ad her desire to learn more about her house out well.
I'm still thinking there is another player somewhere in the background with less than honourable intentions and something in the house they are using ...
Patrick
Comment Written 05-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dustybones
Hello, I am just learning to write stories. I see you are a ranked novelist. I read this, liked the flow, dialogue tags.
I like this one-"Paige, wait." Cash followed. I am not sure if that is a tag or not, Is as a novice, would not have thought of it. Cya
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2012
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Hello, I am just learning to write stories. I see you are a ranked novelist. I read this, liked the flow, dialogue tags.
I like this one-"Paige, wait." Cash followed. I am not sure if that is a tag or not, Is as a novice, would not have thought of it. Cya
Comment Written 05-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2012
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It is an action tag and I often use them instead of he said, she said. Thank you for the kind review.
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Oh, thanks, it has a name, action. Will try to use them soon in the book chapters I am doing.
Comment from GroundedAngel
Very enjoyable read. It moves along at a nice pace. I like the way you included North tea and South tea. I'm guessing the South tea is very sweet. ( my favorite ) Also I like the possibility of the house being inhabited by ghosts, very intriguing. I'm anxious to continue reading !
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2012
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Very enjoyable read. It moves along at a nice pace. I like the way you included North tea and South tea. I'm guessing the South tea is very sweet. ( my favorite ) Also I like the possibility of the house being inhabited by ghosts, very intriguing. I'm anxious to continue reading !
Comment Written 05-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
