Savannah Love
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Comment from Penworthy
This is the second "chapter" of your book I've read, and the
characters are beginning to take life and have some affinity for each other. Things are coming together for me, despite the fact I've read so little of your work.
Nice banter between Paige and Cash is displayed on this page (no pun intended).
Is this a ghost story or something supernatural?
A few rough corners could use your work:
goin' to the river walk and take pictures.--AND take pictures? "TO" maybe, seems like the wording is a bit out of sync.
Paige scrunched her eyes brows-- EYE brows
and Cash led Paige toward this pickup.-- His pickup
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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This is the second "chapter" of your book I've read, and the
characters are beginning to take life and have some affinity for each other. Things are coming together for me, despite the fact I've read so little of your work.
Nice banter between Paige and Cash is displayed on this page (no pun intended).
Is this a ghost story or something supernatural?
A few rough corners could use your work:
goin' to the river walk and take pictures.--AND take pictures? "TO" maybe, seems like the wording is a bit out of sync.
Paige scrunched her eyes brows-- EYE brows
and Cash led Paige toward this pickup.-- His pickup
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review anc the catches. I will fix them, immediately.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Another well penned post for this story. Spooky too:D
No issues on my end, this flowed well, had great imagery and still has the reader hooked in the "no knowing"stage of the plot.
Excellent work. School starts up and yes I am wondering where summer went as well. Alastair he's going into grade 8 and Ainsley is grade 10, Courtney prepping for collage...time flies by too quickly:D
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Another well penned post for this story. Spooky too:D
No issues on my end, this flowed well, had great imagery and still has the reader hooked in the "no knowing"stage of the plot.
Excellent work. School starts up and yes I am wondering where summer went as well. Alastair he's going into grade 8 and Ainsley is grade 10, Courtney prepping for collage...time flies by too quickly:D
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
Good continuing chapter, Barbara.
Paige scrunched her eyes brows (eyebrows) together and shook a fist in their direction.
Besides(,) I hear you're a legend(.)"
Nala glanced at Paige and raised her eye brows (eyebrows).
Nala (Nala's) eyes (look, or glance, but not her eyes) darted between Paige and Cash.
"Come on(,) Billy Joe, there must be a loose wire."
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Good continuing chapter, Barbara.
Paige scrunched her eyes brows (eyebrows) together and shook a fist in their direction.
Besides(,) I hear you're a legend(.)"
Nala glanced at Paige and raised her eye brows (eyebrows).
Nala (Nala's) eyes (look, or glance, but not her eyes) darted between Paige and Cash.
"Come on(,) Billy Joe, there must be a loose wire."
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and the catches. I will fix them.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
I'm guessing the wiring in Paige's house is just fine. But her sanity is shortly going to be tested. Well written, Barbara. :) nancy
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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I'm guessing the wiring in Paige's house is just fine. But her sanity is shortly going to be tested. Well written, Barbara. :) nancy
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
Your latest chapter is exceptionally written and character driven.
It wasn't bright of Paige to go to the Riverwalk alone.
I liked how Cash rescued her from group of boys harassing her.
We learned Cash was a football star in high school from the "hoodlums."
I'd recommend your latest chapter to other reviewers as a "must" read.
How are you doing? I hope school is doing fine.
Love,
Melissa.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Barbara,
Your latest chapter is exceptionally written and character driven.
It wasn't bright of Paige to go to the Riverwalk alone.
I liked how Cash rescued her from group of boys harassing her.
We learned Cash was a football star in high school from the "hoodlums."
I'd recommend your latest chapter to other reviewers as a "must" read.
How are you doing? I hope school is doing fine.
Love,
Melissa.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouraging words.
Comment from judiverse
Ah, six star territory again. This is so engaging. There is a contradiction in Paige's logic if she's willing to go out alone in the evening but worried about a light she says she didn't leave on. It's neat that the boys harassing Paige have heard of Cash, the football hero, so that adds something new to Cash's protector credentials. The part where Paige and Cash collide when he's checking out the light adds a nice humorous touch. At the end of this we see Paige hand Billy Joe a note for his wife. Paige hasn't forgotten about Cash's remarks about Billy and his wife's financial circumstances. Very interesting and engaging throughout. judi
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Ah, six star territory again. This is so engaging. There is a contradiction in Paige's logic if she's willing to go out alone in the evening but worried about a light she says she didn't leave on. It's neat that the boys harassing Paige have heard of Cash, the football hero, so that adds something new to Cash's protector credentials. The part where Paige and Cash collide when he's checking out the light adds a nice humorous touch. At the end of this we see Paige hand Billy Joe a note for his wife. Paige hasn't forgotten about Cash's remarks about Billy and his wife's financial circumstances. Very interesting and engaging throughout. judi
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and your encouraging words.
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You're so welcome. judi
Comment from donaldww
Excellent writing. I get through this installment with ease.
No spags that I could find: "I couldn't find any problem." :)
I guess up North they don't teach common sense. [Is that what they really think about northerners? LOL]
Cheers!
DW
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Excellent writing. I get through this installment with ease.
No spags that I could find: "I couldn't find any problem." :)
I guess up North they don't teach common sense. [Is that what they really think about northerners? LOL]
Cheers!
DW
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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I am a Northerner, who has moved South because my husband is military and most military bases are in the South. Yes, it really is what they think. I got picked up once, in SC because I had IL tags on my car. The state trooper first words were, "What are you doning in SC with IL tags?" Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
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Good dialogue as Cash bails Paige out of trouble by the river and then good build up of suspense as Cash tries to explain away signs of the ghost while Paige remains convinced something is going on. :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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And I'm not going too - to
Good dialogue as Cash bails Paige out of trouble by the river and then good build up of suspense as Cash tries to explain away signs of the ghost while Paige remains convinced something is going on. :-) Brooke
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and your support. I appreciate both. I can't wait until the day I make no errors.
Comment from c_lucas
To the young, history is not very old. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Very good job.
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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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To the young, history is not very old. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Very good job.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate your support.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
