Savannah Love
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Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
Summer went zooming by, as it seems to do faster &
faster every year. I spent most of last week helping
my daughter get her room set up for the new year. It
helps me keep my hand in.
Paige is either very reckless or is very naive. Either
way, a ghost is going to be the least of her worries
if she keeps making poor choices.
thanks for sharing
have a great school year
love,
jan
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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barbara:
Summer went zooming by, as it seems to do faster &
faster every year. I spent most of last week helping
my daughter get her room set up for the new year. It
helps me keep my hand in.
Paige is either very reckless or is very naive. Either
way, a ghost is going to be the least of her worries
if she keeps making poor choices.
thanks for sharing
have a great school year
love,
jan
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Barbara. Seems like the ghost has already announced his/her presence in Paige's house. That arises my curiosity even more...:)
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Hi, Barbara. Seems like the ghost has already announced his/her presence in Paige's house. That arises my curiosity even more...:)
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from wleeb
I really like the flow of your writing. You write very natural dialogue. Your characters come across as believable.
I noticed one small error: "one of boys holding a tripod..." should be "one of the boys holding a tripod..."
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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I really like the flow of your writing. You write very natural dialogue. Your characters come across as believable.
I noticed one small error: "one of boys holding a tripod..." should be "one of the boys holding a tripod..."
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from EMB
This is good writing, Barbara. The flow, narration, and characterization is excellent. (Nala seems a little dim-witted to me, but she's preciously dim-witted.) I also thought that the football hero scene could've been spiced up a little. It couldn't taken the teenager some time to recognize him, or something like that.
Overall, a very nice read. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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This is good writing, Barbara. The flow, narration, and characterization is excellent. (Nala seems a little dim-witted to me, but she's preciously dim-witted.) I also thought that the football hero scene could've been spiced up a little. It couldn't taken the teenager some time to recognize him, or something like that.
Overall, a very nice read. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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I will consider both areas. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from whispersofthesoul
hiya,
firstly this is another well written chapter that is in keeping with the previous chapters they meet easily and the flow of reading is smooth.
the story line is moving along quite nicely and the interest is still there (which is good :), and the suspense is great.
your dialogue is staying strong and your character are still nice and strong
well done keep it up
whispersofthesoul xx
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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hiya,
firstly this is another well written chapter that is in keeping with the previous chapters they meet easily and the flow of reading is smooth.
the story line is moving along quite nicely and the interest is still there (which is good :), and the suspense is great.
your dialogue is staying strong and your character are still nice and strong
well done keep it up
whispersofthesoul xx
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from AprilShower
Time sure does fly by quickly. It doesn't seem that long ago that I stood in my own classroom and thought of all the teachers before me who taught there. Now the building no longer exists. I guess ghosts live on in our memories and in old movies.
I'm wondering who turned the light on. Good story, Barbara.
April
April
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Time sure does fly by quickly. It doesn't seem that long ago that I stood in my own classroom and thought of all the teachers before me who taught there. Now the building no longer exists. I guess ghosts live on in our memories and in old movies.
I'm wondering who turned the light on. Good story, Barbara.
April
April
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from guinea
Very good write. The imagery is grear. Like the story. I love your charcaters. Especially Paige and Cash. Look forward to more. Shows deep thinking.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Very good write. The imagery is grear. Like the story. I love your charcaters. Especially Paige and Cash. Look forward to more. Shows deep thinking.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rtobaygo
VERY INTRIGUING CHAPTER. YOU BROUGHT AN ELEMENT OF DANGER INTO PAIGE'S LIFE THAT FORCED CASH TO RESPOND QUICKLY.. YOU HAD A NICE BALANCE BETWEEN SHOWING AND TELLING AND YOU EXPOSED MORE ABOUT YOUR OTHER MAIN PROTAGONIST'S BACKGROUND. KUDOS!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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VERY INTRIGUING CHAPTER. YOU BROUGHT AN ELEMENT OF DANGER INTO PAIGE'S LIFE THAT FORCED CASH TO RESPOND QUICKLY.. YOU HAD A NICE BALANCE BETWEEN SHOWING AND TELLING AND YOU EXPOSED MORE ABOUT YOUR OTHER MAIN PROTAGONIST'S BACKGROUND. KUDOS!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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THANK YOU FOR THE KIND REVIEW AND YOUR CONTINUED SUPPORT.
Comment from gerard71680
Wow this is really interesting. your very gifted. i didnt get to read the previous chapters or parts is this a finished project that you worked on?
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Wow this is really interesting. your very gifted. i didnt get to read the previous chapters or parts is this a finished project that you worked on?
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Adri7enne
"Close to the river, he noticed a group of teenage MALES standing around a petite Female. As he jogged toward them, he saw ONE OF BOYS... It's just my opinion, but I would prefer "teenage boys" to 'teenage males". It seems to withhold their humanity. Although I agree that a gang of teenage boys sometimes seem hardly human. LOL!
I'm wondering what he had on after he removed his shirt.
Interesting development, barb. Ghosts don't usually play with electic wiring, do they? LOL! I guess your ghost will do whatever you direct it to do. Well done, barb.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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"Close to the river, he noticed a group of teenage MALES standing around a petite Female. As he jogged toward them, he saw ONE OF BOYS... It's just my opinion, but I would prefer "teenage boys" to 'teenage males". It seems to withhold their humanity. Although I agree that a gang of teenage boys sometimes seem hardly human. LOL!
I'm wondering what he had on after he removed his shirt.
Interesting development, barb. Ghosts don't usually play with electic wiring, do they? LOL! I guess your ghost will do whatever you direct it to do. Well done, barb.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
